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I am glad to see you are continuing your story. Braylon is quite a character huh? But, I think he has met his match with Korbyn. Jade is funny. He is almost like having a girlfriend in the group.lol You seem to have your storyline in place. I would suggest you getting a beta and an editor. I saw several grammatical errors and some of your sentence structure is a little distracting. But, like I said, you have a great story going here. I love it!
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Damn, I am out of likes today and both of your new chapters are great. Alexi is so confused and Josh is doing his best to be supportive expecially with his love. Can't wait to see how you work through keeping them together throughout the tour, or what becomes of the offer of funding for Joshua and research. You leave a lot to ponder here. Loved the chapter tho
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Oh no! Poor Sue and Colton. Or I really don't know who to pity the most here. There is so much hatred and unregretted brutality in this guy Peter, and now he has resorted to rape! I can't imagine the feelings of any of the captors here with so many emotions running around in each of their heads. Great and powerful chapter Louiw!
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That was a interesting, funny, and attention getting take on this anthology. I couldn't quit reading because I wanted to know what the hell was going on. Loved it.!
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Chapter 1 Meet the Clique
joann414 commented on flawlesss's story chapter in Chapter 1 Meet the Clique
Of course you should continue. This is a very intriguing start. I'm very curious about the new guy and exactly what it is this group of young men get into because I know there is more than meets the eye here. -
It certainly looks like the beginning of a great story to me. Looks like Asher and Michael mix like oil and water. lol Now Monday won't seem so bad knowing you will serve up another chapter
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San just jumped right in and is going after the teahouse and Ziyu. I guess if you are going to do something go whole heartedly. lol. Ziyu is suspicious and that is understandable, but San's offer is almost too good to let pass by. HOpefully Ziyu will come to or be talked to his senses. Great chapter!
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I am so glad Ziyu has found a savior for the teahouse. Seems to me that San may be interested in more than the teahouse also This is a really sweet story. On to next chapter!
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I love to see a story that shows the acceptance into society, expecially in high school where there is so much bullying. This was a great story that deals with a very horrible issue.
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How sad for Brent's roommate! But at least he had what was probably one last dance. But if I had been at the party, when the spiders dropped from the ceiling, they would have had to carry me out on a stretcher! I loved this story.
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Enjoyed this so much. It handed the readed a little bit of everything. There was romance, best friends, the token girlfriend friend, drama, and bits of comedy. Great story
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Wow! That was the ultimate vacation and surprise. You showed your two guys emotions and feelings so well. I love your writing.
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What a beautiful story. Your descriptive writing is so easy and enjoyable to read. Great job
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AWwwwww, what a sweet story with a happy ending. Loved it
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Part I: Truths Revealed
joann414 commented on Renee Stevens's story chapter in Part I: Truths Revealed
I don't know who to feel worse for, Braeden or Keith. It always hurts to be cheated, but i think Keith is beginning to realise Will is not worth all the grief -
Right Up Until The Very End
joann414 commented on Bardeara's story chapter in Right Up Until The Very End
Well written and a very sweet story about best friends in love. Enjoyed this immensely -
This story gave me chills. It is beautifully written. You are a great storyteller!
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Trevor had no idea the real fun he would have when he finally got to make the trip on his own. Jase came into his life and it was quite the vacation from there on out. It's always fun to have a few drinks and loosen up. Helps you to get to know someone better and vice versa. I really enjoyed this read, especially the interruption by the pizza guy. Bet he gave his co-workers an ear full when he got back to work. lol
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Well this is certainly a case of expect the unexpected. You described what would be a perfect after graduation vacation for four best friends and boyfriends. It was very light and easily absorbed. But I have to say, the ending blew me away. 'pun unintended'. Very nice job though again the ending made my soul heave.
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You took a very sensitive and sometimes sad subject and made it into an uplifting read. Sometimes when we feel those strong feelings at first sight and meeting, they never go away, no matter what!
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Have I Mentioned That I Miss You?
joann414 commented on Luc's story chapter in Have I Mentioned That I Miss You?
Some authors can write in a journal or diary form and make an interesting story and some can't. You definitely can. His thoughts as they came to mind were so easy to read though a lot of them painful. Being by yourself is lonely, but being by yourself with so many memories can make you feel even lonelier. You did a wonderful job with this. -
I found this story very engrossing. It flowed nicely and my attention never wavered because of dialogue or errors. First love is always something you think you will never forget, but most do and do no even realise it. Nice story with a good feel to it
