Parchment_Of_Love

Thanks Hun!

Anxiety…heart pounding, guts wrenching, anxiety; that is what Drew felt the next morning when he awoke. He just kept imagining the worst possible scenarios where Jordan might suffer a deadly fate, and Luke may be hurt by a homophobe. As they were getting ready Luke could sense Drew’s unease. He could sense the anxiety in his touch, his voice, even his look. As Drew stood in front of the bathroom mirror his heart throbbed painfully loudly in his chest. He looked into his own fear stricken eyes

Nemphy, you need to stop making me cry. I can never catch up on your chapters during work or school because I am always crying either out of happiness or sadness. The point is my make-up is ruined every time lol. I love this story so much. Your level of creativity never ceases to amaze me and your characters are just so darn loveable! Gosh, Bridge and Star better make it....*sniffles*.

Thanks guys. I got it fixed!

Title: Falling out of the closet Reviewer: Nephylim Hmm Jordan sounds like a good guy so I think he would love Drew no matter what. I wouldn't be surprised about a little antagonism with Luke though. I don't think that he would make Drew choose but who knows. Awesome as usual hunAuthor's Response: Thanks Nephy! Date: 12/14/2010 01:56 AM Title: Falling out of the closet Reviewer: hh5 Mystery who shot Rose, Waiting for Drew to visit jordan, what david next move, still wonders how much jordan changed, sounds like he's in a bad placeAuthor's Response: Poor Jordan...he would have alot to deal with if he was to return. Rose...hmm well, we all know she is pissed. Jeff is furious, Luke is fed-up, Drew is well Drew, and poor Daivid is about to have a mental breakdown, go hide under his bed in the fetal position, and hug his stuffed teddy bear. Date: 12/13/2010 02:37 AM Title: The Truth Reviewer: hh5 ok i can be wrong but I'll say the David Father. But since not all the facts are in ... the issue can be bigger than I have imagined. Wow Luke changed a bit more. Wonder if Drew can get use to that? Author's Response: Not giving anything away hehe. I think Drew will cope just fine. Date: 09/06/2010 07:49 PM Title: The Truth Reviewer: Nephylim It was after Drew’s with rose that he caught Luke by the arm as he headed for the exit .... that doesn't make sense. I reckon you got too excited writing it. i mean hell it's exciting to read. That was an awesome chapter. It makes me shiver to think of what happened that night. We are definitely getting closer to the answers though. I wonder what will happen next... will David join forces with Luke and Drew to find the truthAuthor's Response: Haha I guess i did get excited. I best go and fix that. Thanks, Luke knows who is behind it he just can't remember just yet. David well we never know what he is going to do. I myself don't even know till I get there. Date: 09/06/2010 11:21 AM Title: The Truth Reviewer: Elezbed Good story and at last, it is a coming out of the closet that everybody will remember ....Good storyAuthor's Response: Thanks Hun. Date: 09/06/2010 08:25 AM Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: hh5 Is there more?Author's Response: Yes Dear, there is more. I just have yet to figure out what that is yet. Don't fret it will get finished. Date: 06/01/2010 12:46 PM Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: hh5 Oh wouldn't things be even out if David was outed. I know it would change things. It would be a matter if any one would treat David differently. Date: 04/05/2010 10:52 PM [Respond] Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: acht-acht Noooo - what´s happening? Cliffhangers are evil. You got me so so curious now about Ty and David. David seems so irrationally crazy angry, there just has to be something else eating him. And the phone call? Jordan? I hope he comes back.Author's Response: Ahhh, yes David is a tough one to figure, and as for jordan...well... you'll just have to wait and see. Date: 04/05/2010 02:44 PM Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: Nephylim Oh my goodness. What happened? This story is so complex and so sweet. You've got us so used to being concerned for Luke and Drew that we've forgotten there are other people who could get into trouble... like Rose. I like Rose Nice storytelling.Author's Response: Thank you so much! As for what happened you will just have to wait and see. Date: 04/05/2010 06:03 AM Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: dachcr This is becoming a rally good story! Cannot wait to see how the guys are going to treat David. Date: 04/05/2010 03:00 AM [Respond] Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag Reviewer: jhol7689 Aww I love it Luke and drew make a cute couple. Now it makes me wonder if David is in the closet. Can't wait for the next chapter =] Date: 03/15/2010 02:15 AM [Respond] Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag Reviewer: hh5 more to help the merrier Date: 03/14/2010 10:59 AM [Respond] Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag Reviewer: Nephylim Interesting. the story is moving along. Things are I think about to get interesting. No. They have always been interesting... let's say... exciting again. Sweet. I like stories with a lot of dialogue and that chapter was so easy to read. Although I think you would get some flack if there were too many like this. Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, this chapter was very dialogue heavy. I just needed things to develop a bit quicker and that was the most effective way to do it. I wanted to keep it simple =). There wont be many of these chapters. This may be the only one like this..who knows? Date: 03/14/2010 08:11 AM Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag Reviewer: Elezbed well now they have two more friends ^^!Good chapter and write more Date: 03/14/2010 04:01 AM [Respond] Title: David Reviewer: hh5 Gosh the mystery of David anger on Luke What can the reason be Date: 02/19/2010 11:08 AM [Respond] Title: David Reviewer: Nephylim That was a really good chapter. I love Rose. She's been a bit of an in the background character until now but she has really come out and shone in this one. Luke is certainly lucky with his friends. Looking forward to the next installment - I am VERY interested to know what Drew has figured out and what he can do with it. Date: 02/19/2010 02:02 AM [Respond] Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: Wyndham Wonderful! I Really enjoyed it, thank you.Author's Response: You are very welcome! Date: 02/01/2010 09:54 AM Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: hh5 Passion at its best!!Definitely Luke on his way to healing and be loved renewed Date: 01/27/2010 09:54 PM [Respond] Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: Nephylim It's going absolutely fine. That was a very touching chapter. There was fun too but the focus was the emotion that the guys were releasing and it was very sweet. I wonder what's the deal with David... it gets more and more intriguing. I suspect that he might have been the one to kill Tyler and that's why he wants Luke dead... because he might figure it out. We'll see if I'm right Date: 01/27/2010 02:02 AM [Respond] Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies Reviewer: Nephylim That was breathtaking. So sweet. I loved it. Drew was very brave and it paid off. I am loving the snake... always wanted one but never got around to it. There is still a lot of tension in the air, what with David and Jordan and I have a feeling this story has a ways to go but just for now everything is calm and all is right with the world Date: 01/17/2010 08:51 AM [Respond] Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies Reviewer: Elezbed So cute... I wonder if the snake was a pet that someone let it go in their house to make them afraid...Good chapter, write more! Date: 01/17/2010 01:30 AM [Respond] Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies Reviewer: hh5 now i can't wait till these two make the bed squeek jane awake!!! Date: 01/16/2010 09:31 PM [Respond] Title: Settling Down Reviewer: Nephylim It's coming along fabulously. This has to be one of my favourite stories... yes it is definitely one of my favourite stories and I get excited when I see a new chapter posted. I am so in love with Luke and Drew is such a sweetheart. Keep up the good work. Date: 01/14/2010 11:02 AM [Respond] Title: Settling Down Reviewer: hh5 great chapter. both are getting acquainted with each other. Luke is slow to settle in and drew is gaining more friends. Date: 01/14/2010 09:47 AM [Respond] Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers Reviewer: Nephylim Ahhhh. that is so beautiful. There is no way they are going to be able to ignore that for long. It's going to be beautiful... well if they survive long enough. We still don't know Luke's full story and we don't know why David is so all set to kill him... so much more to come and I can't wait Date: 01/11/2010 05:55 PM [Respond] Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers