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oh awesome cliffhanger, soooo looking forward to more.

This reads like a dream and lyric poetry all rolled into one. I love the ebb and flow of the rhythm of the words, the way that you weave in a glimpse of the narrator with things like the houses and cars while giving us images in bits and pieces, that I'm guessing will all be pulled together to fully show the dream in the end. Looking forward to reading more.

really love the idea that the power of dreams is stronger than time itself, or at least, that's what i got out of the ending. That Nysion valued and desired a mortal life with the one he loved rather than the constant power struggle, and was happy at the loss of his power to have the dream life he'd wanted, really showed where his priorities were at. He saved the world, and got the happy ending, I love that. Great story Cia!

I agree with NotNoNever, without putting life into proper perspective there can be no love, looks like you've found both and that is awesome! I remember being fresh out of college (my first trip through) with a major I'd ended up with by means of conforming to expectations, and brand new family AND a brand new job that didn't really let me enjoy that family. I missed allot of my sons first years working 14 hours days and commuting to do so, and in the end, i was never as happy as I was when I decided to just quit it all and go back to school for the thing I'd loved and always wanted to do, which in turn left me far more time to enjoy my kids. careers are great, but family is everything.

Beautifully written and packed with bittersweet emotions.

really good story, great pacing and i love the way things are developing.

Well, it seems i ran out of likes for the day, but either way, this was a great beginning, I really want to know why Sean went to such extremes, and if he'll find Tommy. This sounds like an interesting journey and you teased just enough to really hook the reader and reel them in.

This is really interesting, and i am curious to see where it all goes. i do hope no one ends up with hurt feelings over it, though I can see how it might be unavoidable, i'll just have to follow the story to find out.

This was brutal, in very Misery x10 sort of way. wonderfully written, holy cow as that intense to read, I loved how you went back and forth, spilling out the story as well as giving the officer's point of view. for one crazy second I was afraid the officer's wife was the one doing the torturing, don't know why, but my mind went there, lol. Very nicely done, in an uber dark, twisted, creepy sort of way. Umm not sure if you meant brunet where you had burnet, but i thought i'd mention it. Thanks for an awesome read.

You know, you just touched on something very important for me, the "don'ts" I was sitting here, kind of feeling sorry for myself because for the past two mornings i;ve been out freezing my tail feathers off in the woods learning to deer hunt (and failing) and I was kicking myself for failing. But reading what you wrote about the 'don'ts' actually made me feel pretty good about myself for trying. It was something I'd always wanted to do, and at least i can say i'm trying, rather than sitting back thinking about trying. Thank you for your words.

Oh wow oh wow oh wow, you write an action scene amazingly,Kev was so lucky not to be in school, and Zune was amazingly brave. Edward, well, looks like there really is more to Edward than might meet the eye, it is going to be fun to read more and see how this turns out! great job!

I really enjoyed this chapter, aside from the two times I have to use a dictionary, Brobdin...err anyway, that word, wow, lol. I love that Zune stood up for himself, bullies only ever seem to get the point when someone refuses to take the bullying anymore. Zune and his mom have such a wonderful relationship, she's definately the 'hip' mom whose kid could tell her anything. I thought it was a great suggestion, and compromise, for her to have Zune come to meet her for dinner so they could have that bit of time together. Great job on the dialogue between them, I look forward to reading the next chapter.

Wonderful first chapter, I love the way Kev thought about doing something and standing up to the bullying but felt held back because of the truce he'd made to keep himself out of confrontation. I found that the bully himself alternated between really foul language, and language that read like something from a different era, with words like evildoers, so he came off a little inconsistent, but not too bad. The interaction between Kev and Carol had me laughing, it's clear they have a ton of affection with one another with the way they tease. moving on now to the second chapter and really looking forward to reading more.

Rin seems like a real jerk, it's a good thing Ryo is protective, I think it's clear that Rin is a rather destructive force that needs to be cut off from doing more damage. Loving the story so far!

