Jason Rimbaud

I mean, when you're right, your write... Tyler is such a perv, I could see him contemplating it.

Are you referring to Boink?

It only took me 19 chapters and nearly 100k words to get those two together so the real story can begin. PS: I love Tyler and Brandon, it's really gonna suck when Brandon starts seeing Devin...I mean when Brandon runs off and joins the covent, that's what I meant to say. .

There was a tonal shift, and what I wanted to do in Part Two, these two chapters no longer fit in. So instead of stopping on Saturday, Part One will end on Sunday. And since I tend to drag things out, one day is worth about forty pages.

Tyler pulled onto Mendenhall Road and said, “Devin will come around. It’s just a bit weird for him.” “I guess if my best friend started dating the school freak, I’d be a bit weirded out too,” Brandon said softly. “Don’t say that,” Tyler admonished him with a frown. “I don’t think you’re a freak.” Brandon rolled his eyes as Tyler continued, “Seriously, he doesn’t think you’re a freak. He’s just uncomfortable because he saw us in bed.” “What?” Brandon exclaimed loudly. “When?”

If that was me taking the pic, I wouldn't share it with anyone..

I think you are way off here, remember whoever this is mentioned me, there can only be like four or five candidates, @Thirdly is high on that list for sure, but there isn't many to choose from, and I don't think she writes mysteries. Unless you can lie on this questionnaire to throw people off the scent? I don't know the rules to this thing as I never even knew this guess an author was a thing.

Bad @Laura S. Fox, you have Cottontail presenting his...well...his tail and then you don't give him his reward. During our next coffee sesh you and I will be having strong words, believe that. On a different note, it's my turn to buy so we can't meet at Starbucks like we always do, too expensive, so can we meet in the park and I'll bring you a coffee from home, almond milk with caramel ice cubes, fresh espresso whipped cream, and shaved chocolate? Let me know, it takes a few days to prepare. 🤪 And by the by, how the *f-word swear* could Jamie sleep next to Cottontail and not peak under the mask? If it would have been me, when Cottontail's mouth was full, I would have removed that mask in a new york second. Jamie must love torturing himself.

So a few things stood out for me, 1. One, you mentioned wings--big thumbs up, I own a wings restaurant and they are my love, obsession 2. Video games and wings---orgasmic combination and one I do all the time, if it were Red Dead Redemption 2 it would be the story of my life. This feels lived in, the characters are comfortable, and though the chapter is short, you immediately get the feel that these are humans who know each other, and genuinely like one another. That's not so easy to do, people write friends all the time but never get that easy rhythm that people who like each other fall into so easily. I will continue on quite enthusiastically. This is only my weird opinion and an argument I've been having with a few of my writer friends, but cliffhangers suck on many levels. Especially when the writing is super strong like the one you gave us, you don't need it to entice moving to the next chapter. Yet I get why you do it, I went over your profile so that all makes perfect sense. I just hate them. Anyway, this is the first story I've read of yours, and I really like your style and your narrative voice, You have me in your corner. J

I've always been fascinated with and by smells, the smells in the kitchen, the scent of fresh mowed grass, it's a very powerful. So it's only natural I incorporate into my writing. Tyler is learning who he is, both as a person and sexually, it's all a fun journey.

These are very nice words and you humble me. Let's hope if you continue reading, your opinion does not change. J

I know, I'm saying it's not you because the only correct answer to what is your favorite ice cream flavor is YES! you know this, so it can't be you.

I thought the same thing, @Thirdly is the only person I know who draws, who collabs with other authors, and always say she never finishes things. But that ice cream flavor choice, my @Thirdly would never choose such a barbaric flavor. .

So I don't have the time to read this story, I will promise I will read it and come back with a better comment. But if there was an award for best title, you would be in the top three all time amazing titles. The title alone made me want to check this story out. J

Not me, I don't eat eggs, I don't like (i meant to say I hate) the smell of dogs and if you were to ask me my favorite flavor of ice cream, I would have to say, yes. Whomever it is, at least in regards to mentioning Glacier Bay, they have bad taste in authors. . J

Remember, all the sex is done, they are now pure christian boys who only think about wholesome things.

I'm a rock star like that...very cool under pressure There is nothing worse than having blue icee thrown on you. Speaking from experience.

So um, I kind of lied, I really don't have a coupon for all you can eat wings. I even make my husband pay when he eats there. But I have something better than a coupon for food for your belly belly. I have added another chapter for you to edit with your mind belly.

For Brandon always saying he's not good around people, he can be charming when the mood suits him. He can also be an ass, either way he'll have blue hair. Since this story isn't really about their relationship, they won't be breaking up, getting back together, for the sake of angst. Now we can start the journey of "us" instead of "I".

Brandon has a few saying that don't make sense, second first impression is one of them. My buddy Five used to say that all the time, normally because the first time someone met him, he was drunk.

Dylan has a few issues, it's not his fault. He was just written that way. (if anyone can guess the movie reference I'll send them a coupon for all the wings they can eat) First date down, now they have to focus on navigating the second week of school.

I couldn't stop laughing when I read this comment. I love that you were outraged, commented, and then went to see if it was warranted. That's so hysterical to me, I love it. If you can't find it anywhere, you can borrow my copy. You'd know where all the good parts were based on the condition of the pages.

Brandon Myers stared at himself in the mirror with a disgusted look on his face. He had chosen his nicest pair of dark blue jeans, a tan v-neck sweater, and a pair of brown dress shoes he had found hidden in the back of his closet in his parents’ house. He turned to get a look from every angle as he tugged at the crotch of his pants. They were a few years old and he could barely button them. He felt like a fool. He looked back at the dozen or so outfits he had already passed on that litter

I don't mind long stories, hell I've re-read the Wheel of Time many times, and that has some of the most boring books ever published. I might check out this other story, if I like the premise, I'd be down.

How did you slog through this travelogue four times? Took me two years to make it through once. On January 22 2023 I wrote this in the prologue: I don't believe I've read this tale before. The sheer size of it is rather frightening to be honest. Normally stories this long are padded with a ton of filler scenes and a penchant for cliffhangers. As prologue goes, this was rather short and mostly an info dump. I'll check out Chapter One and see where this goes. I just finished this story in February 2025. I stopped commenting around chapter nine because I have a new thing to only comment on things I like. I never commented again. But my prediction in the prologue was accurate. When I wrote my review, it was nearly twenty pages. I must admit it was refreshing to say exactly what I wanted to say, even if no one is ever going to read it. Full Disclosure, I continued reading because I wanted to see how the story ended and if the predictions I made somewhere around chapter five came true. Plus I viewed it as a personal challenge to finish it.