YaP Posted June 2, 2009 Author Posted June 2, 2009 Chapter 10 is there to be read ! I think Sean and West are way cute :-)
Benji Posted June 2, 2009 Posted June 2, 2009 Chapter 10 is there to be read ! I think Sean and West are way cute :-) ...........A nice quiet chapter, I loved West's jealous tirade in the smoothie shop! Storm has at least alerted Sean's Uncles on Ethan's latest caper. The police weren't much help, Humm, I wonder if Ethan is using his real name? Skyler's suggestion that Storm start stalking Ethan has some merit, but he should really let a pro do it. I was surprised Ethan didn't make an appearance, I kind of expected him to jump out at any second!
Drewbie Posted June 5, 2009 Posted June 5, 2009 ...........A nice quiet chapter, I loved West's jealous tirade in the smoothie shop! Storm has at least alerted Sean's Uncles on Ethan's latest caper. The police weren't much help, Humm, I wonder if Ethan is using his real name? Skyler's suggestion that Storm start stalking Ethan has some merit, but he should really let a pro do it. I was surprised Ethan didn't make an appearance, I kind of expected him to jump out at any second! I loved that too, also with storm talking to skyler about stalking ethan.. Ethan will probably get caught soon but I hope storm won't go to jail.
DragonFire Posted June 5, 2009 Posted June 5, 2009 Well, I've finally caught up, and what a ride it's been. I think this chapter is the calm before the storm. My gut tells me that Ethan is going to make his presence felt very soon, and not in a good way. We have to remember that Storm does something to Ethan, as was evidenced in the first chapter. But as people have said before, I have a feeling that's a bit of a Trojan horse thrown in to confuse us! I really do believe something will spring out to surprise us down the road. It was nice to see West getting all possessive and protective over Sean and seemingly getting more comfortable in getting to know him a lot better! The pebble has been thrown in the pond; I await the Tsunami that follows!
Sir Galahad Posted June 5, 2009 Posted June 5, 2009 Maybe it's my suspicious nature, but that chapter was a little too quiet. Tiff's planning something devious, I can feel it. Mmmm.
Tiff Posted June 6, 2009 Posted June 6, 2009 ...........A nice quiet chapter, I loved West's jealous tirade in the smoothie shop! Storm has at least alerted Sean's Uncles on Ethan's latest caper. The police weren't much help, Humm, I wonder if Ethan is using his real name? Skyler's suggestion that Storm start stalking Ethan has some merit, but he should really let a pro do it. I was surprised Ethan didn't make an appearance, I kind of expected him to jump out at any second! I love how you think, concerning the real name. A quiet chapter indeed, but I'm merely providing more scenes of interaction between the main characters and some humor to alleviate any potential upcoming tension and heartache, not that I'm giving anything away... Thanks for reading and commenting. I loved that too, also with storm talking to skyler about stalking ethan.. Ethan will probably get caught soon but I hope storm won't go to jail. That scene between the twins was fun for me. Sort of like JOMM all over again, with the brothers connecting, especially over some of the serious things they broached upon. As for Storm...well, you'll see, Thanks for reading and commenting. Well, I've finally caught up, and what a ride it's been. I think this chapter is the calm before the storm. My gut tells me that Ethan is going to make his presence felt very soon, and not in a good way. We have to remember that Storm does something to Ethan, as was evidenced in the first chapter. But as people have said before, I have a feeling that's a bit of a Trojan horse thrown in to confuse us! I really do believe something will spring out to surprise us down the road. It was nice to see West getting all possessive and protective over Sean and seemingly getting more comfortable in getting to know him a lot better! The pebble has been thrown in the pond; I await the Tsunami that follows! Calm before the storm, and the tsunami that follows, awesome. It may seem predictable, but I have to lay the foundation of fear. Or get you readers all comfortable and "awwing" over West and Sean, and then WHAM! evil and terrible things. Thanks for reading. Hope the future chapters live up to the tsunami expectations. Maybe it's my suspicious nature, but that chapter was a little too quiet. Tiff's planning something devious, I can feel it. Mmmm. It's totally your suspicious nature! Someone must have been badmouthing me behind my back. I never plan anything devious. Nonetheless, it doesn't hurt to throw in a cute, sweet chapter every now and then, right? Thanks for reading and commenting!
