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A highly engaging story with a strong hook and confident first-person voice, blending everyday routine with paranoia. Trauma leads to memory gaps creating an unreliable narrator that keeps the reader disoriented.
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A compelling short story with an eerie psychological edge. The narrative is memorable, with a great twist. I love the flashes of dark humor!
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The Seraphim's Decree
andy cannon commented on ValentineDavis21's story chapter in The Seraphim's Decree
A great opening chapter! I look forward to this journey: “Your path has been set for you. Your pilgrimage begins now.” -
A funny, charming coming out story for the ages, filled with vivid caracters and realistic dialog. AND a happy ending! What more can we ask for? Bravo, Inkognito!
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A really delightful story, one that made me laugh out loud more than once. I would read a whole novel about Eli and the ants' union. The locker room scene was hilarious. And this line sums up my whole life: He was in the IKEA instruction manual for building the closet, but someone had stolen the screws.
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This is shaping up very nicely. I can't imagine that the forces inside the dam perimeter will let Alex and Kenny drive off in the high tech equipment to regroup and strike again, so the next chapter should be a doozy!
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Chapter 1: Shadows and secrets!
andy cannon commented on vanalas's story chapter in Chapter 1: Shadows and secrets!
As F. Scott Fitzgerald said, "Let me tell you about the very rich. They are different from you and me." 😄 -
Chapter 1: Shadows and secrets!
andy cannon commented on vanalas's story chapter in Chapter 1: Shadows and secrets!
Grandpa is an malevolent presence right off the bat. Dean seems to be cool. Nathan is a bit of a blank canvas still with a lot of potential. Plenty of tension and drama. Great start! -
A ripping tale, but Alex has such a methodical, rational personality, almost coldly so, that I feel he has forgiven Brian's shocking betrayal very quickly. Love is, indeed, blind!
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A raw, introspective, and emotionally charged personal narrative, confessional in tone, that navigates themes of self-awareness, emotional detachment, love, regret and personal growth. Written as journal entries that straddle memoir and therapy, with a candidness that’s both unsettling and deeply human. Very powerful, and well worth reading.
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The Art Of Letting Go
andy cannon commented on Jason Rimbaud's story chapter in The Art Of Letting Go
A sad train wreck of a relationship slowly, inevitably crawls to its conclusion. Jason sums it up: But he felt torn between his love for me and his love for a better life without me in it. Upon hearing those words from him tore me apart. I was keeping him trapped in this cycle, preventing him from letting go. At least he developed enough self-awareness to see how destructive they were together and the courage to call a time of death. A beautiful piece of writing. -
Already high stakes are pushed up a bit. I assume that if the guys at the dam are alert to deer wandering around their perimeter, a transport plain dropping stuff in a nearby lake would pique their curiosity.
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Åke is so wonderfully naive still! This exchange perfectly sums up their relationship, and he just doesn't seem to grasp it: ‘Come on, Ocky, don’t get so excited. We aren’t lovers. We are chess friends.’ ‘Chess and fuck friends, you mean.’ ‘Sort of. Still it doesn’t make us a couple.’ Kevin got up. ‘I’m going to take a shower.’ Kevin, on the other hand, knows exactly what is going on: ‘Yes, I also accept it’s a draw between me and your Dutch chess friend.’ It was a most extraordinary thing for Kevin to say, Åke thought.
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...I Can't Figure It Out
andy cannon commented on Jason Rimbaud's story chapter in ...I Can't Figure It Out
Watching this relationship lurch to a halt by drips and drops is so tragic. -
Well, looks like Brian's got some 'splaining to do!
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Yea! Road trip! Let's stock up on snacks and buckle up. Who has the playlist queued?
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The Thing About Konstantin Is...
andy cannon commented on Jason Rimbaud's story chapter in The Thing About Konstantin Is...
Just when we think it is safe to go into the water, Konstantin always seems to show up again. Another great chapter! -
Great chapter. I can see why Alex can tell the helicopter doesn't have lights on, but how can he tell the transponder is turned off?
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A terse and ominous opening to this story. Well done!
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Jason... Jason... Jason... have we learned nothing?
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I think you are onto something there.
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Chapter 1: When darkness whispers!
andy cannon commented on vanalas's story chapter in Chapter 1: When darkness whispers!
The pacing, atmosphere, and dialogue are deftly handled. It balances action, horror, and intimacy with precision. Great chapter. -
Prologue: Where it all begun!
andy cannon commented on vanalas's story chapter in Prologue: Where it all begun!
Very promising! The story reads like a legend retold, part myth, part prophecy, anchored by themes of power, sacrifice, and cyclical corruption. It blends epic fantasy with intimate emotional moments, managing to feel both sweeping and personal. Its tone is reminiscent George R.R. Martin’s moral grayness, with a touch of dark Gothic romanticism. -
A gorgeous tale about a love letter made of shared music. Well written and wonderfully nostalgic.
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An achingly beautiful story of finding the love that has been within reach all along revealed through carefully curated playlists. I want to to go back and listen to all these tracks again now! But who recorded the pivotal acoustic cover of "MMMBop"? Or is that just poetic license?