Reviewer: acht-acht It´s great. Hurry up, I wanna know what´s next. And i want to hear more about asshole David. Cheers, Clara Date: 01/11/2010 09:04 AM [Respond] Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers Reviewer: pumukli Great story! I like it very much! Thanks. Date: 01/11/2010 01:57 AM [Respond] Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers Reviewer: Ricky A great read. I can't wait for the next one. Date: 01/11/2010 01:32 AM [Respond] Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers Reviewer: Elezbed No don't stop here, I want to know what happen after and how David is going to react! Good chapter and write more ^^! Date: 01/11/2010 01:17 AM [Respond] Title: Thunder and Lighting Reviewer: Ricky Another tender moment. Likeing it better with every installment. Date: 01/11/2010 12:39 AM [Respond] Title: Keys & Air Mattresses Reviewer: Ricky Saweet! Is he too sore to even suck tongues? I better turn the page quickly! Date: 01/10/2010 11:58 PM [Respond] Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Ricky Likewise. Getting better and better. I just hope the bad guys get theirs. And then there is Jordan to find. Date: 01/10/2010 11:30 PM [Respond] Title: Roomies Reviewer: Ricky Getting Juicier but now I am getting concerned. David and his bunch haven't shown up in the hospital yet and brass knuckles break bones! So off I go to the next chapter. Date: 01/10/2010 11:17 PM [Respond] Title: He Dreams in Anguish Reviewer: Ricky Great. I'm not so sure I would have stopped where he did. No witnesses and they were already down. I think I would have finished the job, put the piece in David's hands and left him to take the blame and die of his wounds. Date: 01/10/2010 10:58 PM [Respond] Title: Last Words Reviewer: Ricky The only complaint I have is the damn chapters are so sissy short! Bust out with some man size chapters. You no sooner become ensconced in the fantasy of it before you have to return to reality. A great story LineAuthor's Response: I'm not sure if I should be offended or not. I'm leaning more toward offended. Date: 01/10/2010 10:24 PM Title: Stormy Weather and Guilty Hearts Reviewer: Ricky Awesome. Getting sweeter. Date: 01/10/2010 10:00 PM [Respond] Title: Persistence and Background Info Reviewer: Ricky Delightful. Thanks Date: 01/10/2010 09:40 PM [Respond] Title: High School and New Faces Reviewer: Ricky Another Great Chapter.Author's Response: Thank you! Date: 01/10/2010 09:10 PM Title: Thunder and Lighting Reviewer: hh5 yes very very nice - wonderfully work out good idea of what goes between the two.Either a combination of lovers or brothers. Date: 01/10/2010 12:29 AM [Respond] Title: Keys & Air Mattresses Reviewer: Elezbed Don't stop here!!!!!!!!!!!! I want to know what happened after this sentence!Good chapter and I wonder how you are going to make Luke loved by the inhabitants... Date: 01/09/2010 02:09 AM [Respond] Title: Keys & Air Mattresses Reviewer: hh5 Is Luke younger than Drew?Gosh I think its still a mystery of what really happen with Luke and his father. Inspite of what every one thinks. Surprise that there wasn't a trial or Luke being in jail?? So it must have been an accident rather a murder?Author's Response: Yes, Luke is younger then Drew, but not by much. At the very start of the story it is Drew's 18th birthday. The death of Luke's father was an accident (that was mentioned by someone...Rose I believe) although nearly everyone in the town seems to think otherwise for reason that will become quite clear later. There is one detail that no one knows about that 'accident'. Luke will go into detail about it in a later chapter. I hope I cleared everything up for you. If you got anymore questions feel free to ask! Date: 01/08/2010 08:50 PM Title: Keys & Air Mattresses Reviewer: Nephylim I think it's awesome as ever. You are really keeping the tension going. I am in suspense the whole time not quite sure what is going to happen next. Very nice.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Date: 01/08/2010 05:25 PM Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: hh5 Nice Chapter but I wonder do I have to worry about Drew and or Luke from here on.Author's Response: I'm not quite sure what you mean. Things may seem okay for the moment but do not think David will stay dormant for long. These two have a long rocky road ahead of themselves. Date: 01/07/2010 11:47 PM Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Kodes100 I really like this tale.Also I don't think you need to keep apologizing for mistakes.The few mistakes have not interrupted the flow of the story.I appreciate your ackowledging them - but you are starting to be paranoid & that can't help the creative process.Be a little easier on yourself.I am an avid reader & I think your writing is pretty good.You will learn the more you write.Bravo to you for "Always."Author's Response: Thank you, I tend to harbor on my mistakes. Thanks for your words of wisdom and for your positive feedback about always! It means the world to me! Date: 01/07/2010 04:09 PM Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Nephylim If I did I didn't notice, I was too caugh up in the story. It's rare I read every word no matter what I am reading... occupational hazzard... but I read every word of this. It's an edge of the seat story and I can't wait to see what happens next. Date: 01/07/2010 01:13 PM [Respond] Title: Roomies Reviewer: hh5 oh now its starting to get juicy Date: 01/05/2010 11:43 PM [Respond] Title: Roomies Reviewer: Nephylim This is an excellent chapter. I feel so sorry for Luke... even his own family!!! As I say and keep saying... yeah grammar adds polish and makes a story easier to read but at the end of the day it's all about the story and how it is told... and this is a good one. I am looking fowards... with some trepidation... to what comes next. As a slight observation I would say that it feels to me as if Luke is recovering a little too quickly from two serious beatings and an abdominal stab wound (albeit a shallow one) resulting in surgery... all in 24 hours. But that's just an observation and not necessarily a criticism. As was commented on lately... I must like hospital beds because my characters seem to spend a lot of time in them :pAuthor's Response: Haha Thank you. Yeah, I know it seems a bit odd for him to recover so quickly, but it is rather tricky to make this event tie into the plot. The biggest reason he has made such a speedy recovery is my lack of wanting to drag anything out. I'll see what i can do because honestly i see your point and it bothers me as well. Thank you!!! Much love! Date: 01/05/2010 05:46 PM Title: Last Words Reviewer: dachcr This is really great - everyone needs to have someone special to look after. Hope that Davids father will realise that his son is not the best person on earth. Cannot wait to see how these two new friends will help each other always. Date: 01/05/2010 12:40 AM [Respond] Title: Last Words Reviewer: hh5 I do hope to find out what David has against Luke. I also guess its going to take awhile before Drew finds out about jordan. I just hope David and the police keep quiet.Author's Response: All will be revealed in time =p. You are correct it will be awhile before Drew's brother issue is brought back into the story. Date: 01/04/2010 09:41 PM Title: Stormy Weather and Guilty Hearts Reviewer: Nephylim Aaagh... bloody hell. Again I am left breathless and I have to go to work today Excellent story. Fabulous chapter. I have no idea where this is going to go but i am definately going to be along for the ride. Date: 01/04/2010 03:06 AM [Respond] Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: Mykal I am excited to see what happens next! Great Story! Date: 01/04/2010 12:41 AM [Respond] Title: Persistence and Background Info Reviewer: taina1959 Oh this is getting better and better with each chapter! We know about the kidnapping and Drew beating his dad but I still don't see why the press would be all over Drew. Is there a mystery yet to be revealed? And David? HUH! He doesn't have a chip on his shoulder, he's got the whole 2x4! LOL The bigger the bully the harder he falls! Great Story!! Date: 01/02/2010 06:42 PM [Respond] Title: Persistence and Background Info Reviewer: hh5 it sounds like one town to not live there. it feels like one is walking into trouble.I think Luke is definitely afraid of more trouble to stir up. Date: 01/02/2010 11:02 AM [Respond] Title: Persistence and Background Info Reviewer: Nephylim I liked this chapter a lot. It shows how lonely and sterile it is to be Luke. Drew is very impulsive and may well have bitten off more than he can chew. David sounds like a nasty piece of work. Clever to use a legitimate boxing match to get revenge I like the way his mind works. Date: 01/02/2010 09:02 AM [Respond] Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: theoneadd2 I really want to know where this is all going great story. Thanks for sharing Date: 01/01/2010 