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I do like to mix modern and fantasy. I can use a society and world where a reader knows with rules and then throw in the occasional sexy man with a forked tongue and venom that makes their mate hot and horny for fun. I'm glad that it written well enough to be original and entertaining as fantasy yet still be 'believable'. Thanks so much for the review!!

A drunken one? My bff has the hugest celeb crush on him. I think... ewwww... he's so dingy looking. But lookie you, hob nobbing with celebs!

I wanted to write a lot more about this story and characters myself. How knows... maybe I keep this going off and on as I have time. For now, I took it to a part where I thought it made sense to leave it. I'm glad you liked it anyway. Thanks for the review Ghanbrews!

Thanks Mark! This story just... fizzled for me though I have several more chapters completed. SO many stories and so little time to finish them all! I would like to complete this one so I will try to get it done. I reviewed and corrected a few places in Ch. 2, thanks for letting me know about those errors. That is a common mistake for me, my fingers type slower than my brain flows at times. Thanks so much for the review!

Trust can be a fragile thing. It has to be built and nutured in order to hold two people together. You're right, they didn't get a good foundation before this happened. That will definitely play into the future chapters. I'm glad you gave the story a chance. Quite often I will have a dominant character but I try to keep things realistic. A couple is rarely made up of polar opposite partners, typically the flow of power between them is fluid. Dominance in bed or in manner doesn't necessarily mean that the character will be the overbearing alpha male type. I hope you continue to enjoy the story. Thanks for reading the Carthera Tales!!

Awww, so you don't want me to make it magically all better? You talk about me torturing my characters!! When I write a relationship into a story I like to give the characters a conflict or issue of some sort, yes. In real life we have to overcome issues all the time. If they can recover from this one... that remains to be seen. I mean, Dav tried to KILL Ellis. How do you go back from that? Anyay, I don't want to spoil future chapters so I'll stop there. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing aditus!

Oh, it's okay, no spoiler worries from you. I just knew you'd possibly look in here before you read and didn't want to spoil it for you You're the only one who uses the forum after all, lol. This twist surprised even me! The fact that Dav would immediately distrust Ellis is part of his life to date but all Ellis feels is betrayed. The bond between them has been damaged and whether or not they can recover from that, or even if Ellis wants to, is the stuff of future chapters so I can't spoil that You'll just have to wait for the next update to find out where they go from here! Sorry!

Maybe you can take the disparity between the number of people who click on your story to see the details versus the number who actually go on to read a chapter as a direct statement to your marketing the story. The description, genre, tags chosen.... all those things can help readers make up their minds about whether or not to read your story. When I link to my stories in my forums, I link to the TOC page so I expect those numbers to be higher than the chapter reads. For me, I simply view the average chapter reads to tell me how big my audience is for a story, combined with the number of reviews I receive, to tell me how I am doing as a writer and how much people are enjoying and want to continue to read the story.

It is sinuous and tempting. That shy glance over a bare shoulder and little roll of your hips are beyond my ability to resist. A chance moment becomes an opportunity for more. I slide in, taking up the empty space around you. My hands float above your waist, where I keep them, relishing the heat radiating from your dewy skin. Your hair drags against the hollow of my throat as you roll your head to the side and back with your eyes closed. You bite deep; your white teeth bury in your succulent bo

Well Chapter 7 is posted! Was it what you expected? Did I surprise you? Did you like this chapter, hate it? I won't say anything more so I don't ruin the surprise so go, read! Hypnotic Chapter 7

"Wake up Ellis." A hand was shaking me roughly. I recoiled away from the painful grip and sat up with a gasp. I was still in the bed, and Dav's face slowly drifted into focus. I rubbed my face, shaking a little. "Jesus Dav, you scared the shit out of me!" I complained. “It’s not like I wasn’t attacked last night or anything. How about you take it easy on the wake up calls for a little while?” "Yeah, not the worst of your problems right now. You need to get dressed right now." Dav turned