Been a red cross menber and CPR certified 1990, all of my high school swim team took the courses together as freshman and made sure to keep certified. I was a lifeguard for awhile too, and many jobs over the years required certification. I've had to use it, a few times, both first aid training and CPR, Its a good thing to know and keep current on.

I can hardly be bothered to keep track of my phone, let alone add in the added worry that I might accidently flush it in the sewer. Not to mention that I'm lucky if i check my facebook twice a week to say hi to family, I couldn't see needing to check social media in the bathroom. I tried twitter, once, for about a day, i coulnd't find the appeal, in that day I learned just how many things that a person does that just aren't worth talking about, I mean really, the world needs to know someone had a ham sandwich for lunch?

I just caught up all in one shot, and let me say, there were moments when i was in tears, moments when I was laughing and Zach is just so adorable and has had such a hard start in life that it was awesome to see good things happening to him. It's going to be neat to see how Zach and Scott find their way in this new relationship with the added pressure of a child, and I'm sure Will isn't done with his attitude and trouble calling yet. I look forward to reading more.

Beautifully touching story

I love the way you reveal just little tidbits at a time, all while building towards what sounds like an inevitable confrontation. These tender moments between are beautifully writen, and the little reveals are so well placed and natural that it makes for a smooth, wonderful read. Looking forward to next week.

You know, a wise, wise comedian once said that the greatest of the commandments should be "Thou shall keep thy religion to thyself" Amen! And Rip George Carlin.

Awesome story, I cheered for Shin at first, and really, really didn't like Young Jae, but as it became clear what he was dealing with and what kind of a person he really was, I started to like him too. I'm glad this all worked out in the end for Min, it was neat to see how he emerged from his reluctance into someone who was stronger than he initially seemed. Great Story!

Oh, I like Susan, and poor mark, talk about treading on eggshells when trying to answer questions, he can't ever seem to win. i love where this story is going! Great job

You've got a very interesting begining here, i love the switches in narration between the chapters and the difference in the personalities between the two main characters, i sense that it is going to be an explosive first meeting. Can't wait to read more.

I found myself organizing today, somewhere in between all the edits on my final project and the frustrating realization that I needed some help or advice from my teacher before I proceeded any further, which, incidentally, had me at that place somewhere between tears and puking my guts out, when the heart is racing and everything seems to be going a little too fast to be real. Anyway, in an effort to calm down and not freak out, since of course it just HAD to be raining outside, so you know, going for a walk was out of the question, it's too damned cold to get wet out there on a night like tonight, I started sorting through old journals and pieces of writing, looking at all the things I've started but never finished, ideas that were outlined but never got off the ground, character creations that fizzled before the story even began. As I looked, I was reminded that somewhere in that pile, I had a notebook filled with ideas, and progress and thoughts on them that was supposed to help me pick my next project to work on, a novel concept, if I could have stuck to it, but somehow, I always ended up in some other direction, hijacked by my muse and leaving all those other projects behind. My roomie is forever telling me that lack of organization means you’re a more creative person, and I’m forever telling her that lack of organization leaves me wanting to either pull my hair out or gouge my eyes out, depending on the day. All in all, I found myself sitting here at near 4 in the morning, a new chapter of my story finished and ready to be proofread and edited, thinking that while I wait on some (hopefully) divine intervention from my teacher, I should look more carefully at all those notebooks, and give some serious thought to whether or not there’s anything in the pile that can actually be saved. I asked my cat’s opinion, he’s a wise Ginger Tom with the sweetest disposition in the world, and he sort of purred and curled up, nudging my hand in that way that suggests either write something or pet me, damnit. So here it is, my first blog. Joining up here at GA has done wonders for my creative process, and who knows, maybe things will finally get finished.

If I'm with a girl, I prefer to be dominant, if I'm with a guy, I prefer to be submissive, though I can still enjoy being submissive to another female, I don't enjoy a non-dominant guy.