JeffreyL

It all makes me wonder what made Michael the way he was. From what I remember from the other story the Alpha and his wife seemed to be good caring people. And the pack as a whole seemed the same. No wonder Chris is struggling to sort out his feelings. He has been through a lot of both mental and physical abuse. It does my heart good to see him making progress.

I was pleased with Declan and his friends in the lunchroom. It was a mixed group and didn't focus exclusively on sports. I think it also made Bailey just a little more comfortable in his own skin. It's also good to see Declan reconnect with himself and begin to move away from Chris's control. The crossover practice may not help Chris and Eric, but I think it will be a good thing for a lot of the others, football players and gymnasts. Kudos to the coaches for a good idea. It is always easy to judge others when you don't know much about them. That old saying "walk a mile in his shoes" comes to mind. Sadly, like several other commenters I am afraid Chris won't give in without a fight. I do think he's burning bridges and going to have less and less support as the story progresses. Thanks. Jeff

March was a good month for CJ, and Friday is a good day for reading all about it. I enjoyed your terrific dialogue as usual, but I especially liked the conversation between Patrick and CJ. I did miss the Cesar's and Brett's pillow talk at the end, but I'm coming to accept the shift from the "older" crowd to the young ones. Thanks. Jeff

This was a very enjoyable story! I have read it somewhere before, so as I reread things came back to me. It was just as good the second time around. Thanks. Jeff

Catherine is terrific! Yeah she's bossy and outspoken, but you can tell she loves Frank and wants the best for him.

Although it has a sad beginning, your story seems to leave room for HEA. I already like both Chris and Frank, and I'm seeing several ways this story can go. Can't wait to see how it does play out. I know I've read at least the beginning before, but my old brain can't remember how things work out. Thanks. Jeff

As soon as I started reading I realised I'd read this story before. I can't imagine why there is no comment from me, unless I read this on another sight. Anyway I really enjoyed this short story! You did a great job letting us know the characters quickly. The detail of the fight was great, if gory, and you seemed to know what was important to tell and what you could leave out. The ending was good in that the story seems complete. However, I wouldn't complain if I had the chance to read more about Gary and Bill. Thanks. Jeff

I enjoyed the romance at Raymond's and the drama at the sheriff's office. I thought the conversation in the diner was interesting. I still wonder about Miss Julie. Her magical intuition keeps me wondering can a real person be that perceptive? Thanks for more. Jeff

I enjoyed the intro and chapter one! I look forward to reading about how the relationship between Mike and Kris developes. Thanks. Jeff

Thanks for including the Parker Valley Pack attack. It helps to understand where Chris is at, time-wise, in relation to his old pack. I find it interesting that Chris's new pack seems to be so accepting. No one has confronted him about what a bad guy he was. I really enjoy seeing Chris's introspection through his journal entries. Thanks. Jeff

This was a lot of fun! I read the Aditus story first (as recommended) and really enjoyed it. I was especially happy to see Peter and Patrick from this point of view, and to know Michael has a guardian angel. Thanks. Jeff

A comment at the beginning of a Timothy M story sent me here. I really enjoyed this story. Great characters and dialogue! When I finish the Timothy M story, I'll be back to read more of yours. Thanks. Jeff

I am happy Chris had some wolf time! I am curious to see where friendships will form and wondering if friendship will develope into more.

Like the others, I am intrigued by this first chapter. It is amusing to think it starts with what appears to be a murder, but isn't a murder mystery. This story is complete, so I will read on and comment along the way. Thanks. Jeff

I was browsing through your story list, came across "Apprentice," and decided to reread it. I enjoyed it as much as the first time! Your talent for believable characters, good dialogue and description, and knowing what to include in your plot (as well as what can be left out) never fails to amaze me! Must be about time for another Tattoo Boys story? 😉 Thanks for sharing your writing. Jeff

It's always fun to read about a big group of friends and family who get together to enjoy each others company! Thanks for more fun with Will and Liam! Jeff

I hope writing and posting about the loss of your soul mate will give you peace. You have my sympathies. Jeff

I am so glad Patrick and Fiona hit it off! Maybe the other cousins mentioned will turn out to be as nice. New friends and family for Patrick are wonderful! Now we need to get Michael through his hospital stay. Thanks. Jeff

Wow, Michael was even more messed up than I realised. I'm still rooting for Chris. I feel he has come a long way already, and I am hoping he can get himself sorted out and have a chance at a normal life. Thanks. Jeff

It is always fun when the extended family gets together! And you, sir, have a real knack for writing conversations of a crowd. I doubt that's a real writing term, but you seem to be able to include almost everyone in a group, give them something to say that adds to the story, and keep them sorted for your reader. I really appreciated the thoughts on raising children Caesar shared with Brett. You must be a pretty good dad. Thanks. Jeff

Christmas when it got here was a little over the top! Ah for the life of a rich person - or not. I loved the romantic, pampering bath at the end. Looking forward to what comes next! Thanks. Jeff

A step forward for both. It gives me hope Declan and Bailey can support each other eventually. It was good to see Bailey let someone in, even if it was just a little. More good story. Thanks. Jeff

I am glad Alek and Liam had a chance to talk. It sounded like clearing the air and ready to move forward wherever that will lead. Love these characters; love this story! Thanks. Jeff

I loved the conversation with the neighbor, and three cheers for Mr. Archibald! He really put Mrs. Thorn-in-the-side in her place. I hope the meeting goes well and leads to dinner with Peter attending as well. I love it when Patrick and Peter get frisky! Love, caring, and lust all rolled into one!

You have set up an interesting premise. I thought blondes were supposed to be the good guy/hero. This may prove to be an interesting twist. I'll be back for chapter two. Thanks. Jeff