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I'm looking for a motive for eliminating project Chimera. Three adults and one teenager were targeted by the same AI that the adults (and teenager?) helped create. I believe Walter was the handler for project Chimera. I also believe that he is at the center of this, but I'm drifting away from thinking he is behind the termination order. The black ops team were just tools, and like all tools that become detrimental to a project, they will be "retired". So the real question is whether a person or an AI is behind Cerberus trying to eat it's parents?
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I’d love to give him a pass as a “city boy”, but Adrian told Liam he was a hobbiest nature photographer “since high school”, so 20 years. And he never went on a real hike in Canada?
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My initial opinion of Adrian was of an outgoing, competent, mature man in his mid-thirties. Definitely not a kid, no matter what Liam tells himself. But, showing up for a hike with not even a bottle of water?! I might have over estimated his maturity.
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Lovely chapter! I hope this puts all the Adam doubters minds at ease! I don't think our dear author would have our hero introduce Adam to Martin, Tom, and Beth, along with Jimmy and Shane, only to have Adam destroy them. Speaking of red herrings, Rick's dad?????
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Now I think Madison is a vapid, materialistic, self-centered, poor excuse for a sister! When she finds out she was cheated out of her inheritance, there will be a 180° change in attitude. It won't change her as a person, but she will suddenly be on her "loving" brothers' sides!
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Chapter 17 - Truth Be Told
CincyKris commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 17 - Truth Be Told
Big strides forward for Dean. But I feel like I've missed a whole chapter (I haven't) in which Dean and Leah took their relationship to the "committed and in love" level. What was a somewhat casual, sex-based relationship prior to Dean seeing Kris and ghosting Leah, is now all of the sudden the breakup of a long loving couple??? -
Huge steps forward! Wonderful development for Rick and Adam. It seems incomprehensible that the principle and board wouldn't report such an incident to the police! Does Australia have mandatory report laws? In the US, Cunningham and all the board members would be subject to prosecution. Unfortunately in all countries this type of predatory behavior occurs. The teacher just moves on to another school and more victims because the people in charge want to avoid bad press.
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Chapter 3 - Coincidence
CincyKris commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 3 - Coincidence
I was lost on the Maria thing too, and it did take me out of the strong emotions for a bit. Maybe just adding "Kevin's caretaker" after her first mention would clear things up and prevent the lack of connection to the emotional storyline. Otherwise, this was very effective in introducing the level of grief Liam felt. It explains his reticence to moving forward. -
I agree with @Philippe regarding Leah. She seems like a nice woman, but her relationship was based on sex, from the first date and all the others. Dean, who did not really engage in any more small talk with her than with anyone else, never talked about the future. Now she is all the sudden in love? Kris has been so consumed with scraping to get by that he is wildly overwhelmed by good news. He will be financially secure, he and his mom will have a better life in a better location, and he has 2 different guys interested in him. Hopefully he will be able to calm down and realize that he has big, but good decisions ahead of him.
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Sounds like someone else you chronicled!
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Perhaps it is the funds that are fueling Madison's rage. The boys certainly haven't seen a dime! I can only assume that sis is living off of the insurance money via Uncle Phil. She may be a homophobic bitch, but if Phil is in jail, her income will not only disappear, she will be on the hook for the boys' fair share.
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I found Tom's questioning about uncle Vernon veered close to interrogation. Could his interest, specifically of what Vernon might have brought in from overseas, be due to some pressure from our baddies? Could that be why he looks rundown? Just what has Tom gotten himself into?
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I had the same thoughts regarding Madison. Some new investigations are needed! Great chapter for the boys, they were able to just enjoy being brothers for the weekend.
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We learned so much about our characters in this chapter! I'm intrigued by your comment that B & B will be instrumental in the next one, because they seem to be hot-headed alpha male tropes. But you, thankfully, don't do tropes, so I'm excited to see how these non-geniuses will factor into a battle of wits and wills with two actual geniuses. I like Garcia, I'm wary of Price because Griffin is wary of him. I can't help but wonder if Alexis has a disciple in the Bureau? I was surprised at the lack of ghosts in our recent scenes. Will they appear in the interrogation?
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We're starting to dive into the mystery! I doubt the dickhead in the car had enough time to murder Martin. But I bet the yearbook and journal will be helpful.
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I did not see this when it was posted! I could feel the tension in the car during the power struggle/self denial battle. Both want to give in as much as they want to push away! Alexis knows Griffin's darkest secret, and I have no doubt she will hold that card in reserve as long as she can. Tension, tension, tension!!!!
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I am doing a full read through again, since the third chapter was posted recently. a story this good deserves my full attention. I see Griffin as a Dr. Spencer Reid type, but with added powers. One irony that I only saw just now, is that if Griffin had ever touched Alexis, he would have known from the beginning who she was.
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I was thinking along these lines, also. Survivor's guilt is a hard thing to get past. He wasn’t following me. He wasn’t looking for conversation. He wasn’t doing anything wrong. But he was there. And for some reason, that just bothered me. For a man who had spent years building his solitude into a kind of armor, simple presence was enough to throw me off balance. How long has it been since his husband died? If it is more than a couple of years, it's understandable that Liam has finally started to notice attractive men again. I think Adrian is probably the first person he's been attracted to in a long time.
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I wonder what the guys will find in the outbuildings? Will they get to the statue before Thomas goes panther hunting?
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This was a very sweet ending! We saw the characters change and grow, well most of them. Marvin needs to find a good guy.
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Chapter 13 - Brothers
CincyKris commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 13 - Brothers
Dean's life is unraveling, but he doesn't yet realize that it needs to happen. Unless his desperately unhappy life unravels, he won't be able to start a new happy life.- 6 comments
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We learned a lot more about Coop's background. Perhaps not as dramatic as we conjectured! Still not a happy childhood, it seems Martin and his family were the highpoint. Adam meeting "the parents" shows how much their relationship means to Coop. I hope we find something in Martin's things to help solve the murders.
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I don’t think Adam is involved. I’m hoping his involvement with the plot will be helping Coop heal and move on. The more bigwigs involved, the scarier it is for the boys!
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Chapter 17 - The Long Road
CincyKris commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 17 - The Long Road
Very sad, his family and doctors did him no favors by keeping him from the truth. I’m back to not entirely understanding the prologue though. -
George at his best people schmoozing! And we get to go back to sea!!! Can't wait.
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