Thank you Dannsar. This topic has been raised before, a few times actually. For example, you can read one about what you should post, according to Lugh, here and another topic about giving feedback in general here. I get pm's from people asking if this or that type of commenting is okay for reviews or pm or not at all, quite often.. I have to say, it's all subjective to the skill and knowledge of the person reviewing and the person they are reviewing for. Everyone handles criticism differently and it can be hard to tell how a person will take a comment you feel is honest but they might consider an attack on their writing if you don't know them. Basically it comes down to this for me. I put right on my profile, 'If you don't want an honest answer, don't ask me.' I rarely sugar coat my comments when I feel something should be said, but I try to temper it by also mentioning things I like. My writers I beta for know this. I typically use a gentler style when reviewing, since I haven't been specifically asked, per se, but I still hold to the same tenet. I feel both should be shared, what a writer does well and what they need to work on and those are things I try to point out. Also, for anyone who reads this, YES, I welcome the very same courtesy returned to me and be blunt, I can take it. I cannot get better as a writer if I don't know I'm doing something wrong. Conversely, I like to know what/how I am writing that is working for readers.

Awwww, it's blank. Is no review a good review? You didn't flame me, so that's nice, right? JK Thanks for the intention to leave a review, lol!!

Thanks!! I know, there was just so much in my mind that could have gone with this story but I have A LOT of story ideas partially written already you guys have never seen. At least now I have the basis for a longer story if I ever get enough time to get back to this one. Thanks for the review hun!

This was supposed to be under 1k for a writing prompt Dribble. As I wrote I kept having to curb my desire to make it a longer story too! Thanks for the review Damond!!

Hey Daddydavek! Thank you!

Well with the whole, who do they marry, will it turn to love, will they have peace just wouldn't come to me quickly. Ah well, every once in a while a longer short story to a prompt is okay, right? Thanks for the review, can't wait to see what you come up with!

The priests have proclaimed that I must marry Zaran, the leader of the army that had decimated my people for years. His reputation was fearsome but life couldn't get any worse for me, could it?

“You will do your duty!” my father thundered. I bowed my head, my fists clenched as tight as my jaw. I stormed from the room, not daring to speak. I’d been meek my whole life. I obeyed without question, accepted the strictures placed on me. That hadn’t done me a bit of good. Neither had blowing up, and finally after many long years, releasing my iron grip on my temper. That had earned me a pair of guards and a day of fasting to purify me to receive Stygianius’ wisdom. It wasn’t right. I’d hop

Yes, this was part of a creative writing course I found online (info in my forum) and this one prompt. I just sat down to do a quick short story for GA Prompt #76 and it turned into an almost 3k short story. Funny how one small thing can get the gears turning. I am so glad you enjoyed the story, thanks for the review Sean!

Mebbe!

LOL! Well thank you! Thanks for the review but you know, that's okay, sometimes I never get beyond the first chapter of a story either. Or I want to, but I get sidetracked or busy and don't get back to it. I always love it when a story sucks me in so much that I have to keep reading beyond chapter 1.

My favorite movie quotes: Toy Story: You are a sad, strange little man. And you have my pity. Gladiator: What we do in life echoes in eternity. Favorite Book quotes: A Wrinkle in Time: "But you see, Meg, just because we don't understand doesn't mean that the explanation doesn't exist." Anne of Green Gables: "You'd find it easier to be bad than good if you had red hair... People who haven't red hair don't know what trouble is." (LOL) From the Dune Series: If you need something to worship, then worship life — all life, every last crawling bit of it! We're all in this beauty together! Randomness quote: For all those people at Walmart (You know you laugh at those too!): Gene Police: You!! Out Of The Pool!

Well the nookie was all important to their relationship dynamic so it's not reached gratuitous levels yet but I'm glad you enjoyed it, lol. Don't worry, more story will be coming on schedule, or close to it! Thanks for the comments hun!

I taught you a new word? Cool! I love it when I have to look things up. I have to mix up the cliffies, review, chapter, you know-keep you on your toes. I don't do the whole embarrassment thing too often on my characters, I blush for them when I write and I hate that feeling, lol, but I had to add in the line about the boss hearing them having sex. I think besides your parents, that's just about the worst person you would havelistening in for pure blush factor, LOL. Thanks for the review!