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Chapter 35 – Another Haunted House
Butcher56 commented on Bill W's story chapter in Chapter 35 – Another Haunted House
All I can say is Happy Halloween! I think the favorable comments from the ones who visited the haunted house helped the ones working in it that they had done a great job of getting things organized and set up as they do every year ever since Josh started taking in the boys in the beginning. -
Chapter 34 – A Problem and Preparations
Butcher56 commented on Bill W's story chapter in Chapter 34 – A Problem and Preparations
Another great chapter. It seems like the annual haunted house is taking shape including a few new things like masks and animated characters. I hope the younger boys have a great time going through it when they’re ready for the trial run so that if there are any problems they have a bit of time to get them fixed. I hope the issue with Xander is over and done with after the kids who were calling him names and teasing him got a stern warning from the principal of the elementary school. -
Such an excellent chapter. I think the idea of just showing up to their old school just as the assembly is getting started was great. The receptionist was very humbled by the fact that she was in the presence of a Lord who happened to be a former student at the school. When she took the card to the Headmaster and he read it in surprise he introduced them to the school and during the time they were talking to the school their former history teacher found out the reason for the omissions in the paper Edwin turned in and the teacher said that he now understands why he did it the way he did and that it was for his protection. After the assembly some of the students came up to Edwin and asked for his autograph which he gave them without hesitation. I think Brad will be great in his new job as business manager for the Baron of Fordell.
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Awesome chapter. It seems like Jimmy may never be able to join the pack for one reason or another. He and Fergus had a deal in place and Fergus just told him he had to wait again because it would be suspicious for him to join right now. Jimmy is very upset with the situation as it stands right now, he’s done what he was supposed to do only the rogue (Irwin).
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I am glad that the holidays of Christmas and New Years were very festive and that Edwin was able to spend them with his family. I’m glad that Aunt Bea was able to return to Scotland and spend her final days surrounded by her family who loved her without fail, she passed quietly during the night after the New Years celebration at Balcarres where she had numerous fond memories of the time she spent there in her younger years. I’m sure that her reunion with the current Earl of Crawford was another fond memory for her as she hadn’t seen him in over fifteen years. Such a fantastic chapter to read as well as being so well written. I’m going to be waiting for the next chapter in hopes of getting a glimpse of the family crypt below the Priory.
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Fantastic chapter and beginning to the story. Alexander has now recovered from his bought with malaria and is now working full time again. Edwin has been busy with his projects as well, restoring the Crawford Priory, returning Haig Hall to it’s original use as a country residence instead of the hotel, along with purchasing some farms south of the Haig Estate and turning them into a airfield making it easier to travel around to check on the other properties. Now Robert has bought another property and gave it to Edwin and his new title is the Right Honorable, Lord Crawford, Baron of Fordell, and he is receiving his new title from the Queen this time at Buckingham Palace which he and Robert have been invited to. I can understand why aunt Bea answered the phone the way she did when Edwin called to talk to her and his mum so that he and Robert could tell them about the new title and property and to invite them to come see it for themselves with the media the way they are.
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That’s so true. It’s always great to read something like this around Halloween.
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Fantastic start to what appears to be a great story. Skyler is supposed to be on a camping trip with his Boy Scout troop only we find out that he’s a new blood vampire and he’s supposed to be looking for his first feed only he runs into another boy who claims to be a 250 year old vampire himself. I think the feeling that he got around Josh is going to become very real in a very short time. Maybe if he gets a boyfriend soon then he’ll be able to concentrate on his first feeding.
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Another amazing chapter. Shane and Deme are enjoying the chance to have some time to themselves taking full advantage of the opportunity to have sex and just be close to each other. Now as they’re finally cleaning up a friend of Sarah’s shows up and both boys are still naked and sporting hard ons it just so happens that there’s only one towel in the bathroom. I hope that whatever Shane is thinking of doing goes well so that Stephanie doesn’t find out about him and Deme.
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Chapter 30 – The More They Stay the Same
Butcher56 commented on Bill W's story chapter in Chapter 30 – The More They Stay the Same
At least there’s some information coming out about the Tamara situation. I’m glad that Joshie enjoyed his birthday party and all of the presents he got. I’m glad that everyone enjoyed meeting TJ for the first time and all of the people from the church who were saying what a good baby he is. -
I can’t comment on anyone else who reads your stories all I can comment on is that I thoroughly enjoyed reading all of your stories and there are times when I go back to read them again and then I find out that I have missed a few things when I read them before. I hope that you’re feeling better today and will continue to write these amazing stories, I for one will be there to read them although I may be a little bit behind the other readers as my son has been in the ICU for the last month and was just moved to a regular room and he will be moving to another hospital for further treatment including occupational and physical therapy. He had a severe infection in abdomen due to his bowel being trapped in four places as well as being perforated in another four places. He appears to be on the upslope side of this infection and hospitalization he just needs to regain his strength back and then hopefully he’ll get to come home.
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Edwin got more than he even expected from his 2nd cousin, especially since he has just learned of his relationship to the Earl of Crawford. He came to Scotland to learn more about his cousin and his work as the 29th Earl and now he’s received the title of Baronet of Wigan by the Queen herself which was a shock in itself as he definitely wasn’t expecting to meet the Queen of England either. I think this trip is becoming more than a young man of sixteen ever expected to have happen in his lifetime and to think that all of this started because of a an assignment by his history teacher to write a 3500 word paper on one side of his family. I’m glad that I decided to go back and reread the story.