YaP Posted June 21, 2009 Author Posted June 21, 2009 Chapter 11 is up for reading ! it seems the cute and sweet times come to an end
Benji Posted June 21, 2009 Posted June 21, 2009 Chapter 11 is up for reading ! it seems the cute and sweet times come to an end ..........Agreed the good times are over!! Crew is a little thick in the head;
Drewbie Posted June 21, 2009 Posted June 21, 2009 (edited) ..........Agreed the good times are over!! Crew is a little thick in the head; Edited June 22, 2009 by Drewbie
Conner Posted June 21, 2009 Posted June 21, 2009 The love scene between Sean and West was totally hot! West is a keeper. It was sweet when he insisted on returning with Sean. I believe Sean really needs him to be there as well. I really enjoyed Edison's complaining about West and Sean's "behaviour" in the movie theatre. It was so accurate as far as straight guys go, even "accepting" guys like Edison. They just get all clammy and wierded out. Edison, of course, will never admit that, on some level, he thought it was hot. Edison was really saying, "Don't do that stuff in front of me 'cause it gives me....these thoughts....that I don't want to have!" I always get a kick out of use of the term "member" when referring to the penis. While you have the House of Representatives in the US, we, in Canada, have Members of Parliament. When speaking in assembly, they refer to one another as the "Honourable Member" from ...(whatever area that member represents). Ok, so when the voting comes up next year for the 2009 GA author awards, I'm definitely going to nominate Ethan as the best "antagonist" for his role in this story. I just love to hate him. :2hands:
YaP Posted June 23, 2009 Author Posted June 23, 2009 Ok, so when the voting comes up next year for the 2009 GA author awards, I'm definitely going to nominate Ethan as the best "antagonist" for his role in this story. I just love to hate him. :2hands: Yea, he really is hateable, isn't he :-). I'll second that nomination !
Tiff Posted June 24, 2009 Posted June 24, 2009 ..........Agreed the good times are over!! Crew is a little thick in the head;
DragonFire Posted June 29, 2009 Posted June 29, 2009 Well the tidal wave is building, and the tornado is starting to stir, I wonder who it's gonna take out! Was there any doubt that the cuddly times would last....look who the author is after all!!
Tiff Posted July 2, 2009 Posted July 2, 2009 Well the tidal wave is building, and the tornado is starting to stir, I wonder who it's gonna take out! Well...the story takes a turn in the next chapter...finally! Thus far, I've only been building up to it, not nearly enough dark and creepy stuff IMO. Was there any doubt that the cuddly times would last....look who the author is after all!! Hey!...no, wait, you're right. That's true, I bring those expectations on myself. Hope I live up to the non-cuddly times. Thanks for commenting.
YaP Posted July 7, 2009 Author Posted July 7, 2009 Chapter 12 is up and ready.... beware... Ethan is back in action :wacko:
Drewbie Posted July 7, 2009 Posted July 7, 2009 Chapter 12 is up and ready.... beware... Ethan is back in action :wacko: Wasn't expecting that how he'd get Sean, but he is a bit of a coward. Ethan better harm him more, which will probably will happen, come on west Good chapter tiff 1
David McLeod Posted July 7, 2009 Posted July 7, 2009 It never ceases to amaze me how Tiff can imbue such ordinary words with so much tension. The corners of my room seemed to darken as I read the last chapter...yet it was morning, and the sun was rising. Now that is writing. 1
Benji Posted July 7, 2009 Posted July 7, 2009 ..........................Stupid, that is what the chapter should have been called!! Storm can identify Ethan's voice as his attacker, yet the police don't pursue it, stupid. The family knows that Ethan is crazy and is out to 'reclaim' Sean, yet no extra precautions are taken, stupid! Kessler knows Sean wants to confront Ethan, again nothing! Finally Sean runs alone after Ethan in the parking lot, someone he figures to be at least a serial stalker, someone who is dangerous that has already attacked his father, stupid!! Great chapter, didn't see that coming!! 1
DragonFire Posted July 8, 2009 Posted July 8, 2009 Her Majesty, the Queen of Evil strikes again! I think it was always on the cards that Sean would do something totally dumb, and he didn't disappoint did he? I was surprised that he wanted to confront him at the beginning of the chapter, but for him to actually do it, and then get abducted.... You would have thought the police would have at least questioned Ethan over the attack on Storm, not just sat back and done nothing. There inaction could be fatal, but for whom I wonder! 1
