Jason Rimbaud

I promise I'll hate you exactly the same as I hate you right now before I read the next chapter tomorrow. J

So I have to stop here, with Dominco birthday present, must go back to work. Very fun read.

And to think, when I first read the title I thought, how nice, a smarter roommate is going to be helping some poor kid with maths, or history. I really was expecting it to be scholastically inclined and I must breath deep of my scented handkerchief before I pass out from the vapors. Oh my. J

I was trying to puzzle out why you had to change it to fit GA's standard. I was thinking all sorts of dirty things, and now it is hinted that it was just because there was a lot of sex in it before. Boring! Domenico displays behavior like he's slightly on the spectrum. He's very matter of fact, oh, I think I'll just taste a liquid that came out the end of someone else's dick. I won't go into that he hadn't shot off in his sleep yet at that age. But he's very innocent in a charming way. And Jake is a perv, blasting on someone without warning them is so last year. Reminds me of my buddy Sean/Shawn, we had been taking turning dry humping each other since we were like eleven. The first time he was able to shoot, I still couldn't as he was a bit older, he didn't warn me or nothing, that was a weird night. It's a slow Saturday night at the restaurant so I think I have time to move onto chapter three.

I remember watching the final one, Return Of The King, on opening night. They were showing the first two leading up to the midnight premier of the final chapter. The guy I was dating at the time drug me there, it was awful to sit in that theater for over nine hours. I did get a t-shirt out of the deal and an HJ during intermission so the night wasn't only a bust, pardon the pun. However, though I think Wheel of Time is by far the better series, Jordan was not a great writer by any stretch of the imagination. He overly describes everything, even a town that Rand passes by briefly in book 2 and then that town is never revisited again. That didn't stop Jordan from describes that town, its inhabitants, and it's customs for six and one half pages. Just self indulgent writing. He was great at world building, horrible and writing clearly. Thus you get so many mysteries that he just never plainly answered, saying all the answers are there if you search. They weren't. His fight descriptions were horrendous, and he loved writing about women's skirts. I do agree that Sanderson did a fantastic job making me care again about the series. My only complaint, he couldn't quite get a handle on Mat until the last book where we finally got the man in the black hat again. I would also go on record as saying A Memory of Light is the best fantasy books ever written. I can only imagine, with almost twenty years experience under his belt, what he might have done with that trilogy now. I have watched many of his free lectures on writing, world building, magic systems you can find on YouTube, I have never read anything of Sanderson outside of the Wheel Of Time. He is an LDS and I refuse to support that church indirectly through Sanderson's tithes, which no doubt is a big chunk of money, no matter how good of a writer he is.

I enjoyed season 1 and if you would like to read my cheeky review just on season one you can do that Here But here is my take overall after watching two seasons. This is a fresh take on the series. This is not Robert Jordan's Wheel of Time. And that's fine. I loved the retelling of the invasion of Three Rivers. Tam pulling the heron marked sword was amazing, watching Matt find the dagger made me exclaim loudly, Moraine and Lan kicking ass in the Three Rivers using the power, on screen and it was amazing. Did Perrin need the backstory of murdering his wife? Did Rand and Eugene need to have been bumping uglies already? The casting across the board was really good, with the exception of Perrin. That actor was too big, Perrin is short and muscular in the books. The issue lies in the fact that Amazon had a huge toy box filled with fun characters, so they just started throwing them around willy nilly. Not sure if it was the showrunner or Amazon who directed the story, but something was off. The Lord Of The Rings Trilogy, is just over nine hours. The Wheel of Time first season is just under eight hours. Which one between the two feels more complete? Lord Of The Rings. Just because you have a thousand characters to play with doesn't mean you should try to cram them all in just eight hours. Thom, introduced in an amazing way, five minutes later he was "dead". So much time dedicated to Logan, when he's not important to the story until much later. Too much time or not enough time is spent on the White Clocks. Too much time or too much time is spent on the White Tower and all the politics of the Aes Sedi. Say what you want to say about Jordan, when it came to the overall story arc, he was second to none in fantasy. Yes he meandered worse than Circumnavigation and had even more filler chapters than that travelogue. But Jordan created an amazing world that the showrunners couldn't handle translating to the screen. I think they were overwhelmed with the fan anticipation that they just tried to do too much. So we got an entire episode about an Aes Sedi and her warder who died. Waste of screen time for sure. The portrayal of Lan in that episode was so out of character it was laughable. Then the ending at the Gap, that happened in like what, five minutes and it was over. I know Covid screwed things up the first season, but then we got season two and it was even more frantic. Because my husband is all in on this show, I will watch season three. But something tells me unless they make some major changes, it will be the last season. And I'm not sure if that will be a bad thing. Even trying to reimagine for a different medium, they didn't use the toys correctly. J

