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I asked @Ethan in the story comments. "This" story existed on another site, but Ethan is not reposting it, he is correcting, expanding and even changing bit of it. Even his writing style is much better now, so even if you guys Knew the story, you probably will get good surprises.

Oh, poor Noah. His brother's comments about gay marriage don't suggest he is very open minded, but I hope that he is open enough to change is views and don't reject Noah also. I feel like their parents didn't told him the reason for the fight, so I hope he is not meeting Noah just so he end up hurting him as well. Noah's mind is probably unable to focus right now, but he should call Jordan. Whatever will happen or not, he owes Jordan and himself to tell his ex partner What happened. Maybe Jenn, with her disregard about boundaries, will call Jordan to tell him.

Thank you for another great chapter. Yeah, it complicated to think about Loz, he is a rapist that hurt Daniel, but we can also feel his pain and destructive self about homosexuality. I hope he does get his life turned around, but happy that he was expelled, Daniel doesn't have to look at him anymore. The father was better then he thought though.

Super cool story. Did you end up writing the sequel? It would be cool to see how the pack will grow and stabilize itself. And how Kurt slowly develop his person and alpha skill, now that there are others he has to interact. And it will be fun to watch Kurt being the top when they are human, and Tahryn being the dominant wolf. They give being versatile a new dimension 😂

Sorry I don't just see roses but Damien, spiky? Dallas is a giant douche. First time they meet: “Your mom might not have realised yet, but I know you’re a faggot.”

I don't remember, Andy says he is self employed, but what does he do exactly?

Lovely chapter, and funny too. Worried about Brad though.

I normally don't comment stories that are finished, I feel quite foolish giving my opinion on what's going to happened to characters if I can just binge read them. And I read the comments, so I saw Sasha saying that Bay has internalized homophobia. Maybe he has, I will see next chapters, but until this I don't really see it yet. I think he was not expressing himself very well to his new co-workers, But I feel that for his comments they are not getting that he isn't necessarily repressed or femme-hatter, it's not the out and proud gays he dislikes, is being forced to be a particular way he is not. It's being abandoned and labeled. Deep down he might dislike his previous "mates" and his family, particularly his father, more than any gay femme. He would probably like the "faaaab-ulous crowd" if his family and "friends" hadn't force him to be one on them.

me? Sure

Hey @Bucket1, while we have the colds here, I read it was 64C in Australia, Adelaide I think? Is that true? Are you guys frying?

Can wait for you to reach the chapters I had read in other site already, I think the last one was the 10. This story is very cool

This is why I rarely read prompts responses, I really want to know more about these guys now 😃

I hear your But in this case right now, nah... Aria is not really into sex, at least for now, and although they could just cuddle in the bedroom, I think it's probably best for him to be surrounded by other people, people that care. I think that if they all cuddled in the living room, the kind look in Jay's face, the caring and maybe the look of approval in Drew's mother, will probably do more to them than time alone. They never had adults, parents, that cared.

Forgot to say that as a non native, I understand and don't judge to hard if there are some english mistakes. I live in the US now, and used english to write in the professional world before. Still do some mistakes. But there is a minimum of punctuation, an sentence building, below which I cannot read. At least please turn on the Word grammar and spelling corrector, and run through your story after you finish writing it.

Don't remember if I ever wrote in this forum, so I am sorry if I am repeating myself. I am not against anything in particular, although some things have to be done beautifully, otherwise they are harder to let it pass. I did read books with plenty of description, even landscapes (who doesn't remember Shire description in the first 50 pages or so of Lord of the Rings? It's like you have to survive that and the story suddenly blooms). Or sex scenes, sensual and sexual innuendo, even a bit raunchy (once I read a story where an international exchange student was trying to arouse her professor and says that when she gets pregnant, she wants to do a traditional fish soup from her country with the milk from her breasts). But the thing with descriptions, being external landscapes or internal overused debates and angst, it that for me they became boring if overly repeated. Same with sex scenes, although I do like sex scenes in stories, when appropriate. They can expressed so many things if properly done, but please if your character do always the same thing, I might not need a detailed description of the same event every time. The funny thing is that being "boring" as a writer appears in all sorts of situations, from new authors to signature/classic ones. Some examples: I read a pretty long story on site about the life of two young adults (high school, college, 1st jobs). I liked the story (I am plot addicted) and read until the end, but sometimes I noticed that I was quickly reading or jumping parts of the sex scenes. They happened in almost all chapters (or every other one), and although I like blowjobs and sex as much as every other young male, there is so much of "amazing blowjob and sweet lovemaking" from A to B, and B to A next time, that I can read before getting bored with the repetition. There is also an author with tons of stories that I will finish reading because I really want to know what will happen (plot addicted remember?), but most of the stories have similar age target groups and you can feel that either all is characters are a "part of them", or are at least obvious their "sons". All the young men have the same/similar doubts, with similar fears (until here it could be normal), but they all have the habit of having long, suffering internal debates. There is so much of the same "do I do it? No one can know! My life is so horrible messy!" that I can read before I start thinking I already read exactly the same two chapters ago in the previous (and sometimes the same) story. It is like character A in story Z his and alter ego of character B in story Y. I once abandoned a story that had to much sex, and the plot seemed to be cut out just so that all the characters would have their fun in multiple combinations. I am not saying the story was not good, I thing it was even promoted by the site Stories Blog, but for me was tiring. I mean, I am not a prude, but if I wanted sex only I would look for it specifically in other places, I don't need to suffer through a plot with weirdly bad decisions just so the "two couples can have a fuck feast", or that single guys get invited to join the couples to "cheer them up" and provide "emotional support". There are quicker ways if I want to read sex only

And Aria also got the medicine the he needed... Drew... Amara just have to wake up and join them on the couch

Yes it does!

Hi Marty, I am not a writer myself, but I have read many of the authors here talked about it. I think there are even some threads in the forums. Most of what I have heard from authors I follow is that you should try to pause in the things you are trying to write, and start something completely different, like some prompts, to see you you can get started again.

Hi Marty, I am not a writer myself, but I have read many of the authors here talked about it. I think there are even some threads in the forums. Most of what I have heard from authors I follow is that you should try to pause in the things you are trying to write, and start something completely different, like some prompts, to see you you can get started again.

yeah, I understand being scared, but Noah was not a good guy. He basically threw their relationship and blame Jordan for all things wrong. Like Jordan said, I hope he doesn't end up whoring out or sexually assaulted by Sebastian. Hopefully he will feel so miserable that he will understand what he just did.

Thanks for this chapter. i wonder about the story of the phoenix tattoo. Was it done after, as a mean to start a healing process, or before, like a brand mark? We learnt that Greg was trouble with whatever type of attraction or interest he might feel, it is not restricted to Kyle because he is a minor, he couldn't deal with Keigan either. I know Keigan is hot and all, but I am crazy that I am cheering for Kyle, who seems to be attracted to Greg even without Greg trying anything? I know that Greg is 30, and Kyle is still 15, just hope they are in a state where the consent is at 16.

GOOD MORNING!

DIBBS!!!!!!!! Back away @Valkyrie and @clochette

Good, it was hard but he needed this. Daniel is a amazing boy, hope he stays with Stephen and Lewis.