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Chapter 7- The Crowning
centexhairysub commented on Thirdly's story chapter in Chapter 7- The Crowning
I wonder how long till we discover what the dormant magic is exactly that each tapped into... Really enjoyed this chapter, the visualizations that you create with your words are just wonderful. -
Chapter 6- Sindri's Decision
centexhairysub commented on Thirdly's story chapter in Chapter 6- Sindri's Decision
Well, I certainly liked how the choices came out; did see it coming a little bit but still nicely done. Good pacing again, and the characterizations were really well done this chapter. -
Chapter 5- Gallant Gonuret
centexhairysub commented on Thirdly's story chapter in Chapter 5- Gallant Gonuret
Well, have to wonder if Ansar isn't going to end up with a life mate as well out of this. Such a thin line between love and hate... LOL... I really did like the pacing and writing with this chapter, it just flowed so well. -
I just can't decide who to trust. I want to trust Dom, I really like him; but for some reason, I don't fully trust him. I don't want to trust Candestine, because I don't really like her, at yet I do trust her more and more. I do trust Rebecca but as a human, how much can she really handle? Can't wait to see what happens next. p.s. the music was a great choice...
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Chapter 4- Emyve and Ruthed
centexhairysub commented on Thirdly's story chapter in Chapter 4- Emyve and Ruthed
Another good chapter; the pacing and plot is well done and the writing is good as well. I would like a little more back story for them all but that is probably just me... -
Chapter 3- Ilohir and Kelius
centexhairysub commented on Thirdly's story chapter in Chapter 3- Ilohir and Kelius
Well, you seem to have developed a wide array of personalities and social skills in the dragons that are courting Sindri. I have to say that with so many courting him; it would seem that someone a little aggressive would stand out; although I agree that Emrye did as well... -
Chapter 2- Intros and Madhal
centexhairysub commented on Thirdly's story chapter in Chapter 2- Intros and Madhal
Another good chapter; this one seemed a little more cohesive than the first. Good pacing once again; the writing moved everything along as well. I really like the descriptive dialog. -
Chapter 1- Gallant Sindri
centexhairysub commented on Thirdly's story chapter in Chapter 1- Gallant Sindri
An interesting start to the story; I would have liked a little more background, but can hope it is forthcoming. The writing and pacing are good but just felt a little like this chapter was at loose ends, as if you were not sure where you were going with it. Can't wait to see what happens next.. -
Some of the others may accept Kellar not accepting the Alpha position; but with Fendral??? Great Chapter...
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Why is it that almost all men are never able to listen to a woman and do what they say; even when it makes perfect sense....
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Well, damn, these revenants are starting to be a problem... My understanding is that in general a true seer does not take sides; but this one certainly seems to favor Skold over the other side. I do think that Candestine and Skold need to have a real heart to heart; as long as no one loses theirs in reality during the discussion. Interesting chapter...
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As lovely Doris sang, Que Sera Sera... Paul handled this better than some would have... Have to love and smile and laugh with Maria...
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Well, starting to wonder if Samhein is part of this in only that someone knows that he knows or can do something and they want him eliminated. The party could get very interesting with Skold, Dom, and Candestine all there. Rebecca and Melanie need to get somewhere and hole up better than normal; with the other three occupied they need to be really vigilant. Although, starting to think that Rebecca can handle more than I have been giving her credit for. Your right; the song would have been the perfect soundtrack for that scene in a movie... Good job.
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Okay, a strange chapter; but you could truly feel the grief that this women felt on so many levels. Your writing is very descriptive and truly pulls the reader into what the characters are feeling. Keep up the good work...
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WOW. just loved everything about this chapter. I understand how both Skold and Dom feel about Candestine. They both have very valid points. Have not really decided how I feel about her yet though. Kudos to Melanie for not running screaming from Rebecca with what happened. I know I would not have handled it nearly so well. Who could be behind this???
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Circle Upon Circle Upon Circle
centexhairysub commented on Headstall's story chapter in Circle Upon Circle Upon Circle
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Okay, what did the words that Skold and Dom say to each other mean??? WOW, so did not see Candestine saving Rebecca or worse, finding her interesting even a little bit. And is it Clandestine or Candestine? Good job, this is getting really good...
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I feel as if Skold is gathering his team and preparing for a final showdown. Damn, who knew that sex with Dom was so good it could alter the fundamental makeup of Skold in some manner. You switched the name of people incorrectly a couple of times; you might want to go back and update the chapter to correct it... The seer said that Marcus's real name was Seras but he said is was Samhein. You also called Skold Paladin at one point and Marcus Paladin at one point.
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Truly enjoyed this chapter and finding out about both Raymond and Daniel's past. There were enough hints and clues to a good part of it but having it laid out; gives everyone a clearer picture of where they are both coming from. I hope that they do move slowly, they both need time to come to terms with what they are doing and where they are going... I sometimes believe that organized religion in this country has done way more damage than good to the average person. I am a fairly spiritual person but find it harder and harder to declare myself religious.
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So glad that there will be a baby at Morningstar and so great that it will be Elinor that will be the first. Hugh and Connor are a little too sappy for me but maybe that is what happens when it is true love and there have been issues getting there. I agree that the guys need to get out while the weather is good; in that area of Canada, you can't do much during parts of the winter, which can start and last longer than most people realize... Great job...
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WOW, the End???; I was just really getting into this story. I had it so plotted out in the head where I thought the next few chapters were going to take us; tears and lamentations. I really enjoyed this story and hope that you decide to do a book two or three to it...
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Well, Dan proved to be much more perceptive than I gave him credit for in the beginning. I have to admit that I find this story fascinating and can't wait to see how you develop it. I have to wonder if a teacher won't arrive on Earth and have help in some way from at least part of this crew... Keep up the great work.
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Maria's conversation about how two men have a baby should be very interesting. She certainly keeps those around her entertained. I have to admit that Raymond and Daniel's little dance is setting the stage for something interesting.
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I honestly can't imagine any crooked Sheriff if Texas, and yes, there are a few; would be as stupid as this one appears to have been. Even if he got the office because of politics; he could not have kept it long being this dumb...
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An interesting turn of events; not one I am sure that I am really happy with but we will have to see what comes of it...
