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Chapter 2: Julian feels trapped in everything
peter rietbergen commented on vanalas's story chapter in Chapter 2: Julian feels trapped in everything
and if Robert has a biological son Julian's age - why was Julian adopted? -
Chapter 2: Julian feels trapped in everything
peter rietbergen commented on vanalas's story chapter in Chapter 2: Julian feels trapped in everything
I must be a sloppy reader to have missed something: where did Nathan go, when the Patriarch caught him and Julian? He was in the bathroom, after all. -
His job was not to seek perfect justice, but to prevent absolute collapse. The honourable path led to ruin. The dishonourable path led to stability. The eternal dilemma....
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“Your stage is a children’s puppet show, Wolf,” Enrico countered, his voice cutting and dismissive. “You are a quartermaster with an extension cord. You lack the imagination for true power. The difference between us is this: you play with spreadsheets; I play with something far grander.” And so he proved, a few minutes later..
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As far as the three of us could see, we held all the aces, and Jarvis, even if he thought he was safe enough, was in a whole world of trouble. A, blissfully naive - if only because the author doesn't want this story to be that easy....
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ah, but the greater good might be to allow AC - and his family/convictions - to continue working for democracy....
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Our young "horndog"certainly has a roving eye....
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pale but now moving with a grim, focused intensity that belied his academic background A, I see: being ""that" people don't expect one to display "this"...😀
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There a big, even eternal questions, here. On the general level: Yes: poison, or a bullet, or any other means to kill A would probably not kill the organisation behind him. And yet - many, from our PoV pernicious organisations arise through an ideological (and from our prespective morally-despicable) figurea-head - see messers P and T. Murdering them may yet also weaken their base, and/or allow the moderate centre to regain strength... On the personal level: As to AC: would murder morally kill the murderer? Or is - given, perhaps, the 'outcome' I just sketched - such killing yet the morally best (or even: only) way to act, i.e.: "for the greater good"?
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This was an emotional, and emotionally convincing chapter indeed. And yes, it would have made a perfect conclusion of this tale. Simply leaving us, readers, to imagine what might have come next, rather than - probably...! - throw in complicating spanners, and spell it all out. But hey, ever author must go his own path ...
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In this moment, under the rising Canadian sun, a boy and his father, an all-star and a strategist, did what boys and dads have been doing since the country began. They skated. And for Andrew, standing on that sacred sheet with his son, the battle was worth every single cost, every single lie, every single compromise. This, right here, was the sovereign nation he was fighting to protect. Alright: melodramatic, obviously. But I'll buy it.
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absolutely thrilling and, indeed, eminently filmable. If you "sell" this story to The Movies, you won't have to write for GA anymore 😀
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True enough, alas. But whereas Reform's hole cannot be deep enoug, for me, one wonders whether between the narcissist stupidity of Badenoch (aided by increasingly right-wing media) and Starmer's saddening inability to provide Labour with a clear, foreward-looking policy there's much hope for a better future...,
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Writing this in 2025 - more than a decade later than the last comments - I remember last Spring's long vac in Scotland. I was amazed to find the showers there as insularly-unintelligible as when i was at school in England many more decades ago. Maybe Brexit happened for a reason, i.e. the inability of the Brits to adapt to the twentieth century...
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Indeed, Eileen in Southwold was too special a character to let go off again. So: nice to have her back. As to the Martinson(son)-Joski(son) link.... Anything can happen, I feel...
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[Memory, Junior Year, November] – Strategic Mistakes
peter rietbergen commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Junior Year, November] – Strategic Mistakes
Fascinating stuff, all these deep-delving comments. Yet I cannot help feeling that many readers "read" Lynn as a far more complicated character than he actually is - or, rather, than his creator intends him to be.... -
While I don't know why that captain repeated the same lines twice , and still wonder about Christian's sexuality (why is constantly chumming with three gay boys?), this was a good chapter indeed.
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[Memory, Junior Year, November] – Strategic Mistakes
peter rietbergen commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Junior Year, November] – Strategic Mistakes
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The telephone conversation between the pseudo-Alejandro and his quick-play-acting "father" is definitely filmable. You should be a script-writer.
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Both hilarious and very cleverly done.
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It took me some time to realize that this chapter is a resume of the entirety of M's relationship with C.
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Neuvième partie : Le Rôti
peter rietbergen commented on W_L's story chapter in Neuvième partie : Le Rôti
It's called cirrhosis of the liver, a kind of cancer. -
Neal and J, as we expected. But after all, the story commands that the plot should thicken by now...
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Neuvième partie : Le Rôti
peter rietbergen commented on W_L's story chapter in Neuvième partie : Le Rôti
Cancer ? -
all the ingredients of a "space opera" (with a bit of disaster movie mixed in for good measure) on the Canadian Plains. Quite a feat.
