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  1. The Currie household must have a commercial sized dishwasher as well as huge refrigerators and an 8-burner stove with 4 ovens! This chapter has set me up for my own Thanksgiving - though it will be on a much smaller scale, to be sure! I have loved all the volumes in this series, but this one has to be my favorite. Great job, Bill. Tony
  2. I don't know Canadian law - only U.S. law - when it comes to suspected abuse. Medical and educational professionals are required by law to report suspected abuse. It is then up to the Department of Children and Families (or whatever that department is called in a given State) to investigate and determine the accuracy of the complaint. Jo has made a complaint to the police, as she told Robbie. Let's see what comes of that. I totally understand Nicola's reaction: she doesn't want to see the family impacted by divorce. She, perhaps, is thinking of the financial consequences, but I'm sure there are mixed feelings regardless. She did state a fact to Robbie, and I don't think it was meant to hurt him as he took it: he doesn't have the history with the family that Daniel, Amy and she have. His history is one of non-acceptance by Don and mixed acceptance by Sue. Even though he was formally adopted, he is still not treated as an equal to the other children. Dodger has done a wonderful job of presenting this story through Robbie's eyes. I certainly look forward to how things progress.
  3. It is wise to remember that we're interpreting everything through Robbie's eyes. I'm not saying his interpretation is inaccurate, but neither is it totally accurate.There's always more to the story than one person's view. That said, I do believe that Don is up to something - he certainly is conniving. I would not be surprised that he has used up funds from Robbie's inheritance. Neither would I be surprised that he has some nefarious plan in progress. Let's see what the coming chapters have to say! Nice job, Dodger. Another chapter soon?
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    NBD Chapter 3

    I am amazed at the instant decisions Lewis makes without any seeming deliberation - sell cars, etc. There is no indication that he has reviewed numbers which would tell the story of the cars' need at the resort or not. Oh well...I guess money talks!
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    NBD Chapter 1

    Good job...it's worth the second read.
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    New York Times

    Fortunately, he has good legal advice and support. I only wish positive things ahead for both him and Bliss...but my cautious mind is always at work questioning possible negative impact of all actions... And now...waiting for Friday!!!
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    NBD Chapter 1

    Are you revising the story - adding more - or using this as a starting point for more adventure with Sebastian, Lewis and the Twins?
  8. Another chapter chock-full of activity. Thanksgiving will be truly that if Julie can make it. I have to admit that, in the spirit of Thanksgiving, when Becky asked what she could bring to the dinner, somehow I read 'pumpkin' upside down cake instead of pineapple...think I'm overloaded with pumpkin spice everything right now!!! Now on to the next chapter!
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    Cross Country

    I am concerned a bit about Chipper: while he is acting like a normal man of his age, he is making some choices which could have very negative impact on his future. I know we all make crazy choices when young (and old too, for that matter!), but I just don't want to see anything prohibiting him from the success he is working towards. I truly love how you are focusing so much into the thousand word limit, Carlos! Great job!!! Tony
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    Chapter 31

    I love the intrigue mixed with the love story The closeness of all the family members gives this story an intimate feel that pulls in the reader. Thanks for continuing, Eric!
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    A Lot Going On

    It is really getting intense now. I am eager to see the developments! As a retired counselor, I must say that I enjoy how you handle the parenting and family working together. I am concerned about how the boys will handle whatever happens to their mother, but they have a superb support system already in place. Tony
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    Chapter 30

    Thank you, thank you thank you!!! I love this story and I am glad you are finally able to continue it!
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    Camper Van

    I just want to see good things for Chipper. However, not path is completely without a few stumbles and/or side roads. And sometimes those detours provide great growth opportunities, painful though they may be. I trust he is smart enough to not totally lose caution! Tony
  14. Really wonderful chapter, Dodger! So much has been said in the other comments and I don't want to repeat. Please be quick with the next chapter. I really want to see Don getting a bit of karma! Tony
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    Jam Session

    Again, a lot packed into a small space. Well done!!! Adam's faith in Chipper is sure to pay off in many serendipitous ways! Tony
  16. A courtroom drama that involves drinking and driving, challenging perceptions of various groups (police and bikers), and wonderful characters. A definite worthwhile read!!
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    Chapter 26

    Excellent story - very well written, serious topics but interjected with humor, and good characters. Tony
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    Chapter 27

    I really ad The Pendleton Omens a while ago. Also Quabbin. I do enjoy your writing.
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    Chapter 27

    Ah....much better closure with this chapter. It was an enjoyable read. Tony
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    Chapter 26

    I guess this makes as good an ending as any....just doesn't feel fully satisfying.
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    Blind Audition

    This format forces you to create a lot in a short amount of space, and you do not disappoint! One can feel the tension, excitement, and drama of the show. Well done! Come on, Tuesday!!! Tony
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    Ghouls and Wizards

    It was good to see the planning for the Haunted House. It was very real with the near fight over who would be doing what. It was good to see the resolution. The parties were wonderful - very creative! Wonderful chapter!
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    Chapter 5

    I really like the premise of this story: siblings who really don't know one another and only have their mother in common between the two sets of full-blooded sibs. I like the fact that the story is unveiling slowly. It gives a chance to feel present with them. My only constructive criticism is the rough grammar seen periodically. Need a proofreader? I would volunteer! Tony
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    Green Room

    Wonderfully warm and very natural chapter! Though, as indicated, the content was known somewhat beforehand before taping, it still felt very spontaneous. In that Cristina has announced what is happening in her life, her husband is on notice that she has very powerful people working for her. Looking forward to Friday!! Tony
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    Chapter 25

    ACH!!!! Just as you get to the solution, you give us a short chapter with a cliffhanger! Good job! Next chapter soon, please!!!!
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