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Wow, even I was getting anxious about seeing Alex in person. What a great story. I could feel Chris's frustration, anxiety and uncertainty. Great job!
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Very entertaining and well written.
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This story was well written. It portrayed two teens in a very believable and normal light. The arguments and disagreements with parents and being obstinate just to get back at them was a teen at their best. lol I did not see anything grammatical that grabbed my attentnion or spelling errors. All in all, I find this a nice and enjoyable read!
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The story was written adequately, but I almost felt that I was reading a children's bedtime story. The story kept my attention enough to finish it, and I enjoyed it.
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It is hard to have any kind of character development in something so short, but you kept it light and presented each charcter in their own unique way, Jo, the meddling gff, Jake, the boyfriend that was in love with himself, lol, and of course Ryan the insecure jealous type who is a little unsure of life in general expecially when it comes to his relationship with Jake. I found the read very entertaining and amusing like Ryan's jealousy of Jake, and Jo's mothering. Enjoyed it. Thanks
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Perfect story image of first love, the nerves, shyness, and giddiness. Great, entertaining and lighthearted story.
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Wow, what total chaos! I am so curious about this "thing" that seems to be there between Edward and Zune. There is definitely chemistry rearing it's head. Kev better stay on his toes. So now Zune is going to have to decide and deal with how he feels about his mom and Uncle Matt renewing their relationship. He has a lot on his plate right now and that makes him pretty vulnerable. Great chapter Sacred!
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I might just throttle you for such a short but great chapter, and then more or less a cliffhanger! lol This is becoming one of my fav stories. Keep up the great work
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Loved the light plot of the story and the small cast of characters that made the story even more enjoyable. The cute scene in the bathroom was so funny, but it did put Taylor in quite an uncomfortable state. lol This story is well written and does not deviate from the main theme at all. It flows nicely and entertains the reader all the way to the end!
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Awww, you made tears come at the end. This is a beautiful story. Thank you so much for sharing Soubi and Ryo with me
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This is a nice take on the anthology title. The story takes on a life of it's own as the main characters go from day to day without speaking and you never even notice the missing dialogue. Great writing and I would definitely call this a must read!
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I find this story very well written and the author put it out there in a way that the emotions grabbed me, the reader from the first sentence. It is very well written and the easy flow of his writing makes it a joy to read. He did not overwhelm the piece with detail but gave the reader all that he needs to make the story easy to follow. Definitely a good read!
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Although the writing was ok, I found myself wondering where the author was going too many times to follow it. Maybe it was just snippets or thoughts. Also some grammatical errors. Just an average piece imo.
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Words filled with pain and hurt. Be strong my friend. Hugs, Jo Ann
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Loved the carefree Alexi with Jordan. The family was great as well, expecially the mischievious young men. Takes ones like them to round out a family. lol I still have the feeling that we have not seen the last of Adrian but at least we know that Alexi has plenty of support, but sometimes I wish he had a bodyguard when it comes to Adrian. Another great chapter girl
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You write post sex convo with all the ministrations and everything I agree with Jason on the distance thing though. If they Blake and Ethan can establish a relationship and it survives distance then it is a pretty stable pairing. I am enjoying these snippets
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So glad that Jason and Peter are alive and swelled ummmmm, I mean well. Darrel and Dean need to invest in earplugs Cute chapter. I have no problem imagining what went on between Jason and Peter
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Alternate worlds, six seconds of time and a lifetime of heartache rolled into one. I opt to think that they are happy in their hereafter wherever that may be. They went through a lot in their childhood as best friends and then the year as enemies. Maybe that is why they got a chance to make amends with each other, to alleviate all the pain. Beautiful!
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In case I haven't mentioned it along the way, you are an absolute pleasure to read. Your writing is so exciting to read. The guys were in so much pain in this chapter in more ways than one. I can't imagine the feeling that each of them have had in their years apart.
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Abuse sickens me, but sadly it goes on every minutes of everyday somewhere in this crazy world. Poor Sage, and Cailen. Sage is scared to stay and Cailen is scared to let him go. What an emotional and horrible mess. I am hoping Cailen's parents will step in, but I guess I will have to read on to see. YOu are handling your characters and their personal traits so well in this story.
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Selective memory is such a cop out and both of these guys are using it. lol I can't say I blame either of them the way the stories seems to be heading. There's a lot of unresolved issues here. That is obvious, but I know you are going to keep us entertained as you weave this interesting tale. Great work
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With Kaito and Sakura together, Soubi could go to school in New York Just a thought, but I feel like you have some kind of solution to the separation of our guys. This was a pretty sad chapter girl. I felt like poor Soubi was the baby here. Bless him. He is so sweet.
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Sei makes sense in a way, but if I could only trust her. She is right on one issue tho. The lives the boys are living now is not a life, not communicating in any way. I just hope whatever decision they make, they will have the strength to get through it as a couple. Great chapter
