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@Zuri Once enough is revealed, I am here waiting for you to judge my magic system for its coherency. Exciting! 😂

Oh I'm so excited for having you here as a reader. This story… goes places, but I promise we'll always be back in Oregon Please enjoy. And thank you for your comment, it means the world. 💚

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I always wish I read more Sci-Fi. I'll use this post as a guide

💙 Thank you. It was rather hard to write, because of the heartbreak… I cried lol

She did try her best, I guess. Like Beatrice, she might have her own agenda. But this agenda might be way bigger than pack politics … 🤔 Hmm.

I shall repeat myself by saying that all my women are strong. Back in Ch 3 on Grey's 15th birthday, Grey perceived her as someone weak, dejected, uncaring. She appears different to him even after such a short period of absence from the pack. And she hopefully isn't as bigoted as her husband either. But who knows? I certainly don't! (Or do I?) 💙 I guess we'd have to find out where Beatrice's allegiances lie. I hope someone can shed a light on this, I would like to know!

Oh thank you so much, I've had a rough day, and this helps immensely I'm seeing it through to the end and more. Thanks for being here, reading, and for the comment!! 💚

A lighthearted funny and silly moment 😁 He stands as Warden of the Sheet of Time. Just because humans and those similar have immediacy as a key element to understanding timelines, doesn't mean he does. 💛

🙂 He may simply not know. If you house an aquarium, you don't know what's going to happen to all the fish in there. Just because you created a living environment, doesn't mean you have more than just a macro view of it. They didn't expect Theodore to be able to traverse between realms and siphon power. Hopefully! 💚

And that's the one aspect of your world building, you avoid going into specifics 😜 I can't just info dump it! Where would be the anticipation, the wonder? "Sebastian, could you please repeat the insult one more time, this time breaking the fourth wall, speaking directly into Grey's camera? Great! And could you step one step back, so that half of your face is in the shadows? Stop, stay this way. Perfect! And action!" I didn't break the fourth wall, but Clara did once say, "I believe this narrative requires a clarifying Clara to move things along. Dave, Grey is wolf. Werewolf? I don’t know how that works. Grey, Dave is a… something. He makes things happen. It happened before. And it happened last night. I think this is all tied to this place. You were meant to come here, both of you. And today is a good day." Grey kinda is already talking to the reader anyway. Benefits of 1st person POV I can confirm that the next story is not from Mark's POV.

Is Grey a professional DOP, is he just an iPhone filming hobbyist, or more like the GoPro adventure documentary kind of guy? Last chapter for example… I have this picturesque scene where everyone is. The confrontation. Luna kneeling. Maybe it comes through better in the followup chapter the next few days. And everyone just has an iPhone 😛 Oh, I absolutely take no issue in that particular aspect—that's a great concept 👍 I come with these things as I go along, and it feels fraudulent at times. The only part of the world that is planned out in full detail is the Seven Piers of Origination, but that might be because I did the world building on that without even having a story. Right now I am revising my outline to see if the pacing still matches my original goal. I had 50 chapters planned, then it was 54, then less again. I don't know where I'll end up with.

Yeah it does make sense. Over 50,000 words and what has really happened? XD I get it, it is valid criticism. I still am happy I chose it. Certain parts of the story are so much better because the wolf gives feedback. They are two entities as one. It also plays into the fact that the wolf is with someone from birth and why turning someone wolf is so frowned upon. Sure, this would be stronger if I had the POV of someone turned, like Mark or Dave, but I never said this would be the only story in the universe 😛 I always feel like I am losing plot and subplot, but that is hopefully just me being a very stern critic of myself. The main plot sometimes feels very weak to me "Big bad does curse, remove curse to solve" and Theodore has no layers to himself. There will be more layers later but I wasn't able to show them yet. I feel like the first person POV without head-hopping is limiting, but I fully embrace and have to find other ways around it. Yup. I think it worked well in Aaru. I'm not cutting between shots, but in my mind I have a camera on my characters—which often is a first person POV from my protagonist. I then use that to write.

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Nope Never have I ever been to Greenland

I wrote and edited for 6 hours and forgot to eat. How is everyone else doing? Weekend!!! @Mikiesboy How is the snow?

Why, then, do you think, you get so may "laughing" reactions to your comments? 😉

Another author's comment: I thought my scene of Dave shifting slowly and failing miserably was so funny that everyone would just focus on that, but alas, no. Sad. I can write porn, but not comedy it seems XD

So, no retcons then? And I don't mean the Torchwood ones I hope so! If they happen, it's because I forgot something about my own story XD Well… thanks I guess?

lol. Nice article. I think many authors on this site relish on torturing their readers who in return relish in the pain. I'm just getting of a taste of it right now.

This was the day I learned I might be ok at writing pornography. Who knew...