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Well, that's interesting with John. And August! 🤞
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Yep, this feels like peak chaos and maybe an inflection point. But Ronyx named this story for the chaos, so I guess we'll see if he can crank it up another turn!
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Well, I just got here, and read through after you posted the epi. I have a few nitpicks (do teenage boys in Nebraska call each other "mate"?), but I thought the overall set up and story are great and pretty intriguing. There's always DMs. (Especially re Sean and Mal, who feel tailored; if Patrick was just an off-the-rack high school bully, that's a perfectly good ending).
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Ugh, I was pointed in the right direction on "Chad" recognizing the room number, and then sidestepped off into "completely wrong." The way you wrote River's recovery from the early shocks and pain to "LaDon and the guys came in like a pack of mother wolves" is pretty amazing writing. Gano is wonderful. The idea that you know the the guy is into you when you see the portrait they drew is pretty standard stuff around here. Gano is all that plus very fresh and funny and very current. And it's so fun that anthro/fur works so well crossing the gaps between the art-school guys and the sportsbros. 🦏 If you find (or become) the artist for this, can 2-slot go to LaDon and the boys as a pack of wolves? 🐺🐺🤕🐺🐺
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I feel this epilogue needs an expansion pack or something. Excellent twist, but what about the other loose ends? I'm into these characters, but I HAVE QUESTIONS 1) Sean: is the rainbow flag for him? or his Dad(s)? Will we see him at the march, with Dad(s) and/or Josh and Levi? 2) Mal: an outsider for some reason? or just the ordinary quiet kid that grew into a hottie under the nose of the locals? is he into Jordy for himself, or as a stepping stone to Shannon? 3) Patrick: mayor's kid is a violent goth-punk? that's weird. And why so angry? 4) Monica: can she grow into a real friend and a high-school jungle guide?
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Sorry 'bout that @Dan South. But it's not as spoiled as you think.
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ugh, poor Wren. I get why he wanted to go back to the familiar, but new Wren had a chance at the life and energy he seemed to hunger for.
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Nah, he's been invited to the room and he'd recognized the address. But intrigued with the idea it's someone we've met
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Unresolved Issues Become Clearer - Well, or Badly?
Mattyboy commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Unresolved Issues Become Clearer - Well, or Badly?
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I liked this. I was taking it (and that last line) as showing us that Tom had remembered (learned?) how be happy again. (and that Taylan and Dana knew the old Tom well enough to pick something he'd like).
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Will we get the Gano pic? Kristin is quite right, of course. Good for the bros being mutually supportive.
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Yep, Mom's next. But this feels like some progress and Ethan has some momentum now.
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Excellent fun. Gav doesn't seem judgy, little River will keep on rollin'.
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That was a good adult explanation from Deacon (of a nasty situation, but politically aware, at least). Good for him. Yay for Bryan and Kenny.
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Hehe, weren't Jonathan's first words to Maddox "not interested." And he wasn't; that took quite a while to unravel.
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This is fun! I like your take on the football guys. There's a sometimes lazy cliche of high-status jocks, but that angle of 6am practices and working hard and being exhausted half the time is better. The football players I knew in university were mostly way too busy to bother being mean to anybody, especially friendly low-maintenance roommates.
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. . . and by an enormous margin. (Also, shout out to Aunt Marie who is doing her best with a terrible hand of cards). And yes, what up, Ty? Just a supportive friend, or dark horse entry into this messy love triangle polygon
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Yay for "How to Tie up Your Family: The Basics as Taught by Master Wren." 😃
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Well, for me as a reader it is.. it's been impending for about three chapters now. Interesting, you gave us Diego's reaction to Bryan, but not Diego's internal thoughts. Some of Bryan's snarks must have been a bit heartwarming, even if they were also must-respond parenting for him. TR
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Not sure Diego is playing this exactly right, but great progress that the tension has broken.
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Hehe, that's all part of the fun. Marie seems great, and probably could and would help but the explaining it all would certainly take a minute.
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Seth needs to lean into the chaos a little more
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Fran's brother is Philippe, I think. And I think he was her only sibling that we met.