01:07 PM [Respond] Title: High School and New Faces Reviewer: taina1959 This is such a good story! I like the Boxing team already and Luke also. I'm hoping to see him and Drew becoming friends soon! Date: 01/01/2010 10:37 AM [Respond] Title: High School and New Faces Reviewer: Nephylim Wow what an interesting story. I was hooked right from the start. Cant wait to see what's coming next. I am liking Luke even though you haven't really introduced him yet. and Drew is pretty awesome. Give us more soon Date: 12/26/2009 06:33 AM [Respond] Title: Falling out of the closet Reviewer: Nephylim Hmm Jordan sounds like a good guy so I think he would love Drew no matter what. I wouldn't be surprised about a little antagonism with Luke though. I don't think that he would make Drew choose but who knows. Awesome as usual hunAuthor's Response: Thanks Nephy! Date: 12/14/2010 01:56 AM Title: Falling out of the closet Reviewer: hh5 Mystery who shot Rose, Waiting for Drew to visit jordan, what david next move, still wonders how much jordan changed, sounds like he's in a bad placeAuthor's Response: Poor Jordan...he would have alot to deal with if he was to return. Rose...hmm well, we all know she is pissed. Jeff is furious, Luke is fed-up, Drew is well Drew, and poor Daivid is about to have a mental breakdown, go hide under his bed in the fetal position, and hug his stuffed teddy bear. Date: 12/13/2010 02:37 AM Title: The Truth Reviewer: hh5 ok i can be wrong but I'll say the David Father. But since not all the facts are in ... the issue can be bigger than I have imagined. Wow Luke changed a bit more. Wonder if Drew can get use to that? Author's Response: Not giving anything away hehe. I think Drew will cope just fine. Date: 09/06/2010 07:49 PM Title: The Truth Reviewer: Nephylim It was after Drew’s with rose that he caught Luke by the arm as he headed for the exit .... that doesn't make sense. I reckon you got too excited writing it. i mean hell it's exciting to read. That was an awesome chapter. It makes me shiver to think of what happened that night. We are definitely getting closer to the answers though. I wonder what will happen next... will David join forces with Luke and Drew to find the truthAuthor's Response: Haha I guess i did get excited. I best go and fix that. Thanks, Luke knows who is behind it he just can't remember just yet. David well we never know what he is going to do. I myself don't even know till I get there. Date: 09/06/2010 11:21 AM Title: The Truth Reviewer: Elezbed Good story and at last, it is a coming out of the closet that everybody will remember ....Good storyAuthor's Response: Thanks Hun. Date: 09/06/2010 08:25 AM Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: hh5 Is there more?Author's Response: Yes Dear, there is more. I just have yet to figure out what that is yet. Don't fret it will get finished. Date: 06/01/2010 12:46 PM Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: hh5 Oh wouldn't things be even out if David was outed. I know it would change things. It would be a matter if any one would treat David differently. Date: 04/05/2010 10:52 PM [Respond] Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: acht-acht Noooo - what´s happening? Cliffhangers are evil. You got me so so curious now about Ty and David. David seems so irrationally crazy angry, there just has to be something else eating him. And the phone call? Jordan? I hope he comes back.Author's Response: Ahhh, yes David is a tough one to figure, and as for jordan...well... you'll just have to wait and see. Date: 04/05/2010 02:44 PM Title: Vendettas Deepen Reviewer: Nephylim Oh my goodness. What happened? This story is so complex and so sweet. You've got us so used to being concerned for Luke and Drew that we've forgotten there are other people who could get into trouble... like Rose. I like Rose Nice storytelling.Author's Response: Thank you so much! As for what happened you will just have to wait and see. Date: 04/05/2010 06:03 AM Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: dachcr This is becoming a rally good story! Cannot wait to see how the guys are going to treat David. Date: 04/05/2010 03:00 AM [Respond] Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag Reviewer: jhol7689 Aww I love it Luke and drew make a cute couple. Now it makes me wonder if David is in the closet. Can't wait for the next chapter =] Date: 03/15/2010 02:15 AM [Respond] Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag Reviewer: hh5 more to help the merrier Date: 03/14/2010 10:59 AM [Respond] Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag Reviewer: Nephylim Interesting. the story is moving along. Things are I think about to get interesting. No. They have always been interesting... let's say... exciting again. Sweet. I like stories with a lot of dialogue and that chapter was so easy to read. Although I think you would get some flack if there were too many like this. Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, this chapter was very dialogue heavy. I just needed things to develop a bit quicker and that was the most effective way to do it. I wanted to keep it simple =). There wont be many of these chapters. This may be the only one like this..who knows? Date: 03/14/2010 08:11 AM Title: The Cat is Out of the Bag Reviewer: Elezbed well now they have two more friends ^^!Good chapter and write more Date: 03/14/2010 04:01 AM [Respond] Title: David Reviewer: hh5 Gosh the mystery of David anger on Luke What can the reason be Date: 02/19/2010 11:08 AM [Respond] Title: David Reviewer: Nephylim That was a really good chapter. I love Rose. She's been a bit of an in the background character until now but she has really come out and shone in this one. Luke is certainly lucky with his friends. Looking forward to the next installment - I am VERY interested to know what Drew has figured out and what he can do with it. Date: 02/19/2010 02:02 AM [Respond] Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: Wyndham Wonderful! I Really enjoyed it, thank you.Author's Response: You are very welcome! Date: 02/01/2010 09:54 AM Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: hh5 Passion at its best!!Definitely Luke on his way to healing and be loved renewed Date: 01/27/2010 09:54 PM [Respond] Title: Pitching Tents Reviewer: Nephylim It's going absolutely fine. That was a very touching chapter. There was fun too but the focus was the emotion that the guys were releasing and it was very sweet. I wonder what's the deal with David... it gets more and more intriguing. I suspect that he might have been the one to kill Tyler and that's why he wants Luke dead... because he might figure it out. We'll see if I'm right Date: 01/27/2010 02:02 AM [Respond] Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies Reviewer: Nephylim That was breathtaking. So sweet. I loved it. Drew was very brave and it paid off. I am loving the snake... always wanted one but never got around to it. There is still a lot of tension in the air, what with David and Jordan and I have a feeling this story has a ways to go but just for now everything is calm and all is right with the world Date: 01/17/2010 08:51 AM [Respond] Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies Reviewer: Elezbed So cute... I wonder if the snake was a pet that someone let it go in their house to make them afraid...Good chapter, write more! Date: 01/17/2010 01:30 AM [Respond] Title: Home Cooked Meals and Scary Movies Reviewer: hh5 now i can't wait till these two make the bed squeek jane awake!!! Date: 01/16/2010 09:31 PM [Respond] Title: Settling Down Reviewer: Nephylim It's coming along fabulously. This has to be one of my favourite stories... yes it is definitely one of my favourite stories and I get excited when I see a new chapter posted. I am so in love with Luke and Drew is such a sweetheart. Keep up the good work. Date: 01/14/2010 11:02 AM [Respond] Title: Settling Down Reviewer: hh5 great chapter. both are getting acquainted with each other. Luke is slow to settle in and drew is gaining more friends. Date: 01/14/2010 09:47 AM [Respond] Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers Reviewer: Nephylim Ahhhh. that is so beautiful. There is no way they are going to be able to ignore that for long. It's going to be beautiful... well if they survive long enough. We still don't know Luke's full story and we don't know why David is so all set to kill him... so much more to come and I can't wait Date: 01/11/2010 05:55 PM [Respond] Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers Reviewer: acht-acht It´s great. Hurry up, I wanna know what´s next. And i want to hear more about asshole David. Cheers, Clara Date: 01/11/2010 09:04 AM [Respond] Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers Reviewer: pumukli Great story! I like it very much! Thanks. Date: 01/11/2010 01:57 AM [Respond] Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers Reviewer: Ricky A great read. I can't wait for the next one. Date: 01/11/2010 01:32 AM [Respond] Title: Aftermath & Unwanted Answers Reviewer: Elezbed No don't stop here, I want to know what happen after and how David is going to react! Good chapter and write more ^^! Date: 01/11/2010 01:17 AM [Respond] Title: Thunder and Lighting Reviewer: Ricky Another tender moment. Likeing it better with every installment. Date: 01/11/2010 12:39 AM [Respond] Title: Keys & Air Mattresses Reviewer: Ricky Saweet! Is he too sore to even suck tongues? I better turn the page quickly! Date: 01/10/2010 11:58 PM [Respond] Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Ricky Likewise. Getting better and better. I just hope the bad guys get theirs. And then there is Jordan to find. Date: 01/10/2010 11:30 PM [Respond] Title: Roomies Reviewer: Ricky Getting Juicier but now I am getting concerned. David and his bunch haven't shown up in the hospital yet and brass knuckles break bones! So off I go to the next chapter. Date: 01/10/2010 11:17 PM [Respond] Title: He Dreams in Anguish Reviewer: Ricky Great. I'm not so sure I would have stopped where he did. No witnesses and they were already down. I think I would have finished the job, put the piece in David's hands and left him to take the blame and die of his wounds. Date: 01/10/2010 10:58 PM [Respond] Title: Last Words Reviewer: Ricky The only complaint I have is the damn chapters are so sissy short! Bust out with some man size chapters. You no sooner become ensconced in the fantasy of it before you have to return to reality. A great story LineAuthor's Response: I'm not sure if I should be offended or not. I'm leaning more toward offended. Date: 01/10/2010 10:24 PM Title: Stormy Weather and Guilty Hearts Reviewer: Ricky Awesome. Getting sweeter. Date: 01/10/2010 10:00 PM [Respond] Title: Persistence and Background Info Reviewer: Ricky Delightful. Thanks Date: 01/10/2010 09:40 PM [Respond] Title: High School and New Faces Reviewer: Ricky Another Great Chapter.Author's Response: Thank you! Date: 01/10/2010 09:10 PM Title: Thunder and Lighting Reviewer: hh5 yes very very nice - wonderfully work out good idea of what goes between the two.Either a combination of lovers or brothers. Date: 01/10/2010 12:29 AM [Respond] Title: Keys & Air Mattresses Reviewer: Elezbed Don't stop here!!!!!!!!!!!! I want to know what happened after this sentence!Good chapter and I wonder how you are going to make Luke loved by the inhabitants... Date: 01/09/2010 02:09 AM [Respond] Title: Keys & Air Mattresses Reviewer: hh5 Is Luke younger than Drew?Gosh I think its still a mystery of what really happen with Luke and his father. Inspite of what every one thinks. Surprise that there wasn't a trial or Luke being in jail?? So it must have been an accident rather a murder?Author's Response: Yes, Luke is younger then Drew, but not by much. At the very start of the story it is Drew's 18th birthday. The death of Luke's father was an accident (that was mentioned by someone...Rose I believe) although nearly everyone in the town seems to think otherwise for reason that will become quite clear later. There is one detail that no one knows about that 'accident'. Luke will go into detail about it in a later chapter. I hope I cleared everything up for you. If you got anymore questions feel free to ask! Date: 01/08/2010 08:50 PM Title: Keys & Air Mattresses Reviewer: Nephylim I think it's awesome as ever. You are really keeping the tension going. I am in suspense the whole time not quite sure what is going to happen next. Very nice.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Date: 01/08/2010 05:25 PM Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: hh5 Nice Chapter but I wonder do I have to worry about Drew and or Luke from here on.Author's Response: I'm not quite sure what you mean. Things may seem okay for the moment but do not think David will stay dormant for long. These two have a long rocky road ahead of themselves. Date: 01/07/2010 11:47 PM Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Kodes100 I really like this tale.Also I don't think you need to keep apologizing for mistakes.The few mistakes have not interrupted the flow of the story.I appreciate your ackowledging them - but you are starting to be paranoid & that can't help the creative process.Be a little easier on yourself.I am an avid reader & I think your writing is pretty good.You will learn the more you write.Bravo to you for "Always."Author's Response: Thank you, I tend to harbor on my mistakes. Thanks for your words of wisdom and for your positive feedback about always! It means the world to me! Date: 01/07/2010 04:09 PM Title: Reuniting Old Friends Reviewer: Nephylim If I did I didn't notice, I was too caugh up in the story. It's rare I read every word no matter what I am reading... occupational hazzard... but I read every word of this. It's an edge of the seat story and I can't wait to see what happens next. Date: 01/07/2010 01:13 PM [Respond] Title: Roomies Reviewer: hh5 oh now its starting to get juicy Date: 01/05/2010 11:43 PM [Respond] Title: Roomies Reviewer: Nephylim This is an excellent chapter. I feel so sorry for Luke... even his own family!!! As I say and keep saying... yeah grammar adds polish and makes a story easier to read but at the end of the day it's all about the story and how it is told... and this is a good one. I am looking fowards... with some trepidation... to what comes next. As a slight observation I would say that it feels to me as if Luke is recovering a little too quickly from two serious beatings and an abdominal stab wound (albeit a shallow one) resulting in surgery... all in 24 hours. But that's just an observation and not necessarily a criticism. As was commented on lately... I must like hospital beds because my characters seem to spend a lot of time in them :pAuthor's Response: Haha Thank you. Yeah, I know it seems a bit odd for him to recover so quickly, but it is rather tricky to make this event tie into the plot. The biggest reason he has made such a speedy recovery is my lack of wanting to drag anything out. I'll see what i can do because honestly i see your point and it bothers me as well. Thank you!!! Much love! Date: 01/05/2010 05:46 PM Title: Last Words Reviewer: dachcr This is really great - everyone needs to have someone special to look after. Hope that Davids father will realise that his son is not the best person on earth. Cannot wait to see how these two new friends will help each other always. Date: 01/05/2010 12:40 AM [Respond] Title: Last Words Reviewer: hh5 I do hope to find out what David has against Luke. I also guess its going to take awhile before Drew finds out about jordan. I just hope David and the police keep quiet.Author's Response: All will be revealed in time =p. You are correct it will be awhile before Drew's brother issue is brought back into the story. Date: 01/04/2010 09:41 PM Title: Stormy Weather and Guilty Hearts Reviewer: Nephylim Aaagh... bloody hell. Again I am left breathless and I have to go to work today Excellent story. Fabulous chapter. I have no idea where this is going to go but i am definately going to be along for the ride. Date: 01/04/2010 03:06 AM [Respond] Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: Mykal I am excited to see what happens next! Great Story! Date: 01/04/2010 12:41 AM [Respond] Title: Persistence and Background Info Reviewer: taina1959 Oh this is getting better and better with each chapter! We know about the kidnapping and Drew beating his dad but I still don't see why the press would be all over Drew. Is there a mystery yet to be revealed? And David? HUH! He doesn't have a chip on his shoulder, he's got the whole 2x4! LOL The bigger the bully the harder he falls! Great Story!! Date: 01/02/2010 06:42 PM [Respond] Title: Persistence and Background Info Reviewer: hh5 it sounds like one town to not live there. it feels like one is walking into trouble.I think Luke is definitely afraid of more trouble to stir up. Date: 01/02/2010 11:02 AM [Respond] Title: Persistence and Background Info Reviewer: Nephylim I liked this chapter a lot. It shows how lonely and sterile it is to be Luke. Drew is very impulsive and may well have bitten off more than he can chew. David sounds like a nasty piece of work. Clever to use a legitimate boxing match to get revenge I like the way his mind works. Date: 01/02/2010 09:02 AM [Respond] Title: Cars and Chicks Reviewer: theoneadd2 I really want to know where this is all going great story. Thanks for sharing Date: 01/01/2010 01:07 PM [Respond] Title: High School and New Faces Reviewer: taina1959 This is such a good story! I like the Boxing team already and Luke also. I'm hoping to see him and Drew becoming friends soon! Date: 01/01/2010 10:37 AM [Respond] Title: High School and New Faces Reviewer: Nephylim Wow what an interesting story. I was hooked right from the start. Cant wait to see what's coming next. I am liking Luke even though you haven't really introduced him yet. and Drew is pretty awesome. Give us more soon Date: 12/26/2009 06:33 AM [Respond]