I know I asked someone to tell me when this story was over so I didn't have to wait each week. Well, I'm caught up now. Adam Lambert--American Idol finalist---Lead Singer for Queen. . I'm just being cheeky and fun. J

I've been so busy in my own life, I didn't realize you were posting a new story. I thought you were only re-working it. Anyway, I am a bit late to the party. What an innocent the boy is, and the closing line, what is jerking off made me laugh so loud I was getting looks on the train. J

In all my poetry I use metaphors a lot. Sliding the Pain was my metaphor for my drug use. This is one of my favorites. The next two are dealing with sexual abuse and are a bit heavy. After that, my last poem I ever wrote. Can't wait to close this chapter.

Little by little I'll erode with disease I'm stuck in the middle down on my knees Though I try to be happy I'll never achieve I'm all alone so I'll die while you grieve Accepting the past like a map to begin I'll assume the hatred with a bitter grin A matter of principle to enjoy my sin I'll always fail so why try it again All of your intentions won't stop how I'll feel Taking never giving my love you will steal And if you deny it I'll make it seem so real Tricking w

Okay now I'm really mad at you. Hey everyone, I mis-spoke, Krista and I started a fan club for the movie. Everyone resume normal programing over most of these same stations.

Oh Krista, how right you are, and now I'm mad at you. (Just being cheeky) But your observations are spot on, I am corrected and doff my cap to you. No one watch this movie, me and Krista are frustrated and hate Ballas. We even started a club. J

I thought it worked on two different levels. If you haven't seen it I might spoil a twist... I loved that Franky never denied being gay, never outed his friend, and accepted that life moves on As Ballas, steeped deep in the closet, hurting those around him to cover his true self, and the look of realization of the harm he done at the end when he was holding the necklace, a sign that his friend forgave him even though he didn't deserve it.

Not sure if anyone suggested this movie, I really didn't want to go through seven pages to check. Franky and Ballas have been friends forever, on the night Franky was to lose his virginity to his girlfriend on his sixteenth birthday, she is called away. Franky and Ballas have a drunken night where something sexual happens between them. Their lives are torn apart as Ballas spreads rumors about Franky with the aid of his girlfriend. A twist on the usual gay boy plays around with straight friend. Good acting all around and thought provoking premise about life, friendship, sexuality, and mental health.

Maybe I would have but we’ll never know.

This was the sentences that caused my confusion. Where I thought I missed a time jump somewhere. And with that, the man walked off. “And we need to feed,” Vladimir remarked, his voice a low, seductive whisper. They walked down the street until they came to a busy club, the thumping bass echoing through the night air. It was just what they were looking for—it was all men. The trio entered the club, the pulsating lights casting shadows that danced across their faces. The heavy beats of the music seemed to sync with Thomas’s racing heart. They found a corner booth where they could observe the crowd and plan their next move. These descriptions sounded like a modern dance club to me so I was asking for clarification as I was genuinely confused. And just so I don't look like a further idiot, I know the Roman times was a dream, I also have dyslexia so I couldn't remember the numbers that started chapter one, which is 1840, I went back to look when you said it begins in 1850. That's the trouble with typing out a comment quickly, I should have given greater detail in my first comment and then maybe you would not have taken offense. But at the time, It was a genuine confused moment without intent of offense. Now, not so much. Thank you for responding and I think I have an answer to my question now.

