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That is wild how things haven't changed much when governments want something. Its a shame we can shoot them back. I like the Grady, always the practical one.
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Ok. What did I miss again?! Am I dealing with magical unicorns /horses or hot farmers turning into demons? I refuse reading the book one. Is there a summary of it?
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I didn't think the Maverickville in 1800 was so wrong. Even worse than Orel's. Im gonna get my gun to join the boys, but they have to wait till summer. The Canadian winter is too cold for me.
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Thanks. Let's hope I can move the story smoothly forward.
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Rick has already initiated but for himself.๐
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The sky over the Sea of Marmara thinned from copper into a violet haze, the light dissolving slowly, as if reluctant to leave the water. The rock beneath them held the memory of afternoon heat; it pressed upward through fabric and bone, steady and almost intimate. Salt clung to their forearms. Somewhere behind them, cutlery struck porcelain in a cafรฉ, the sound traveling thinly across the promenade before being swallowed by wind. Rick lay back on his elbows, ankles crossed, narrating the wo
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The first time Rick kissed him, it felt like a joke. Salt on his cheek. Wind in his mouth. Laughter close enough to pass for safety. Later, in another country, in a kitchen with colder light and windows that didnโt open the same way, Liam would remember that night by the water and try to locate the exact second when his life tilted. He would search for a crack in the structure โ a warning sound, a visible fault line, he would never find. Warning: Although the whole plot, jokes, scenes and thoughts are mine, I used a lot of help from AI. I might go through the whole story and rewrite it myself for now my apologies.
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Chapter 5: Origin of babies
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 5: Origin of babies
Rick and Liam have just two options, grant Tiffany's wish or convince her it's not possible. Or in Rick's case he has to lose weight. Otherwise she won't give up. -
Jack should start selling items on Etsy and he'll be rich in no time. A box of glitter of hope, a smelly magical sock, a condom full of alpha sperms,...
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I think I might have a problem!!! You are probably not the only one๐ Was losing his virginity not enough motivation?!๐
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There was so much sex and so much information, it was pretty difficult to concentrate ๐ but....Could Gabriel make any more mistakes, specifically now that he's the target of another of his kind? And in the end Sean left him without even a kiss! ๐ I just wonder if Lonnie could get into Gabriel's account , couldn't he see the transactions? Or Scott made random stuff up without paying attention to the sum?
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Chapter 1: The car that purrs
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 1: The car that purrs
Oh no. You really can't compare a Japanese car with a German beauty.*feels insulted*. But seriously, I get your point. It's totally a different feeling. An electric car with all of its fancy stuff is more about comfort but the real feeling of driving and the connection with the engine is not there anymore. I mean the electric cars are great from 0-60 but still I prefer a Porsche ( not the e version) on an Autobahn. That's why Liam was not happy either. ..."Liamโs hands remained on the wheel a beat longer than necessary. โIt doesnโt roar,โ he said quietly, as if returning to his original question. โIt somehow purrs.โ Rick nodded. โItโs not trying to impress you.โ โThatโs what bothers me,โ Liam admitted, and then, because he had to puncture sincerity quickly, added, โI prefer a Porsche Cayenne on sunny days. Something that makes noise like it has opinions.โ... -
The warmth rose without announcement, seeping through the thin soles of their socks and settling slowly into their knees as they sat on the floor among boxes that smelled faintly of cotton and cardboard and something older โ milk, perhaps, or talcum powder worked so deeply into fabric it had become part of it. The air carried that quiet residue of small bodies once lifted and changed and carried, and the storage room held its symmetry with the stubborn order of a space that had already been orga
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CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
Kileoli commented on LJCC's story chapter in CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
Wow, I hope for Klebber and Dennis does not take that long? And I thought me and my husband are the dramatic unromantic couple. BTW, don't you want to write your story? It sounds irritatingly interesting to read๐ -
CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
Kileoli commented on LJCC's story chapter in CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
Exactly my point, Dennis and Klebber are so cutely disturbingly scarred and imperfect, that I don't think being one of them or having them as a lover is a real winning. Even their love is nothing to envy. That's why I wonder what @LJCCwant to have? -
CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
Kileoli commented on LJCC's story chapter in CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
I have a ton of friends who got divorced in the pandemic, so, er, I didn't want to say anything if that happened to you. ๐คฃ But yeah, I'm also bitter about this story, but the Klebber and Dennis have lived in my head for two years, and all I can say is their love story is pretty annoying, and all I've been saying is, "Why can't it happen to me?" I really have no idea what I said that indicated extra portion of negativity during COVID. I mean it was a nightmare came true all over the world and depending on which country people they were, lives were changed more or less. But that was me probably making a common statement. Looking back, I really didn't have it bad, mainly pissed because of the useless limitations, and strange rules turning running to my only possible addiction. Now that I'm fully back to my weekly climbing- dosage ,im totally fine. To be honest I had tons of home Office hours which I professionally spent on gaming and procrastinating. so no divorce, it's not even worth bothering about it since it's gonna be too expensive ๐ But from your annoying characters that the reader wants to strangle from time to time, which one do you want to be? Or which one can't happen to you? The cute sexy traumatized Klebber or the rich Dennis with his issues worth years of therapy? ๐ -
CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
Kileoli commented on LJCC's story chapter in CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
That sounds very creative ๐คฃ and considering the second world war and all the German history, it's not uncommon in South America to have some kind of knowledge of the language or variations of words. But it really fits him to work as a glue, and hopefully we get to see more of his gluing talent on Dennis ๐ https://de.wikipedia.org/wiki/Klebstoff -
CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
Kileoli commented on LJCC's story chapter in CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
I have nothing against romantic protagonist, they can live happily ever after. :๐ -
CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
Kileoli commented on LJCC's story chapter in CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
That must be the German in me, I read the name Klebber the first time and I was like who name their kid "glue". And then on this chapter you just mentioned it that he should keep the family glued, so yeah, it was funny for me. -
CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
Kileoli commented on LJCC's story chapter in CHAPTER 13: DAY 9 - THE PIRATE SHIP
Lots of Background info and why Klebber is the way he is. But why still BFF? Funny reference at glue and Klebber, I kept on wondering if at some point you'd mention this๐ Maybe it's the way the story is told, I haven't seen the original Netflix thing. I like the characters but I don't feel any connection to them. If your plan was to make it like a documentary, you did a good job. -
Chapter 4: Parameter study
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 4: Parameter study
I played a few times with the idea of Rick's father walking on them, but then I thought Rick would have suffered years of celibacy ๐ -
Chapter 4: Parameter study
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 4: Parameter study
๐คฃor a successful double fitting of parameters for Liam -
Chapter 1: The car that purrs
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 1: The car that purrs
Lol, that totally makes sense, an engine running smoothly,...purring . But no, that does not make any sense to neither me nor Liam, a purring car can only have an electric engine and in best case, the car itself is stable enough that you can hear almost nothing when it moves under 50kmh. ๐ -
Monday, 15:45 Rick was still drying the saucepan when the front door opened with a force that sent a muted vibration through the hallway wall. He paused, cloth in hand, listening to the echo settle. That kind of entrance usually meant something had gone wrong. Or may be not this time. Liam appeared in the doorway carrying the outside air with him, the cold clinging faintly to his coat and hair, but the energy in his face had little to do with winter. His eyes were too bright, too focus
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Why does it sound so stupid not admitting their love and end their suffering?! Poor Andrew.