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When I was a kid my mom and I watched Chucky...I have a fear of dolls to his day. No seriously, I really have a fear of dolls .

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Holly is the short version of my middle name Holleen. Holly rhymes with Jolly and my friends would always call me Holly Jolly. Then my best friend got tired of it and began to call me HJ. I have been HJ for a long while now. So there we have it .

I agree DragonFire, but Ilike the kitty too!

I loved it PB! Thats says something considering I normally hate poems. Wonderful writing!

The wet sand was cool against the soles of my feet as I stood next to the water's edge. There was not a cloud on the horizon. The warm rays of the sun beat down on my bare back, causing the skin of my shoulders to tingle pleasantly, and the costal winds whipped my dark hair into my eyes. Farther up the beach, children played by the shoreline with their parents near them. The faint sounds of their laughter drifted pass my ears as I watched them stomp a sandcastle into oblivion. The two boys rem

Title: Donovan Ch. 12 Reviewer: AMC Wonderful story. Switching POV sometimes takes me by surprise, but that's part of the charm. The unique universe you've created is great...no inconsistencies. Nice twist a chapter or so ago. Didn't see it coming! So many scenes tugged my emotions, in a good way, of course. I cried with relief when they rescued Timmy. Bravo!Author's Response: Thank you! You have no idea how much happiness this comment provides me! Make sure to keep up with the story on the system GA Stories. I'm *HJ* there. When the new system calms down I will be posting new chapters! Date: 12/23/2010 03:02 PM [Delete] Again not sure where to put the reviews. So I am sticking them here... Title: Donovan Ch. 12 Reviewer: Douw Hmm well the blood lust was unexpected but nice... lol Glade that he was saved in the end tho;~}Author's Response: Me too! Date: 12/09/2010 11:48 AM Title: Donovan Ch. 12 Reviewer: JimCarter This story is a first for me. I don't usually enjoy stories about non-humans, but this one I have enjoyed very much.Author's Response: That is wonderful to hear! I hope you continue to read! Smiles, *HJ* Date: 12/06/2010 02:54 PM Title: Donovan Ch. 12 Reviewer: adamo OOohhh.... This is interesting. A new character. Exciting. Can't wait to see how Timmy adapts to his new situation. :)Jake and Donovan are dazzling as ever. Wonderful writing.Author's Response: Thank you! Your comments always makes me feel warm and fuzy inside! lol Date: 12/04/2010 03:16 PM Title: Donovan Ch. 12 Reviewer: Clovis Great, I love it when the evil bastard gets his just desserts. Shouldn't Timmy's father, or whoever he was, also get a bit of retribution? Carry on writing.Author's Response: Ah, Timmy's father. You will learn about him and his fate later. Thanks for the review! Date: 12/03/2010 12:32 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo Nope. Definitely haven't lost interest. Just been really busy with school and haven't had too much time to read. Can't wait for the next chapter! :)Author's Response: That wonderful to hear! Date: 11/24/2010 12:37 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo Post soon? PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE.Author's Response: Long time no talk Dear Adamo. I thought you had lost interest. I will post by the end of this week or the next. You see I wrecked my car and therefore i had to pick up another job to pay for it. My time has been scarce as of late, but i promise it will be soon. Date: 11/22/2010 12:48 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: Vicky hi there, loved reading this. Considering the fact that I "dont" ever read vampire-fantasies, I have no interest in such stuff, I wud say you have narrated it really well to not put me off. I loved the opening scene, the one where you had that talk with Donovan. The later half is well narrated, just not my genre as a reader.. I loved Minx in his initial incarnation. Especially the fact that you shared that unpsoken bond of communication with him. The fact that he isnt really a cat, kind of dilutes my liking for him. I am curious to read the next chapters, and hope there are more scenes of the kind I like to read. :-) Well penned, awesome really...Author's Response: I'm glad you are liking it. I doubt you will like the future chapters, but I hope you give them a try Date: 10/26/2010 01:18 PM Title: Jake Ch. 11 Reviewer: Clovis Very good. I love the sentiment, the love that is simple despite the apparent complications. Worth waiting for.Author's Response: Thanks, Dear! Date: 10/25/2010 04:09 PM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo Its been so long:(Author's Response: sorry sorta stuck. I hope to have it worked out soon. hang in there! Date: 10/14/2010 12:45 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo Soon?Author's Response: not sure....i'm working on it. Date: 09/25/2010 03:52 PM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo Any idea when you'll get chapter 11 up? :)Author's Response: Next week. Maybe sooner. Date: 09/15/2010 09:05 PM Title: Donovan Ch.10 Reviewer: Nephylim It was very sweet. I think that it was needed and it was delivered. You don't have to give a blow by blow account to make it both believable and sexy. I like the way you tackled it very much. This was a wonderful chapter after all the action that's been going on. I like the chapters that are from Donovan's perspective. I'm not entirely sure that I buy the parents being there but hey it's your story and I'm happy to go with it. Looking foward to the next one.Author's Response: Thanks Nephy, I'm glad yo liked it. The parents things will have more light shed on it in future chapters but right now you are just going to have to go with it. Love ya! Date: 09/08/2010 02:04 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo I also found the sex scene very sweet. Sometimes less is more. :)And I really like Donovan.Author's Response: That is good to hear. Thank you! Date: 09/07/2010 04:38 AM Title: Donovan Ch.10 Reviewer: Douw HB it was grate i loved the playfulness at the end! The sex scenes were good not all stories should have sex scenes but it fit into the story perfectly some stories are better with sex scenes and others are not th only thing this scene did was add to the chapter making it all the better GRATE WORK!!Author's Response: Thank you! Love ya PB! Date: 09/07/2010 02:15 AM Title: Donovan Ch.10 Reviewer: Anyta Sunday In my opinion the two having sex seemed necessary to the story, considering the effect it now has on Donovan. :)It will be interesting to see how they interact with each other from now on. If Donovan will be the same person or not... hmmmm Date: 09/07/2010 01:42 AM [Respond] Title: Donovan Ch.10 Reviewer: Clovis Getting more and more exciting... and just the right amount of sex, thanks. I always prefer gentleness and loving kisses and touching to detailed descriptions of... Your guys always make me feel gooey and nice. Thanks.Author's Response: yay! that makes me happy. Date: 09/06/2010 04:17 PM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo So Minx is bad? I am confused about that. I love being able to read from both Donovan's and Jakes point of view. They are both very different but absolutely wonderful together. Date: 09/06/2010 12:21 PM [Respond] Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo Do you think you will be posting soon?Author's Response: Yes, I have the next chapter written. I may post it this morning while I am thinking about it. Date: 09/06/2010 02:26 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo God it is just getting better and better. Jake and Donovan are so sweet together. Can't wait to see what happens next. Planning on posting anytime soon?Author's Response: No, it could be a week or more. I'm just so overwhelmed with school and work I can't think stright. I got the next few chapters they just are not flowing like i want them too. That must be fixed. Date: 08/28/2010 04:23 AM Title: Jake Ch. 9 Reviewer: Douw I think it's grate! I loved the balcony seen!Author's Response: Thanks hun! That makes me feel great! Date: 08/22/2010 05:39 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: Pipo I really like this story. It is an great mix between normal human relations and fantasy stuff. Thank you for posting it :)Author's Response: Glad I could Oblige. Date: 08/21/2010 07:44 AM Title: Jake Ch. 9 Reviewer: Anyta Sunday That was a really sweet moment there between Jake and Donovan. Dang for the interruption, huh? hehe. Nice stuff.Author's Response: Thanks, Hun! Date: 08/20/2010 12:12 PM Title: Jake Ch. 9 Reviewer: Clovis Beaut!A great tale... I guess sealed is consummated? I hope it happens soon... time for Donovan to realise what he's