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What a lovely review!! Thank you so much, I'm floored! Lately I've been hooked on showcasing the evolution in the emotions of my characters. I wasn't sure if I managed to bring it all to life but your review reassured me that it came through to you at least. Thank you so much for your kind words!

Wow! You're fast! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you liked the story. It was one I really liked but ran out of steam shortly after starting. All of a sudden I got the ending and I spent all one afternoon and evening working on it. Refining by my beta and Viola! One 'beautiful' story. Thanks so much again for reviewing!!!

I'm extremely deadline oriented I tend to write best with a goal. I like to post once a week so I usually write to accomodate that. I don't push it though. If I don't feel like writing I don't. Usually when I do I will go on a writing jag and just kick out the pages. I feel like if I make it a 'job' then what's the point of having writing as a hobby?

"Nice bracelet." The customer smirked at the pink, blue, green, and purple circle around my wrist. I nodded without looking at it or him. It was a gift from my daughter and I wasn’t willing to talk about it, especially today, and definitely not to someone who was being such an ass. "Here is the invoice for the repairs. If you'll just sign it on the line at the bottom." I slid it across the counter with a small feeling of satisfaction. The total at the bottom was an eye-popping amount, just

Time always moves on, whether we are ready or not.

Okay, you have me completely confused. You want me to revise a story to straighten out some points and yet you didn't read the whole thing? If you start on Chapter 21 of course there are going to be things you don't understand. If you are talking grammatical errors, it would have been helpful if you had pointed out specific instances because I have no idea what you mean. My stories are not snapshots or short stories labeled as chapter 1, 2, 3. Each story has it's own title here in GA Stories, with the chapters from 1 to however many, making up the whole story.

Wow! This story really grabbed my attention and I had to read all of it in one go. It was really good. We really got Rosaly/Ross' emotions and confusion. Your writing style was fluid enough that the large time skips worked, though usually I find them too jarring. I was really glad that you gave the story a happy ending but it felt like you cut it off right at the good part. We don't get to see any of the interaction between Nash and Ross and that's really a shame. I wanted more of the happy ever after part of the story to balance out the angst of the rest of the story. It just felt too... abrupt. Like you cut the story short, not finished it.

Great pics guys!

I have to agree with a lot of what Westie said. I never went back home but almost all of my other siblings have. I couldn't image the stress. I've had sibling a stay here with her family for 4 weeks and thought I was going to go mad. You definitely deserve a gold star. And a calendar with a countdown date circled on it

Pretty good story. I liked the way the main character didn't think of himself as good but he cared and took care of Jonny. My biggest wonder was where he got the card in his pocket and why he had it. I definitely think you portrayed the story very well with the title Predators. There are, after all, many different kinds.

This is a good short story. You really do let us feel what your characters feel as we read. The biggest thing that detracted from this was the errors. You had a lot of incorrect word usage or misspells that detracted from the story as I read it. It was distracting. FInd a beta or editor to smooth that out and this will be a great piece.

Thank you Ande. This story does seem to be most popular. I tried to keep it real and yet still add in elements of a happy ending throughout the story so it wasn't all doom and gloom. Switching POV's is actually something I have to work on so that it's not jarring. I try not to switch too often but I've found that I can't stick to just one. I'm obsessed with making sure a story flows even as I switch pov's so I'm glad it worked for you! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

I'm a mishmash. At my dad's house biologically I was the youngest til I was 9. Then he married I became smack in the middle with 1 older step and 2 younger steps. As a teen I would visit my mom and there were 6 of us and I was 2nd oldest. I'm not quite sure where that puts me I've been middle and youngest. I have to say middle probably describes me the best, though not all of it fits. I'm married to a youngest.

Unfortunately the story does not ring any bells for me. Did you try searching the genres or tags in GA Stories in case the author has posted it or we moved it during the changeover? Do you remember if this was in e-fiction or a hosted/promising author or in the archive? Single chapter short story or a serial chapter? That might jog the memories of members who come across this topic. In the meantime, welcome! I hope someone comes through and helps you find the story, on or off GA.

Hmm... I guess you have a good point about him coming home with them. I think that I glossed over that in part because I intend for that aspect to be highlighted later. There is still quite a lot to come with this story, more than I thought there would be. I will look at the parts with the Jaguar though and see about changing some of that. The naughty bit was a bit graphic for me. I've been a tad more overt a time or two but not often. I also agree less that more for the most part. I was trying to tread that thin line of having the sex actually written in but not a play by play. If I was less lazy you would get more than one chapter a week but I'm not, so You're just nicer to your readers than I am, sorry!! lol Thanks for the specific comments. I really like hearing what does and doesn't work for readers too!

The Jaguar huffed, odd sounds of amusement as he looked at Bashta. "You are silly, Dear One. Your clan, all clans, are my people. I created you; I succor you in times of trouble and share with you in times of joy. I will sing for you, for both of you, in your bonding ceremony." He padded over to stand directly in front of Cavel and Bashta. "Stand." They stood before him. "Bow." Each bent and the Jaguar touched his forehead to each of theirs briefly. His warm silky fur felt like a soft caress

No longer a teen. You're getting old already! Hee hee!! Happy Birthday!!

I'm cool on the whips and chains front so I know it's hard to find people if you're not quite 'normal'. No platitudes will be served here. Sometimes people don't find that 'special someone' they are waiting for, it's a fact. Can't sugar coat it. I truly hope you find something that will make you happy though, even if it's not a person. I hate the fact that you're unhappy and all the way over there and I'm here. I'd take you out for a drink or ten and we could talk toy collections and eyeball men and women together. Hugs hun. It's not much but we're here for you when you need to vent. I hope it helped a bit.

I'm just a lazy ass. I like getting my exercise vicariously through reading about all you did. Yep, I'm agreeing with Sharon, I think I got a whole workout just listening to yours! Wonder if Mr. Friendly will come on any stronger, so I'll be checking back, Mr. Braggart. JK! You're not bragging. You work hard to look good so good for you. And while Yang mentions a good point about being careful about your body you're obviously seeing a doc so I'm assuming you are being careful and not going overboard. Don't make us couch potatoes squish you if you become workout addicted to the point of danger now.

Small towns with sherrifs don't usually have unmarked cars. We didn't have any in our county for a long long time so I never think of them when I write small town. Besides, if he was caught now what else would I use for the rest of the story? Andy kicked me around a bit on my timeline for the court cases but I tried to keep the action/cop stuff as realistic as I could get it. Thanks for continuing to review as you read. It's been fun getting your comments the last few days!!

I think a lot of teenagers get that sort of advice, especially if it looks like their relationship is serious. I was 16 when I got together with Josh though so I'm a firm believer that young teens can make it if they really want to find the balance between life and love, no matter what the gender the couples are.

Thanks dear. Who knew you were parading through my story outting people? Bad you! Bad you! Hugs!!

Nah, that's what a lot of people look for in books or stories they like to read, some way to connect to the plot or the characters. Some people like the familiar. Others like the stories to be completely unfamiliar and are more fantasy fans. It depends on the story and my mood for me. P.S. I'm glad I am not a guy The idea of waking up wet and sticky, lol. No thank you!!

Of course jocks can be gay Gay people come in all types and preferences, so why not jocks? It's just prejudice that keeps most of them from being able to admit it. I like challenging stereotypes!

It was a bit of an error in one way. In my head his mom had gotten him a new phone the next day but I just forgot to mention it. All fixed now! Thanks hun, for the reviews and helping me keep the story plausible!