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What an interesting chapter. Nobody ever told Erik that he couldn’t do magic, but yet Demetrius proved that he could. The idea of using the emotions that you’re feeling at the moment is unheard of but he proved that Erik could only use the magic when he felt a strong emotion. When Seth brought the handkerchief out that belongs to Toby and tied it to Erik’s wrist and he brought up the memories of how Toby carried them and that they had his smell on them. I can only imagine what kind of warrior Erik will be by having the handkerchief tied to his wrist and him reminding himself of the person who owns the handkerchief. I can hardly wait for the next chapter to see if the battle goes well. Thanks for the great opportunity to read this story.
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The ending was very dramatic and open ended, it made me want more of Jacob Simba Blackwood and his friends and family. I hope we don’t have to wait long for the next book about Simba. I hope that his getting kidnapped isn’t anything to do with the man who was after him and his uncle that wound up with his being granted the honorary rank of Corporal and his security clearance as well.
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It seems like Jacob is now the resident expert for the Ten Fold containers. Then uncle Nat surprised him and Aaron with the fact that the navy ship was carrying the treehouse container for the Kushi Project. After all of the buildings were in place Uncle Nat called the navy ship and said to unload the last container which was delivered to the Kushi Project area and it contained quad bikes as well as the equipment to mark out a track for them to go on. Amazing chapter.
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Chapter 29 – The More Things Change.
Butcher56 commented on Bill W's story chapter in Chapter 29 – The More Things Change.
Awesome chapter. I can’t believe that things like what are happening to Tamara in the story are still happening in today’s world. I guess it doesn’t matter how open society is about an issue there will always be those who don’t agree with it and they make a great deal of trouble about it, in this case it’s a boy who knows he wants to be a girl and he’s now dressing like a girl and he’s even asked to be called Tamara instead of Tommy. I hope that the school and the superintendent will be able to take care of the situation and then deal with the students that are causing the problems since it’s against the law for this kind of abuse to take place whether or not it’s happening there. I can’t wait to read the next chapter to see how the situation is going and what action is being done to protect Tamara. Thank you for the great story and bringing the issue of this type of harassment to light. -
It was quite a surprise for Jacob to come across the man sitting under a tree crying. Jacob being the caring person that he is offered to help Aaron with his situation and he finds out that he’s actually a third cousin of Jacob’s due to his father being uncle Nat’s second cousin. He asked for verification of a few details about his father and then he told them that Aaron was actually family. I’m glad that they are able to help him out and arrangements will be made for him to return to Australia with Jacob so he can be around family that will accept him for who he is as a person.
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Even after being warned numerous times that he needs to watch what he says and to whom he’s saying it Cadet Lumbasi is now in front of the CO along with Jacob. Lumbasi has been ordered to look very closely at Jacob’s ID and then say what he finds different from his, he says that the badge says that Jacob is an honorary Corporal in the army and it also says DIO and has AG SC3. I’m sure this is all very confusing to him and he will find out what it all means very soon. I’m glad that they were ordered to appear before the CO and that Lumbasi is finding out that he needs to watch what he says around other people when he’s told that by the person who he’s talking about.
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Awesome chapter and start to the story. I like that Jacob is reunited with two friends who are attending the same university as he is. When he heard about them still living at home as they couldn’t afford to live elsewhere and still attend the university. Jacob came up with the idea of asking his uncle for permission for Willl and Chris to live with them and pay for the boarding as well as keeping their areas clean and doing chores outside. After the first week of lectures the guys show up with their parents and then they find out about all of the accomplishments that Jacob has as well as finding out that he has an artificial foot so he can’t do any more climbing of mountains.
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What a great chapter and story. I think the final scene of the trio at the peak of the mountain was so well written, seeing the mother elephant come out of the brush with her little one and let the guys know that she was in charge as she kept coming at them. When the baby elephant walked up to Jacob and started sniffing him was absolutely amazing and then the mother did the same thing all the while Jabari was getting it all on film. I would have liked to see what his parents as well as Afya and Uncle Nat thought of the scene of Simba and the elephants. It’s great to see how Simba didn’t let his prosthetic foot keep him from climbing the mountain again, he is a very exceptional person and he’s always trying to help others before himself. Thank you quokka for the excellent story, I think I loved it more this time than I did before.
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This is the same chapter as 10.
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To say that the Senator is now going to think long and hard before he doubts any of the elves in the future. I think Havar had better control his emotions and let things play out as they will before he goes and gets himself into trouble. He’s already just about shot down any chance of a meaningful alliance with the humans by his own actions, I wonder if that was the reason why he wanted to be a part of the meeting. I think the sparing match between Chris and the four elite forces of the Jupiter Force was highly underrated as they were no match for him, now the match between him and his great grandfather was a more magical than the human delegation thought would happen. Fantastic chapter by the way.
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Fantastic chapter. It’s great to see that TJ is finally home and doing well. He has two great brothers to be with as well as many cousins, aunts and uncles as well as two grandfathers who will love him as much as they do the other boys and their fathers. I’m sure he’s going to be held a lot by everyone and he’ll get to know his grandpa Josh more than his poppy since he’s still working, grandpa Josh is going to be caring for him while everyone else is working and in school.
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Chris has now absorbed another demon into himself as soon as he did that the barrier came down and the sun shined through. To me it seems like the demons are getting stronger and therefore will take longer than usual to get them absorbed. Fantastic chapter by the way.
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It seems like Chris’ dreams are getting more confusing than anything else. Every time he has one of his strange dreams he wakes up and can’t remember what it was about. The last scan of Chris came up with more questions than answers in that his energy signature is becoming more than his alone as they found three more signatures besides his and Yonthar which is being adapted to his own signature.