missing. Date: 08/19/2010 09:48 PM [Respond] Title: Jake Ch. 9 Reviewer: Avid this story is turning out great its sad minx is on the bad side but it just goes to show you what you think is good can be bad and the worst can be the best for you.Author's Response: You hit the nail right on the head, Avid. Date: 08/19/2010 06:09 PM Title: Jake Ch. 9 Reviewer: Nephylim Wow that was a twist. It's a beautiful story. I love the way that the relationship between Jake and Donovan is growing and the characters we are meeting along the way are intricate, like peals woven into the tappestry of the story. i am still loving it.Author's Response: That makes me happy. Thank Nephy! Date: 08/19/2010 04:33 PM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo Its been quite awhile since your last post...:(Author's Response: Sorry, i have just had a full plate with my school starting and my work. I have the next two chapters written but there are somethings i'm not sure I want to keep and I can't post chapter 9 until i'm sure. I don't want to have to go back and change it. So I will post when I get stuff sorted out. I actually played hooky to day to do so. I need a day to myself Date: 08/16/2010 07:30 PM Title: Donovan Ch.8 Reviewer: Douw Grate job HB i loved the chapter!Author's Response: Thanks PB! Date: 08/07/2010 09:57 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo Any idea when you will be posting next? its been ahwile.Author's Response: Soon my Dear Adamo, soon. Date: 08/06/2010 07:16 PM Title: Donovan Ch.8 Reviewer: firebird2890 Really enjoying this story!! I appreciate your work in writing it. Can't wait till the next chapter!!! ThanksAuthor's Response: Thank you, Dear! Date: 07/25/2010 02:07 AM Title: Donovan Ch.8 Reviewer: Clovis Brilliant.... but why poor alexander? such a waste of beauty. I'm still waiting for that kiss. XXX CAuthor's Response: Ah! You decided to continue reading! That makes me very happy. Yes Alexander was wonderful but it had to be done. Kisses, Holly =) Date: 07/23/2010 02:13 AM Title: Donovan Ch.8 Reviewer: Anyta Sunday Nice stuff, I'll leave a note on your forum.Author's Response: Thanks Dear! Date: 07/22/2010 01:16 PM Title: Donovan Ch.8 Reviewer: Nephylim Ugh. Sweet and sour... perfect combination. I love this storyAuthor's Response: Thanks for all your comments Nephy. They always boost my sprits! Love you, Dear! Date: 07/22/2010 09:42 AM Title: Jake Ch.7 Reviewer: Nephylim Oh shit! I'm scared now Date: 07/22/2010 09:36 AM [Respond] Title: Donovan Ch.6 Reviewer: Nephylim Sob. That was so beautiful Sniff Date: 07/22/2010 09:34 AM [Respond] Title: Jake Ch.5 Reviewer: Nephylim Into the clouds with a nose in your neck... Sigh Date: 07/22/2010 09:28 AM [Respond] Title: Donovan Ch.8 Reviewer: adamo I really love how different Donovan and Jake are. How they see things and their senses of humor... You can really see that in your writing.Author's Response: Thank you! That is what I have been going for with the two. Date: 07/22/2010 09:09 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo Yay. Thanks for posting so soon. Great chapter. Donovan's and Jake's first kiss was so sweet.Author's Response: Hehe, i did try. The next chapter weill come LATER prolly not as later as a week but not as quick as these. These have been a treat. I can go posting a chapter willy nilly everyday. I'll let these soak for a bit and see the kind of resposes they bring. Well, i am off to work. I have a day off tomorrow so maybe I will have a chace to write. Date: 07/22/2010 09:06 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo You didn't post today :(Author's Response: sorry, I was reading the chapter and I decided to change a couple things. So I am tweaking it a bit and I will have it up as soon as i'm done. Date: 07/21/2010 11:24 PM Title: Jake Ch.7 Reviewer: Nesossin Palace in the skies! *drool* i too think this can only get more interesting.lovely storyAuthor's Response: Thank you very much! Date: 07/20/2010 10:50 PM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: Nesossin I love this story,the cat really does it for me (love cats) was hooked after the first chapter,excellent characters. Date: 07/20/2010 10:45 PM [Respond] Title: Jake Ch.7 Reviewer: Anyta Sunday I liked these last two chapters. I thought getting more background info on the two added a nice touch. I hope you post soon, AnytaAuthor's Response: Thank you! I do plan on posting soon. Date: 07/20/2010 04:39 PM Title: Jake Ch.7 Reviewer: adamo Or sooner. cause I'm so excited to see what state of mind donovans gonna be in after his realization in his last chapter... And the mysterious ending of the last chapter... It will be interesting to see how donovan responds if they hurt jake anymore..Author's Response: =) Date: 07/20/2010 11:28 AM Title: Jake Ch.7 Reviewer: adamo yay! You posted. I'm really happy you decided to continue in this direction. The background was so beautiful. I can't wait for things to heat up. And please, please, please do post the next chapter tomorrow! Date: 07/20/2010 11:22 AM [Respond] Title: Jake Ch.5 Reviewer: Anyta Sunday I love the idea that the soul mates feel each other's pain. That's good stuff. I enjoyed the moment with Donovan and Jake as he healed him too. Date: 07/20/2010 04:15 AM [Respond] Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo Response to response: Personally I really like where you're going with the story.Author's Response: Thank you, Darling. Date: 07/15/2010 04:54 PM Title: Donovan Ch.6 Reviewer: Clovis A delightful fantasy, but hey! gay is a modern invention. All men are able and willing to do it with other men... always have been ever since hunting parties went out for weeks on end, and sailors stayed at sea. This not being gay stuff is simply a fable and spoils the show for me. humans are sexual beings -- that's all. only exclusive through brainwashing, and Donovan hasn't been brainwashed, so he'd better get over his phobia soon or I won't continue reading. :)Author's Response: haha, gald to hear your view as always, but now that is all up to Donovan . I do hope you continue reading. Date: 07/12/2010 08:46 PM Title: Donovan Ch.6 Reviewer: adamo each chapter is getting better and better, I love where you are going with the story. and the writing is really great. Any idea when you will be posting next.Author's Response: Hmm. well I am ahead a few chapters, but I havn't decided if I want to keep it the way I have it written or change it so....not sure. If I had to give you a possible time I would say...A week maybe two if i change directions, but if I keep it the way I have it a few days at most. I'm currently working on Always again so that and my job are taking up some Damp Sunshine time. Date: 07/11/2010 07:45 AM Title: Donovan Ch.4 Reviewer: Anyta Sunday I think you've done a good job with Donovan's thoughts in this chapter. I like his confusion and I think his character is softening, making him more likeable. Good stuff. Date: 07/10/2010 04:16 AM [Respond] Title: Jake Ch.3 Reviewer: Anyta Sunday Okay. I suspect (and hope) there will be a romantic element to the story. I love the triangle that's being set up here, and I'm keen to know where you are heading with it. Good stuff, AnytaAuthor's Response: Dear, this is a romance if it is anything so don't worry. Date: 07/08/2010 08:23 AM Title: Donovan Ch.2 Reviewer: Anyta Sunday I get a different feeling for Donovan's voice which shows that you are doing the character's justice. I read somewhere you may have a couple of chapters that are from Jake and not alternating. I just want to say that that's fine. In fact It's a good idea to vary chapters like that--keeps things fresh and interesting. Good stuff, AnytaAuthor's Response: Yeah, I am just going with the flow. I have yet to hit a point where i don't see it fit not to alternate but I am sure I will hit a wall sometime and will have to double up. Thanks for all your input it really is wonderful. Hugz, Holly Date: 07/08/2010 07:54 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: Anyta Sunday I enjoyed this chapter very much. I thought the first half was brilliant in terms of pacing and action, and felt that the characters came off credibily. The second half was fun too, although I feel it was perhaps a touch rushed. My suggestion would be to make it more of a struggle for Jake to will his wings out. That just seemed too easy somehow. Plus, it could be made humorous, his attempts to will them out. Maybe what that second bit needs just to oompf it up a bit more, is some internal thoughts. Jake seems to be taking it all a bit too well. What is Jake thinking being told this? Does he reckon he's hallucinating? Or that it's some weird dream? Or just thinking something random like: shit, he was talking to his cat! HAving some more of his thoughts in that last bit would make this so super duper awesome (it is already awesome, just trying to give tips to super-size that awesome, if you like ) Good stuff, I'd read on, AnytaAuthor's Response: Dear. i love reviews like these. It lets me into the mind of the reader and it helps my writing! You just give all the tips you like. However, Jake's character is very...how should I put it? Calm. Thats it. He has always known he was a bit odd and now things are just seeming to fall in to place. Sort of like pieces missing from a puzzle. They may not be good pieces but he understands that they fit. Date: 07/08/2010 07:45 AM Title: Donovan Ch.6 Reviewer: Fastreader Okay, so Ch. 7 is going to have a moment of enlightenment between them, isn't it?Author's Response: hehe. You have yet to hear Jakes take on all of this =) Date: 07/08/2010 04:45 AM Title: Jake Ch.5 Reviewer: Clovis This is wonderful... can't wait so see what happens next. Date: 06/01/2010 01:06 AM [Respond] Title: Donovan Ch.4 Reviewer: Nephylim Heck. That was poweful. I feel so sorry for both of them. But this isn't the end for them I am sure of it. I wonder what Donovan will become. They are closer than they seem. I would imagine they are already connected in some way :)Author's Response: You are always so perceptive Nemphy! ;P Date: 05/15/2010 07:08 AM Title: Jake Ch.3 Reviewer: Clovis Ah-ha... I wonder how long it will be before he gets his teeth into Donovan. Usually I avoid vampire tales... but this is fun... Why such huge gaps between phrases? It doesn't matter, I was just wondering.Author's Response: Well, this is my first time switching back and forth between points of view. You will just have to bare with me until I get used to it ;p. Date: 04/26/2010 09:27 PM Title: Jake Ch.3 Reviewer: adamo I am liking your story more and more. The characters are interesting, and the plot captivating. When will you post next? Sooner than before? Oh, and what do Jake, Donovan and Minx look like? Could you maybe add in a better description. I have an idea of what Donovans parents look like more than Donovan or Jake or Minx.Author's Response: Well, The reason I didn't describe them as much is because I wanted the reader to sort of have their own ideas of how they look. I give the basics and let you fill in the rest. I know when I read a story I am sometimes turned off by the characters' description and it almost ruins it for me. So I like to leave some lead way in the way you guys picture them . However that isn't always the case. Sometimes I just have to describe them in full exactly how I see them. I may end up descrining Jake, Donovan, and Minx more a bit later but it really just depends on how it plays out in my head. If you want to talk more about this or anything else visit the forum I am always happy to hear you guys think! Good or bad it just makes me all giddy that you care enough to write something! Thanks adamo and I hope to hear more from you. http://www.gayauthor...damp-sunshine/. Dont forget that I am under *HJ* in the forums everyone! Date: 04/26/2010 03:29 AM Title: Donovan Ch.2 Reviewer: Clovis I love it... however, take the time to check - Jake didnt want to be a skin, not a shirt. Well written and well paced, my only complaint is the two descriptions of the parents... overdone and saccarine. "She was dressed in her black Versace mini dress that highlighted her hourglass figure, and strappy sliver heels. Her blonde loose curls had been straightened and her make-up was perfect,..." over the top.. versace? really. and the father... Dad sat in his Armani suit [surely he sat in a chair?]... He stood when he saw my flustered mother walk into the room... He ran his hand over his short chocolate brown hair. Armani suit... we know they're rich, there's no need for purple prose. But that's my sole quibble... it's going great! However, I do think it's a bit dangerous to be drinking bloood in the playground in full view of everyone.Author's Response: I Am likeing your reviews Clovis. As you can see I'm not perfect . Just keep in mind that i have no one to edit or proof read this for me. As for the wording it changes between Donovan and Jake. When I write in 1st person I write like they would, and that is not always correct. Most people don't agree and think everything should be set in this neat litte box. I don't do that. I like to keep this personal in 1st person. As for the descriptions of the parents...well yes i suppose it was redundant, but I had a reason. I wanted the reader to picture them for the way they are. vague answer, but really I think it shall be alright. I hope to hear more from you! Thank you! By the way, thanks for catching the shirt skin thing Date: 04/21/2010 01:50 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: Clovis Excellent that the story moves at a cracking pace! I get so tired of writers who take three chapters simply to let us know someone is gay. There are a few clunky phrases, for instance at the beginning you write: "just Donovan and I. It was always nice when it was just him and I." Normal usage is jon and me, but the repetition of the construction irritates. You could write: 'Just Donovan and me; that's how I preferred it.' or any oyher construction. But I'm nit-picking... It's a fun tale, plenty of imagination and I look forward to the rest. Date: 04/21/2010 01:22 AM [Respond] Title: Donovan Ch.2 Reviewer: bookjunky18 I'm liking this story so far, and I'm psyched to read more. This story is the kind I like reading because it has supernatural elements and is well written. i hope you'll post another chapter soon. Btw, both Jake and Donovan are super hot.Author's Response: Thank you very much. I will try and get the next chapter ASAP. Date: 04/18/2010 02:35 PM Title: Donovan Ch.2 Reviewer: Nephylim Oh gosh... Jake is so awesome. He is so sexy now he's all dark and brooding. How sexy is he? Donovan is the loser I think. I reckon Jake should stick with Minx :)Author's Response: Hehe, Minx has many fans. Date: 04/15/2010 10:07 AM Title: Donovan Ch.2 Reviewer: Wyndham Brilliant. I'm glad you decided to try something new. Looking forward to seeing how things develop. May I suggest you try Whitesmoke for Grammar and spell checking. The software isn't perfect but it really helps, especially when you don't have an editor around. Date: 04/15/2010 02:58 AM [Respond] Title: Donovan Ch.2 Reviewer: Wyndham Brilliant. I'm glad you decided to try something new. Looking forward to seeing how things develop. May I suggest you try Whitesmoke for Grammar and spell checking. The software isn't perfect but it really helps, especially when you don't have an editor around.Author's Response: Thank you. Yes I will try it. I just use MS word so that doesn't catch much. =) Date: 04/15/2010 02:58 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo I really like the story. Jake seems like a really interesing character. And I like your take on vampires. When will you post next? Please soon...Author's Response: I will try and get the next chapter up asap, but it will be next week more then likely. This Sunday at best. Thanks so much for your support! Date: 04/15/2010 01:36 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: adamo I like the story so far. When you post the next chaper? Author's Response: Hmm..not sure. It will be a little while. I still haven't found a beta reader for this one yet. Date: 04/11/2010 03:21 PM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: Elezbed well I think that Jake accepts everything a little too well... Or perhaps it is the impact of the situation?Write moreAuthor's Response: Impact would be correct Dear. Stay tuned for Jakes next chapter which will be ch. 3, Donovan's chapter is next! thanks for the review! Date: 04/10/2010 01:48 AM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: taina1959 Well dear, keep on writing because you're doing one hell of a great job! This is starting with lots of intrigue and have to wonder what's awaiting Jake once school start. Hopefully Donovan is not going to be an ass with him. I'm loving Minx already!!!! Keep it up... Keep on writing! ~Rush~Author's Response: Thanks Rush, that means alot. Hugz, Holly Date: 04/08/2010 11:19 PM Title: Jake Ch.1 Reviewer: Nephylim Yay I love it. How dare you say that vampires are the most evil of all creatures. Shame on you Vampirephobe Did you know that markings of this kind were common on images of angels... mainly fallen ones? I am just loving this story... how it has gone from perfectly normal to the furthest from it in one chapter. What the heck is going to happen in the next one. BTW liking Minx in his new form ;)Author's Response: Haha, thank you. I'm just kinda making it up as I go along . Just pulling stuff out of my head. Btw I love Vampires! I just thought I would make the majority of them evil in this story =). Minx is my favorite. you'll understand why later. Date: 04/08/2010 09:55 AM

