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I always enjoy how caring and loving this family is to each other. Always supportive in a crisis. Like JayT I assume it's a photo/photos of Will. Always good. Thanks for more.
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Brace yourself, Wolf, it's time for some gushing! I finished my reread in record time! Your writing style, your characters, and the plot were all superb! I know I've already said it, but this story was just as exciting the second time around! Wow! Thank you so much for a most enjoyable story. I'll keep my eyes peeled for book three. 😉 Jeff
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I am not certain why I think you'd care, but I can't put my tablet down. Your story is still riveting the second time around. This is day three of my reread, and you can see I haven't kept to my planned ten chapters a day. Off to enjoy the Fourth of July. What a place to stop! Happy Fourth of July. Jeff
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Aaaarrrgh! I am so weak, and your story is so good! I was going to allow myself ten chapters a day for this reread. Here I am at chapter twenty-five on day two because I couldn't stop. Even the second time around this is so enjoyable! Now I must stop. Housework and some bills to pay are calling. Maybe one more chapter at bedtime. 😄 Thanks for this great story! Jeff
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Binged chapters one through nine yesterday. Starting my second binge today. Finding details I'd forgotten, and reading about Chris with a different perspective. Just as enjoyable the second time around! Thanks. Jeff
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This was a most enjoyable read, with lots of clever details! Your imagination must have been working overtime. I look forward to chapter two and maybe more to come. Thanks. Jeff
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I enjoyed this story so much the first time! I came across it while looking for a new story to read. Thought I would reread this for fun.
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Chapter two did not disappoint! Rowan and Grant meet, and are even more intriguing than in the last chapter. Each has unsettled the other in a good way. I look forward to their next Saturday meeting. Thanks. Jeff
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Well this chapter has upped the intensity a notch or two. I hope when the dust settles, Bailey will give Declan a chance to explain. Of course, these are teenagers, so we will have to have some drama and angst first.
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It's fun to see these characters from a different point of view. Thanks. Jeff
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The Vicissitudes of Virgo
JeffreyL commented on JamesSavik's story chapter in The Vicissitudes of Virgo
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I was taught to respect the police and thought they were the good guys. That continued until my daughter made some choices that put her in the system. I have come to realize that the police are like the rest of us: good, bad, and in between. I also learned the legal system is not always about paying for your mistakes, rehabilitation, and getting getting on with your life. In my second hand experience getting out of the system takes a lot of effort and support. Your writing is very good. I feel sad for what happened to you, yet you write in a matter of fact way without a lot of drama and emotion. It is a side of life I wouldn't know much about without your writing. Thank you for sharing your story.
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There is an old saying about honor among thieves. I googled it, and it kind of applies. It sounds like Ty was a bit of a guardian angel for you. Thank you for sharing these memories. I hope the writing process helps you heal.
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I enjoyed this just as much the second time! I am thankful you got yourself off the streets. I am afraid there are too many teens who don't. Thank goodness for your guardian angels and your own stubborn determination! This was a moving and enjoyable story. Enjoyable doesn't feel like the best word to use, but your story was really good. Thanks. Jeff
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This is so out of my range of experiences, and when I read Tim's comments that you are doing a good job of capturing this experience, it makes me sad. I would like to give Matt a big hug had then drag him to Dan's and Andrew's home and lock him in.
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I am rereading this and parts are coming back to me as I read. How sad these caring guys had a friend who was so despicable. I wish Dan and Andrew could get through to Matt.
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I plan to read " Memories of a Street Rat" and decided I should reread this first. I had kind of forgotten how much I enjoyed this the first time! Plot, characters, and dialogue are all first rate! Thanks. Jeff
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Love that Marty! Everyone should have a best friend like him. I'm enjoying seeing Alek and Liam taking it slow. They really are good together. It reminds me of early days in the previous story.
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You have three intriguing characters, some great dialogue, and an interesting beginning. I will be back for more. Can't wait to see where this goes! Thanks for this good beginning. Jeff
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Long chapter, short chapter, I don't care as long as there is a next chapter. I am glad to see TJ settling in, making friends, and sorting out his relation with Robert. I like the newest member of TJ's circle of friends. Kevin seems like a nice guy, and I have a soft spot in my heart for the gentle giant type. You've also added a new potential villain, Kevin's dad. As if Mel and Rachel weren't enough. Love to hate them! I wonder what trouble Kevin's dad can cause. Nice to see the responsible adults circling the wagons to keep Kevin safe. If I haven't said it lately, I am really enjoying this story. Good writing! Thanks. Jeff
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You have written a wonderful wedding day! From the pre-wedding jitters to the post-wedding sex, it was perfect. And joyous as a day with Will's and Liam's family usually is. Good job writing about this happy day! Thanks. Jeff
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Loved the conversation between Ryder and Teddy; not so much the conversation between Mike and Teddy. Mike is a jerk, and I think the other commenters are right, he is jealous.
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Thanks for letting us see more of Ryder's depression. It was interesting to listen to his grandmother talk to Teddy. And in spite of being a golden child how can you not like Teddy? I think he was being honest talking to Grandmother about Ryder, but when you're young romance can come and go. In this case I hope not. Thanks.
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Another terrific chapter! I think take it slow and communicate will be good for Liam and Alek. You do a good job writing their dialogue so it sounds like them. I notice both seem to want to apologize with the other saying no need for that. Hopefully they'll actually hear the no need for that part of the message. Thanks for more good story. And as I've said more than once: you've gotta love these guys!
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You have created some interesting, complex characters in Chandler and Landon. I still don't care about Landon, but maybe, as Onim stated, Chandler can get him sorted or they can sort each other out.
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