YaP Posted April 8, 2009 Author Posted April 8, 2009 Chapter 6 is up ! Ethan starts to show his creepy side... and lots of other interesting developments ;-) Enjoy !
Drewbie Posted April 8, 2009 Posted April 8, 2009 Ethan is gonna kill Storm isn't he Edison might be good for Sean, must be worried about home and missing it. West just ugh.
Benji Posted April 8, 2009 Posted April 8, 2009 Ethan is gonna kill Storm isn't he Edison might be good for Sean, must be worried about home and missing it. West just ugh. ...........Wasn't that the other way around in the first chapter? Sean overhearing his parents conversations and blaming himself? Sean ran to the bathroom. Splashing cold water onto his face, he stared at the mirror, breathing hard. Sean clutched the sink, his fingers turning white.
David McLeod Posted April 9, 2009 Posted April 9, 2009 You do know who's story your reading right???... Yeah, I know. But there's always a chance...
Meeko Posted April 9, 2009 Posted April 9, 2009 Yeah, I know. But there's always a chance... That's like saying CJ doesn;t write cliff hangers. It ain't ever going to happen David. =(
Tiff Posted April 9, 2009 Posted April 9, 2009 Ethan is gonna kill Storm isn't he Edison might be good for Sean, must be worried about home and missing it. West just ugh. Ethan does get crazier in this chapter and of course he wants and plans to do bad stuff, but like Benji noted, the beginning of chapter 1 offers a glimpse of where the story goes and how it ends to some extent. But if you thought otherwise, that's a good thing! As an author, I managed to trick you! I think Edison is a cutie and would make a fun boyfriend. And West is definitely an asshole, but hey, you never know...people can change. Yeah, I know. But there's always a chance... That's right David! Keep your hopes up! That's like saying CJ doesn;t write cliff hangers. It ain't ever going to happen David. =( And YOU, Assface! Don't discourage other readers from hoping the story line will eventually turn happy or um, normal. Hope you're having fun with your "boytoy." You should do something with his hair, btw....
Drewbie Posted April 9, 2009 Posted April 9, 2009 I think storm might have to kill him for self defense basically. (if that's the case)
Meeko Posted April 9, 2009 Posted April 9, 2009 Ethan does get crazier in this chapter and of course he wants and plans to do bad stuff, but like Benji noted, the beginning of chapter 1 offers a glimpse of where the story goes and how it ends to some extent. But if you thought otherwise, that's a good thing! As an author, I managed to trick you! I think Edison is a cutie and would make a fun boyfriend. And West is definitely an asshole, but hey, you never know...people can change. That's right David! Keep your hopes up! And YOU, Assface! Don't discourage other readers from hoping the story line will eventually turn happy or um, normal. Hope you're having fun with your "boytoy." You should do something with his hair, btw.... I happen to like his hair the way it is.
Tiff Posted April 11, 2009 Posted April 11, 2009 I think storm might have to kill him for self defense basically. (if that's the case) The characters are predictable. Or just sane, unlike Ethan. I don't want to give anything away, but the story does slowly lead up to some sort of confrontation or show down. I happen to like his hair the way it is. Maybe you just gave me a bad picture of him. Take another one!
David McLeod Posted April 12, 2009 Posted April 12, 2009 Just when I thought I had the story figured out, you threw in new characters and new plot twists. I like the way you introduced West. The action in the last part of the chapter was excellent. Lots of mystery at several levels, lots of questions about character motivation. Great chapter.
Tiff Posted April 12, 2009 Posted April 12, 2009 Just when I thought I had the story figured out, you threw in new characters and new plot twists. I like the way you introduced West. The action in the last part of the chapter was excellent. Lots of mystery at several levels, lots of questions about character motivation. Great chapter. Yes! If you thought you had the story figured out, and I managed to redirect the plot and your whole perception of things, then Yes! Gotta keep you readers interested, I think one of my beta-readers told me the whole thing was predictable, so let's see what you think as you read along. West doesn't have a big role in this chapter, but he'll show up more. Thanks for commenting!
Sir Galahad Posted April 14, 2009 Posted April 14, 2009 ...........Wasn't that the other way around in the first chapter? Sean overhearing his parents conversations and blaming himself? Sean ran to the bathroom. Splashing cold water onto his face, he stared at the mirror, breathing hard. Sean clutched the sink, his fingers turning white.
YaP Posted April 26, 2009 Author Posted April 26, 2009 (edited) Chapter 7 is up ! old friend meets new enemy (or friend ??) enjoy ! Edited April 26, 2009 by YaP
YaP Posted April 27, 2009 Author Posted April 27, 2009 And Chapter 8 is now up as well ! Yay, more to read !!
Benji Posted April 27, 2009 Posted April 27, 2009 And Chapter 8 is now up as well !Yay, more to read !! ...........Yay!!!!!!!!!! Thanks for the surprise chapter!! West is certainly an interesting character!! Although I thought 21 years of age is a bit long to realize your a gay person. But I suppose certain folks take longer (Me at 6). Ethan is a very scary person, didn't Storm hire a P.I. to check out Ethan? What happened with that? Well, six weeks left of the 'imposed' vacation, lot's of stuff to come up I'm sure1
Drewbie Posted April 30, 2009 Posted April 30, 2009 Aww, to cute with Edison and Sean I can see what you mean by age 21, but some do repress it for that long.