The summer before his senior year of high school, Jake is thrust into a dangerous world he had no idea even existed. Before his inheritance the only things Jake was overly concerned with was his strange dreams, and figuring out how to deal with being in love with his best friend. Now, saddled with a heritage that makes him the sole heir to both the Guardian and Night Stalker kingdoms, Jake learns that not everything is black and white, and the people he can trust are few and far in between.

Thank you! My first review in the new link and I love it. I'll post as soon as I can!

The night was silent as Drew and Luke stood hand in hand beside Jeff. Everyone made their way to the end of the dock to stand in front of the four boys. Jeff stood tall and proud beside his friends while David stood isolated near the old wooden railing of the dock. “This explains why you stuck beside him,” said Lucas to Drew. “I would have stuck by him as a friend either way,” replied Drew. “Fucking fags,” David uttered. Luke didn’t even hesitate to release Drew’s hand and pin David

“Rose!” yelled Jeff. Rose had fallen from the swing to the wooden floor. Blood was seeping through her pink v-neck blouse and she was clutching her shoulder. Luke had shot up from his seat and was looking for the shooter. “Jeff, call 911!” he exclaimed as his eyes darted around the area. “Get in the house! Jeff, help me get her inside,” Drew spoke loudly but calmly. Rose’s parents had rushed up at the vision of their only daughter lying bloody on the porch