JeffreyL

Not quite a year ago I finished reading this story. I was gobsmacked by the cliffhanger at the time and didn't comment on the rest, although it looks like I lost some (most?) of my comment. Well the pleasure of reading your writing was just as great the second time around! Even if I knew most of what was going to happen. Your characters, dialogue, descriptions, and the little details you sprinkle throughout a chapter are all terrific! Your characters are well-rounded and never cookie cutter (football players that are smart, caring, and tolerant? 😜). Even the supporting players are well written (the cleaning lady that sneaks Preston into Indy's office for one). As has been mentioned in several comments, your dialogue sounds real, each character has their own voice, and your ability to write a group conversation that your readers can follow is amazing! A perfect example of your writing ability: I fell in love with Indy's mom in a dozen or so paragraphs and some touching dialogue. You captured her love and concern for her child perfectly, and gave readers a look at Indy from a different point-of-view. Thank you for your wonderful writing and this better than good story! Jeff

Thanks for some more insight into Michael, at least from Chris's perspective. Like Lux I still wonder if there was something in Michael's early years that set him on this path. Or maybe he was just wired that way. For years in the nature vs nurture debate I was a big supporter of nuture. After teaching for many years, and having siblings in class, I began to change my mind. Seeing two very different kids with the same parents/home life made a strong case for being born that way. Thanks. Jeff

I am happy that Chris has the support of other young wolves in this pack. In spite of suicidal thoughts I feel like he will get through this and come out the other side a better person.

I binged chapters one through twenty today. My lawn is not mowed, my dishes are not done, and my desk still needs the papers on it sorted. Although I should make you come to my home to help me catch up on chores, instead I will thank you for this great story! You wrote well developed characters I grew to care about. Their conversations were believable. You sprinkled in details to make it easy to relate to these characters. Maybe you had too many cliffhangers. 😜 But at the end of each chapter, cliffhanger or not, I couldn't wait to get on to the next chapter. Thank you for a most enjoyable day! Jeff P.S. I'm retired so my chores can wait until tomorrow.

It was nice to finally hear from Ryo's father. Sounds like there may be HEA after all.

Well when it finally happens the sex is hot! But then is spite of the pitfalls and roadblocks, the sex has always been hot! Can't wait to see what happens with Ryo in NYC.

Will Soubi go along with Sei's plan for Ryo? And what will that do to both of them and their romance. The romance seems to already have developed big cracks.

Is this idea of family obligation so ingrained in their culture that Ryo must let it ruin his life? I thought this attitude was changing in modern day Japan. I suppose it unrealistic for Ryo to tell his parents to "get lost" and go live his own life. It is interesting how Soubi and Ryo seem to have switched roles from their start of the story.

Drama much? I know Soubi has been under a lot if stress, but he's not even stopping to think if things can work out in Ginza. The "reunion" was sweet.

Oh this is so frustrating. Everyone is in limbo, and there doesn't seem to be any escape soon. Still loving our guys and hoping for a break for them.

You really managed to hit the highs and lows with this chapter. I hope Kaito can keep Soubi from falling apart, and I hope Ryo can survive being with his parents.

This was a mostly pleasant little interlude. This can't be all we're going to hear from Mother and Rin. More trouble waiting in the wings?

So we've had round one with Mother. Now Rin is here. What is it they say, time for the other shoe to drop.

The sex between these two is pretty hot! And both being jealous was amusing. No Rin yet, and nothing from Ryo's family directly. I'm certain the guys need to clear both these hurdles before the HEA. I'm really enjoying how you're developing this story and these characters! Thanks. Jeff

Oh Lilansui, you are evil! Just as things are sorting themselves out between Ryo and Soubi you bring back the old boyfriend. Have to take a break, but I'll be back for more.

Loved the new character Sasha! He was just the calm voice Soubi needed to hear. I need to stop reading and do a few chores, but you keep ending at a spot that makes me read another chapter. 😉 One more and then I pause.

In a romantic story there is almost always a set back or two. It's sad, but Soubi is learning how hard it can be to change your reputation. People often don't want to accept that you're trying to change.

Ah the start of a romance! Can't wait for more!

And so you peel back another layer, and we learn a little more about the characters. Sound like Ryo's family dynamic is complex.

I hope Ryo keeps being a caveman. I think Soubi needs that to get himself sorted. And if love happens that would be great! Also, I really liked Kaito! He is a great distraction for Soubi.

Like Joann I am wondering how Ryo fits into Soubi's life. It is hard for me to imagine Soubi being treated badly and then going weak at the knees when Rin shows up much later. I also wonder why Rin is back.

I have just come across this story, and having read some of your other stories, I decided to read it. I see my comment is about five years after the ones already posted, but good start! You've created an interesting triangle, and I'm sure I'll enjoy seeing how this developed. Thanks. Jeff

So if the first episode in this chapter is John and Wes, maybe blonde number five is the one to break the string of bad luck? The rest sounds like a nice beginning to a romance. Can't wait to see what happens next. Thanks. Jeff

The early times of a romance are fun to read about. This story is no exception. And kissing is always a good thing! Thanks for some sweet romancing. Jeff

Wow! You dropped a bomb shell of information in that chapter! Good to finally know for certain about Raymond. Can't wait to see what happens next. Thanks. Jeff