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The wonderful thing about writing fiction is that you can create your own world. The idea of cross pollinating plants is very mild in the scheme of creative writing.
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I have always thought this series was about Will. He is growing up surrounded by rich and powerful people so it is no surprise he is such a "take charge" kind of person. He has learned from the masters and will only become stronger.
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My uneducated guess is about 1925. Before the great depression.
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We are getting no clues of the time frame. No clues about the money in the safe. Maybe the author has reasons for being so mysterious.
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Cadet Third Class • III
davewri commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Cadet Third Class • III
Please don't kill off any of the characters we know. Bring in a new bad guy that deserves knocking off. -
When we went to my great aunt's funeral we were surprised when her sister showed up almost when the service was over. She had been at the house plundering jewelry and silver.
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Just found this little essay. Amazing you wrote this before Betsy Devos took over the Department of Education..............
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That's why I said it was a "minor" cliff hanger. We know you are capable of a real cliff hanger.
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And the result of last chapter's minor cliff hanger: As far as Ritch knew, Bruce Donovan never made it to a class at the Academy again.
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By the response from Stef, he might already own at least a part of them.
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His father staring at deaths door might have changed his attitude towards his son. We will see.
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Did Donovan run his mouth and say that the dads supplied him with alcohol? Will Donovan cause trouble at the academy for Ritch? Is this a "cliff hanger" or what? Things were going way too easy for Ritch. Time for some drama in this story.
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Cadet Fourth Class • IV
davewri commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Cadet Fourth Class • IV
Doesn't mean they won't try. -
Cadet Fourth Class • IV
davewri commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Cadet Fourth Class • IV
Ritch definitely needs to keep his guard up. Lot of potential traps for a rich young man. -
Somethings are worth reading twice 😜
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Cadet Fourth Class • II
davewri commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Cadet Fourth Class • II
No short chapters, please. Longer is better 😜 -
So exactly how large is this "boat"? Boat generally refers to something small. Is it a yacht or ocean liner that can carry 300 kids and crew?
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Sell that boat and buy a new one.
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This should be a good sign to you that your readers actually respond to what you write. Just struck me as somewhat "old fashioned" the way it was written.
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That remark about sewing jumped out at me also.
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Erik Dean Prince , former U.S. Navy SEAL officer, and the founder of the private military company Blackwater, is the brother of former U.S. Secretary of Education Betsy DeVos. (Not that this is relevant to the story but it is interesting.)
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Nothing much has been mentioned yet that money has been recovered. How much?
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There was an idea that a huge amount of money was going to be claimed from the bad guys accounts. Where is that money?
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So is this guy really wealthy? Spending big money here.