So I love vampires, anyone who knows me knows this. So I was excited when I saw the title with the indication there will be death and blood. I so love vampires who aren't afraid to kill, manipulate, and cause general chaos to mortals. But I am really confused by this story. In chapter one it says 1840 or 1890, but then in chapter two, it talks about going to club, hearing the beat of the music, pulsing lights. I know there is one timeline in Roman times, one in 1840 or 1890, when did the story jump into modern times, did I miss it? Sorry to nit pick, but I'm a bit lost. Can someone point me to where I messed up? J

My husband knows this exists, I told him about it yesterday. I think he's up to chapter five. He reads slower than I...but he refuses to register as this would let me know when he's stalking me on here, plus I'd troll the shit out of him like I do on FaceBook.

So I found this story last night, read all but this chapter. And wow. So i hate stories presented in diary form, I hate when writing diary stories they switch POV's by having another character write in the journal. I hate stories involving children as protagonists, and badasses kids like Garrett I hate even more because they never come off a believable. Oh, and I abhor zombie stories. I'm a vampire kid and my husband is a zombie freak. I don't know why this format works, but god damnit it does, remarkably well even. You capture the chaos and claustrophobic setting in ways that I never read in a zombie story. And instead of making one person who knows everything always, you have spread around the knowledge in believable ways. It kind of reminds me of The Change novels by S.M. Stirling. I love how for the first few weeks, your protagonists lovers kind of sat around, hoping the government was going to do something. The the slow realization if they wanted to live they'd have to do it themselves. When they found Garret in the woods, that was heartbreaking scene, keeping his father alive because he couldn't do what he knew had to be done. Great scene, and Garret being a boy scout for some reason makes me believe he can do what you portray him to do. Just a real good story. For a zombie story, I like that you seem to stick to the original format, mindless beings that aren't alive and have a desire to feed. They aren't fast, or thinking, or some kind of hybrid to create fake drama. That's scary enough in the right hands i guess. Over all, I am enjoying my first ever zombie story.

The ominous countdown at the beginning of Prologue and Chapter One insists they happened on the same day. I'm really hoping the Scandal from the title isn't the Scandal I'm thinking. A closeted teacher, divorced, denial, just as Damien did in the Prologue. I'll continue on to the next chapter.

For only being 1800 words or so, there is a bunch of information conveyed. Not the usual info dump many do, this is relayed to the reader via conversation, a reverse from some telling and not showing. Here you get showing through the dynamics of mother and son. Damien had some issues in middle school, he was bullied, and didn't quite fit in. Now he has the chance to make a new start at a new school. And who wouldn't be estatic to no longer have to sit through mass. I'm down to dip a toe and see where this leads. J

I just saw this because of Myr's Deep Dive blog post and what a great way to start my day off. I got a GED at sixteen, which I think a trained monkey could pass, and never made it to college so my education level pales in comparison to most other people on this site. Whatever small amount of knowledge I have was because I found interest in something and did my research. Not only does research make your story better, it also expands your mind, like one commenters said so elegantly above. I read as much as I can, incorporate that into my work when applicable, and like you said, I tend to get lost in the research. One of my friends recently received his Masters in History. Being as that is a subject I love, I did all his homework alongside him, wrote the same research papers, read the same books, and listened to the same lectures, he was kind enough to record all of them. And while I never received a piece of paper, it was a personal milestone to take the journey alongside my friend and receive the same knowledge. You don't have to go to school to learn something. Great article and one I think everyone could find benefit from reading.

I love metaphors, and the idea of the shrubs and what they represent was powerful imagery indeed. The feeling of helplessness was palatable as the father looked back on how his life fell apart. Very nicely done. J

I've known a lot of Dave's in my life. While this is a fictional story, it runs parallel to one of my high school friends. He didn't shoot someone but he did kill another boy in a car accident. They were trying to avoid a DUI checkpoint and the car he was driving overturned and his friend was thrown from the vehicle and crushed underneath it. My friend escape with barely a scratch. He spent about ten years in jail for that offense. It wasn't his last time behind bars either. Thanks for commenting. Only four more to go.

There was this boy I knew We both went to the very same school We were best buddies we were pals I even stayed with him once in a while We were just like two pees in a pod Liked the same things it was rather odd All through the Junior High We'd try to catch the pretty girls eye Since I was the loud one in my class Bold and brazen I had a lot of brass He sort of kept me on the narrow Claimed I was like a broken arrow He warned me to settle down And not be the wild boy in