Tiff Posted July 9, 2009 Posted July 9, 2009 Wasn't expecting that how he'd get Sean, but he is a bit of a coward. Ethan better harm him more, which will probably will happen, come on west Good chapter tiff I guess I built it up a bit more, making Ethan sound crazy. However, I thought it was smarter and almost smoother of Ethan to draw Sean out, make Sean come to him, which was ultimately his plan. More passive at first, and since he feels like he's "in love" with Sean, he didn't quite get violent or murderous...yet lol. I guess his love comes first. It never ceases to amaze me how Tiff can imbue such ordinary words with so much tension. The corners of my room seemed to darken as I read the last chapter...yet it was morning, and the sun was rising. Now that is writing. Aww, you flatter me, but thanks, David. I was hoping the readers would get a strong grasp of the tension and emotions such as Sean's frustration and desperation to just get rid of Ethan, have life go back to normal, and just be happy and young and in love. Thanks for commenting. ..........................Stupid, that is what the chapter should have been called!! Storm can identify Ethan's voice as his attacker, yet the police don't pursue it, stupid. The family knows that Ethan is crazy and is out to 'reclaim' Sean, yet no extra precautions are taken, stupid! Kessler knows Sean wants to confront Ethan, again nothing! Finally Sean runs alone after Ethan in the parking lot, someone he figures to be at least a serial stalker, someone who is dangerous that has already attacked his father, stupid!! Great chapter, didn't see that coming!! Hahahah, you make a very excellent point, Benji. I should start naming chapters in the future. "Stupid" does seem to sum it up. But I also think there is a sense of realism to the stupidity factor. When things like these happen, not everyone is prepared for it, and even once it happens, don't know how to go about it. For example, not to make a dig at the cops, but often times cops don't take things seriously. It happens. As for Kessler, from a friend's perspective, and also as someone inexperienced and young in these matters, doesn't think to alert anyone. Lastly, Sean was thinking purely on emotions, and of course he had the false sense of security of being in a public place. I think more or less, a majority of us feel that way too, the more people around the safer it is, which often isn't true. Her Majesty, the Queen of Evil strikes again! I think it was always on the cards that Sean would do something totally dumb, and he didn't disappoint did he? I was surprised that he wanted to confront him at the beginning of the chapter, but for him to actually do it, and then get abducted.... You would have thought the police would have at least questioned Ethan over the attack on Storm, not just sat back and done nothing. There inaction could be fatal, but for whom I wonder! Why thank you for the fancy title, lol. And I LOVE it. Yup, you got it right with Sean. From the beginning, he's some spoiled, naive, and innocently stubborn guy who's in between the child and adult phase where he thinks he knows it all. So it was definitely in the cards he'd make a dumb decision. You raise a good point about the police. I guess it could be interpreted in different ways, such as the police being indifferent about a stalker case for homosexuals or perhaps just not taking it seriously enough, because it's a common mentality to be inactive until something actually does happen and that's when they start trying to fix their mistake. It could be a little of both. But more than that I just kept Ethan in the shadows. Thanks for commenting! 1
Drewbie Posted July 9, 2009 Posted July 9, 2009 (edited) Good points, He "loves" sean but not in a healthy way and whatever else is nutty about him. Edited July 9, 2009 by Drewbie
Tiff Posted July 10, 2009 Posted July 10, 2009 Good points, He "loves" sean but not in a healthy way and whatever else is nutty about him. Lol, I think from the very start, we knew something was loose in Ethan's head! But the whole kidnapping thing, drawing Sean out, it kind of fuels Ethan's belief that Sean loves him, you know? Like, Sean came to him, not the other way around. So it's feeding the flames, so to speak. Just a nutjob.
YaP Posted August 12, 2009 Author Posted August 12, 2009 Chapter 13 and Chapter 14 are up !! So.. time to sit back and enjoy the reading. Although.. be aware.. Ethan shows how cruel and f***ed up he really is... and its not pretty at all ! So be prepared !
Drewbie Posted August 12, 2009 Posted August 12, 2009 (edited) Chapter 13 and Chapter 14 are up !! So.. time to sit back and enjoy the reading. Although.. be aware.. Ethan shows how cruel and f***ed up he really is... and its not pretty at all ! So be prepared ! He is I want to go down with storm and take care of him. smart thinking of sean though, also I wonder if west will be able to get in touch with zeke and skyler Sadly I wouldn't put it past ethan to kill sean.. Edited August 12, 2009 by Drewbie
YaP Posted August 12, 2009 Author Posted August 12, 2009 Two more! I posted both together, since chapter 13 was on the shortside. I'm also not the greatest at writing suspense/adventure/thrillertype of stories, so if there are any holes in the plot or flaws in thelogic, please forgive me! This is how it all came together in my mind! Oh Tiff, you are way too humble . I think you did a great job writing a suspense/adventure/thriller type story here ! And i could not find any holes in the plot or flaws in the logic so far.. so it seems it comes together in your mind just the way its supposed to be Keep doing what you are doing and all is well
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