weinerdog

@Tonyr you better be careful how you answer that "them could be fighting words"

That is perfect.Its exactly how I pictured Aido Potato Let me guess this is from Loren's next YouTube video is this where Loren finds out that Aido Potato is in the episode

Very well done chapter.Glad they had that talk things that needed to said were said.But still two weeks of that?Hey we all say things that come out the wrong way from time to time and Loren knew Jay didn't mean offense so that wasn't worth two weeks of silence.Jay like all of us will do that again unintentionally will Loren do the same thing again? So we'll see Aido Potato again 😀Why do I get the felling he's going to make an appearance at the Launch and steal the show. Two and a half minutes each? Did they set the timers on the smart phones? I figured Loren wasn't going to win but as soon as I heard things were running quicker then in previous years I knew something was coming up involving Loren.I'm starting to think like you.....should I be worried🤔

That's better then anybody is Washington D.C. does

Judging by the descriptions given in this chapter it sounds like you took the same tour I bet that was awesome. The church has some history of having some really corrupt Popes I wonder if was one of them who ordered adding fig leafs to Michelangelo paintings🙄 BTW I just noticed the story jumped from chap 32 to chap 34 did GA miss 33?

GA is at it again I didn't get the notification for the new chapter.I only found out after some readers commented on the chapter this has happened with a few other authors it has me stumped. What Alec said needed to be said and it looks like it will be good for him.It may also be good for his Mother being raised Catholic I know that Catholics believe along with most of the other Christian denominations believe is if the lightbulb finally clicks on your death bed and you understand how you've been and then you repent and are sincere about it God will forgive you and maybe Alec saying that MIGHT make her realize it.But the evidence suggests she wasn't ever a sincere Christian. This chapter ends with Alec in his mind preparing to go back home but I think it's safe to say something going to keep him here a while longer.Finn?His Mother?Both? That conversation River and Alec had about person A and person B one thought is River has found his soul mate and while River and Alec will always be lifelong friends maybe the constant of River being around all the time will change that then would be a good time for Alec and Finn to connect.The other possibly is when River was speaking of person A was he talking about Alec? My first reaction to that would be that it would be a mistake

When I was reading the chapter I was scratching my head on how Seth had Money all of a sudden but then @drpaladinmade it fit for me somebody must have seen his writings but how was he discovered?It seemed like Seth wasn't satisfied with what he was writing. The only other explanation I have is admittedly nuts maybe Seth sued the police department for the way they handled the abuse they got from his father. This is just me throwing stuff up against the wall to see what sticks I don't really think that but I can't think of anything else

I agree with Clancy59 that Preistly women will go up the ladder maybe even get the local media involved.That hotel Oliver stayed at how long ago was it?It seems like it took a long time for the FBI made the connection to that hotel and its unusual amount of missing people the local police seemingly was clueless which begs the question are they somehow involved in covering up things.

You described it very well.One thing I'm curious about is Ernesto really gay?Or is he straight but because he's on that list he's into being with Q like he's under some kind of spell or something.And does the same apply to the others on the list? Now about Ryan we have already been told he has a flawed personality will be be that way when he gets together with Q?Or because he's on that list he will act differently? I know read the story and find out🙄

So Ernesto is a good guy while Ryan.Hunter and Terrence are jackasses.The one thing if I had a chance to make my own naughty list is to put no jackasses on it no matter how hot they are. The trio look like they solve problems with intimidation so I see fights coming.I think Terrence and Hunter intervened on Q's behalf because they are now in to him

So all it takes is a kiss to have a line across the name on the list.If it turns out all 9 guys are going to be interested in Q at the same time then there's no way his studies could keep up .I don't even think Einstein could hang in those circumstances

Just discovered this story loved the first chapter it's really late where I am so I have to stop now but Tomorrow I'm definitely picking up where I left off BTW my name is Ken also (I've only said that in a few other comments on stories) so you just have to be a good writer LOL Wow if I had a list like that it would take me all night to fill out if I used a pencil I would write the names down then I would think of someone else an go "oh wait, wait,wait" and erase a name and replace it with another.I would probably wear out at least two erasers but this has a quill pen so I would have to really think hard about it (pun intended)

He just stopped just like that something must have changed in his life because unlike Circumnavigation he didn't comment along like he did with the other stories.There were still some things left unresolved like did Brandon reconcile with his parents?Was Joe Klump left anything that belonged to Scars?How much longer was Instinct popular?Maybe things will again change for him and he'll be back.🤞 Another author like C James who wrote great stories then just stopped was @DomLukahis stories are mostly about gay highschool romance The Long Way IMO is a must read

Depending on how he lands they might not find the body he might be mistaken for a KLUMP of ashesSorry best I could do

I figured there had to be casualties on the good guys side and guess while Jim Linda and Johnson were liked characters by the readers they were not as liked as the others if C James killed any of the band the readers would have revolted. This will hit Brandon especially hard

Say what you want about Instinct and Helen they are fiercely loyal

Before I get to what happened in the chapter I noticed Loe's comment about paying $17.00 to attend the practice.Back in the the early 2000's was the last time I went to watch NFL team practice when the city I live in still had a football team😠(you can probably guess where I'm from with that comment)At the time practices were free so I guess I'm really out of touch.The NFL at the time still had a rule that if they charged for practice they could not refuse to not let somebody in to observe which included scouts from another team so teams didn't charge for that reason. Then one year Washington did and they then found about that rule.I guess that rule changed.I'm a NFL fan but I wouldn't pay $17.00 to watch practice As it was said in another we know they stay together but it will be interesting to see how it plays out. The fact that Lars got mentioned the way he did tells me we'll be seeing him soon and I'm looking forward to that. @Mrsgnomie mentioned how holidays are tough on Loren so I could see while Jay is with his family on Thanksgiving I see Loren alone in his house and he gets a call saying Lars is outside in front of his property or something along those lines .Christmas would be another day for something like that to happen

You mean it wasn't your line😳

You know Murphys law? well there is Eric Carlisle's Law anything that can be said wrong he will.

The Scar knows how smart the General is but Scar is arrogant enough to think he's smarter then the General and that will end up being part of his downfall. Right now it's subtle but I get the feeling The General and Felisha are going to fall for each other but too soon to say

The weekend will be awesome . We still have a lot to find out we know they have names only for each other that implies they are not out at school yet but we do not that yet so my comment might be irrelevant

Just discovered this like what I'm reading so far

Like in Circumnavigation would a natural occurrence like a possible earthquake timed just right stop the Scar from doing whatever it is he's going to do?

Here's what I think and I haven't read ahead so I'm probably wrong.Did the Scar still have enough resources to keep track of the General movements? If he did then I assume he knows about the General's son AND his contact with Helen .I think he arranged for the Son to be captured and anticipated the Generals need for mercenaries the Son's rescue might already be prearranged.I somehow see The General and his Son making Brandon and Chase wedding which means the Scar will follow.The Shadow will be at the wedding so that mean Joe would be there.Father and son cross paths and maybe circumstances will have Joe be the one to deliver the fatal blow to the Scar. I probably got all this wrong.If somebody who's read the story wants to tell me how much I got wrong feel free

To use a military term although I'm not sure I'm using it right I see a SNAFU happening with the plan on using the charter plan something unforeseen will happen that gets Eric involved in this hope I'm wrong