Site Administrator Graeme Posted March 10, 2011 Site Administrator Posted March 10, 2011 Come On Rain by Rilbur Alex loves Alyssa, but then she decides to take off with a strange note that almost invites him to come after her. He's not about to let her go... If he can just get there in time. :nuke: :nuke: Spoilers Below!!! :nuke: :nuke:
Site Administrator Cia Posted March 13, 2011 Site Administrator Posted March 13, 2011 Awww, such drama! I like the way the flashbacks and the present scenes blended, it was as very pertinent through the story and it didn't affect the flow like that can at times. I actually laughed when I read the last line. Like, D'oh! I can't believe he said that but hell, let's go with it! lol. Great story.
Nephylim Posted March 13, 2011 Posted March 13, 2011 That was fabulous, really well written. The drama was intense and the flashbacks in some ways relieved it and in some ways added to it I really hope he made it. The last two lines were genius
Rilbur Posted March 14, 2011 Posted March 14, 2011 I do have a question, but did anyone catch the underlying... lets call it 'premise' of the lady's actions?
Frostina Posted March 14, 2011 Posted March 14, 2011 That was fabulous, really well written. The drama was intense and the flashbacks in some ways relieved it and in some ways added to it I really hope he made it. The last two lines were genius Ditto! :D The last two lines..
Site Administrator Cia Posted March 15, 2011 Site Administrator Posted March 15, 2011 I do have a question, but did anyone catch the underlying... lets call it 'premise' of the lady's actions? Do you mean how she picked the Red Eye, called in the song request of 'Come On Rain?' and there was a post-it note there with the number for her radio station when in this day and age we have speed dial and phone address books? I think she was giving him a kick in the pants, hoping he'd come through. Seems like it worked with how hard he was working and his intentions Female manipulation at its best. (that's if I have your question right and am not just totally reading into it what I want )
Rilbur Posted March 15, 2011 Posted March 15, 2011 (edited) Cia, you pretty much hit it on the nail Hopefully, I wasn't too blunt with it, either! Edited March 15, 2011 by Rilbur
Frostina Posted March 15, 2011 Posted March 15, 2011 Cia, you pretty much hit it on the nail Hopefully, I wasn't too blunt with it, either! So, that means she would be waiting for him in the airport, NOT getting on that plane, yes? :P Manipulation at its best! indeed!!!
Rilbur Posted March 18, 2011 Posted March 18, 2011 So, that means she would be waiting for him in the airport, NOT getting on that plane, yes? She's a woman. If he doesn't show up in time, she'll expect him to drive across the country to come find her instead. ./ducks and covers
C James Posted March 19, 2011 Posted March 19, 2011 I do have a question, but did anyone catch the underlying... lets call it 'premise' of the lady's actions? A classic set-up! And she got him! Well done; the flashback worked very well IMHO.
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