YaP Posted May 10, 2009 Author Posted May 10, 2009 Chapter 9 is up ! Read more about West and Sean.... and find out how crazy Ethan might really be ;-)
Benji Posted May 10, 2009 Posted May 10, 2009 (edited) Wasn't expecting that. What will Storm do now? ..........I thought Ethan was just going to wait until Sean got back home before he did anything bizarre. His preempted strike is a look into his darker psyche. I remember Storm saying he was going to make a few phone calls inquiring about Ethan in either chapter 2-3, I assumed he had either contacted a P.I. or the police. So I am a bit perplexed into why they have not brought in outside 'forces' on Ethan yet, why let a crazed fanatic run around into their lives? Ethan is dangerous and needs to be reigned in. Sean is oblivious to Ethan's actions back home, I'm not sure Storm is doing the right thing in leaving him in the dark, especially if he has address's of the Uncle. Edited May 10, 2009 by Benji
Tiff Posted May 11, 2009 Posted May 11, 2009 Wasn't expecting that. What will Storm do now? Heya Drewbie! Ethan shows his crazy bit by bit, starts off slow and unassuming, then comes out full force! Thanks for commenting. ..........I thought Ethan was just going to wait until Sean got back home before he did anything bizarre. His preempted strike is a look into his darker psyche. I remember Storm saying he was going to make a few phone calls inquiring about Ethan in either chapter 2-3, I assumed he had either contacted a P.I. or the police. So I am a bit perplexed into why they have not brought in outside 'forces' on Ethan yet, why let a crazed fanatic run around into their lives? Ethan is dangerous and needs to be reigned in. Sean is oblivious to Ethan's actions back home, I'm not sure Storm is doing the right thing in leaving him in the dark, especially if he has address's of the Uncle. Ohh, that's what you meant. I should clarify things a bit. I think it was around chapter 2 or 3 that Ethan met Sean's family and Storm was so turned off that he decided to make some phone calls as in planning to send Sean off for the summer, whether it was in Florida or California. Because prior to that dinner and conversation, Storm had been talking with Rachel about trying to separate Sean and Ethan. However, you do make a very valid point about the outside forces and Storm leaving Sean in the dark. With the outside forces, I think I wrote about a restraining order. As for anything further, such as locking Ethan up, there is no real proof of anything, and of course Ethan is smart enough to cover up anything dark from his past. With the law, it's all about technicalities sometimes, even if there's a psycho on the loose. But thanks for bringing that up. Secondly, Storm definitely should tell Sean what has been going on. But sometimes parents try so hard to shield their children and it ends up hurting them even more. That's Storm's big mistake; thinking Sean is still a child and treating him like one when he really needs to include Sean as an adult. Thanks for your insightful feedback/comments, Benji!
Sir Galahad Posted May 12, 2009 Posted May 12, 2009 What Ethan's next move will be is anyone's guess, I just hope he doesn't go after little Sammy as payback to the family! I hate to gloat, but...... ..........I thought Ethan was just going to wait until Sean got back home before he did anything bizarre. His preempted strike is a look into his darker psyche. I remember Storm saying he was going to make a few phone calls inquiring about Ethan in either chapter 2-3, I assumed he had either contacted a P.I. or the police. So I am a bit perplexed into why they have not brought in outside 'forces' on Ethan yet, why let a crazed fanatic run around into their lives? Ethan is dangerous and needs to be reigned in. Sean is oblivious to Ethan's actions back home, I'm not sure Storm is doing the right thing in leaving him in the dark, especially if he has address's of the Uncle. I totally agree the guy is psychotic. so am surprised Storm never did anything before now. I mean, come on; the guy has broken into their house, played mind games over Sammy, confronted Rachel in the supermarket. The Storm will blow up at any time I feel. Sean & West finally get it on, be very interesting to see where that goes. Personally I think they're made for each other. Great chapter Tiff.
split001 Posted May 20, 2009 Posted May 20, 2009 I had put up reading this because I'm graduating college next month and had tons of things to do...finally found some free time, and it was oh SO worth the wait. I've gotta say Tiff, you're one of the best writers I've seen on this entire website. I hope you keep giving us these amazing stories as long as you can. Here's to (selfishly) hoping this particular story will be a long one! Haha.
sat8997 Posted May 20, 2009 Posted May 20, 2009 I'm sort of hoping Ethan follows Rachel and Sammy to Florida. That way Hiro has a chance to go all...well...'Hiro' on his crazy ass.
Meeko Posted May 26, 2009 Posted May 26, 2009 I'm sort of hoping Ethan follows Rachel and Sammy to Florida. That way Hiro has a chance to go all...well...'Hiro' on his crazy ass. My thoughts exactly Sharon. Let Hiro kick his ass!
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