Nephylim

I have never done it but GODS I would like to try. I've tried lots of things but only with a single partner. I would SO go for two.... or more. I have more holes to fill

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I never create a character at the beginning of a story. I also 'see' my stories as if they are replaying as a film on a screen. I see the people who are already in existence, they are there complete and whole and it's up to me to describe them and the things they do. i don't make them up, I don't create the character I just describe them.

It's a really sweet story. i fell in love with Asher too I have always said that one of the reasons my characters are mostly all beautiful is because they are described through the eyes of those who see them as being beautiful... well except for Silver of course who is just inhumanly goreous. In this story Asher is very much seen throught the eyes of love and so of course he has to be beautiful but I get the feeling from him and his ractions that he is beautiful, at least on the inside which is where it counts. It says much for your writing skills that you make us feel that we know a character who barely speaks a word. And as for Cairo. I never knew that aliens could be so... sweet The ending was expected but when it came it was... right.

Being the most technological inept person ever I wouldn't have known if you had cut corners, sliced sides or punched middles... it all sounded feasible to me. I loved loved loved the last few lines Squeezable.

Just perfect. I love this story. It is touching, funny, sad and surreal... and the storytelling skill is not hidden behind a flood of sex. Awesome work hun

Personally I never got the impression that this was a first story. From the first chapter I was breathless and swept away with what was written, how it was written and how what was written was affecting me. It made my heart beat faster, my mind race down all the avenues opened up and to be frank my stomach sink at the possibilities, the inevitabilities and the fact the way that it was presented as being so very possibly our own future. In some way the sexual aspect was irrelevant to the actual story, although I can't deny it was one of the elements that made my pulses race. The real strengths of the story were 1. the general air of foreboding. 2. the almost palpable fear that permeates most of the story 3. the obvious degeneration of the society that back it as is made clear with their readiness to push more and more people through the system and to, if not blatanty lie then at least misrepresent the actual process. 4. the nature of the society who are ready, willing and eager to accept the slide that leads to the development of the machine in the first place. 5. the mechanics of how it all works which are detailed, in cases explicit and well thought through. 6. the fact that there is very little description. We don't even get the Attendant's name until right at the end 7 the flashes of humanity shown by the Attendance as his disillusion with the process grows throughout the story. 8 the way that the story unfolds in the background of the description of the process. 9. how each character who become part of the weave of the story has their own background and stories to tell and grow in their own individual ways, and they are very distinct and different but again there is little actual description of them. 10 the fact that each character who is followed through to the end find their own way of adapting and ultimately finding ways of going Against the Machine, some more radical than others. As to whether the Machine is just a machine. There were hints and suggestions all the way through . I think that the story has real cohesion in that it creates a world then continually drops in new details about the ways in which that world operates and changes. Nothing is set in stone and the sand beneath your feet is constantly shifting. This is a truly unique story that is readable over and over because like all the best story every time you read it you see new things you never saw before. My favourite character is the Attendant who is inimitably human... and Noah who is so sweet and innocent of the whole thing. Chilling, exciting, ennervating, innovative. One of my favourite stories of all time. (as far as this site is concerned at least. Sorry but you can't compare to Storm Constantine yet) and likely to remain that way for a very very long time. It appeals to my twisted mind in an incredibly forceful way and I will remember it for a long time.

I wish more people went for this option

HAPPY BIRTHDAY

Although I don't think 'drink' is exactly the right word. Does licking it off a 'rabbit 'count?

Small but perfectly formed hun Wonder ful statue. Where was that?

I have a feeling your hopes will be met Welcome to the madhouse hun Admit... ..you love it Thank you hun. I'm glad SOMEONE appreciates them I hardly ever bite. Nice to meet you... although this is a bit out of date now isn't it Have a hug... and don't listen to a word ricky says I'm quite safe I ike a man whos in and out. And if you're not a man... I like a woman who... er yeah, you get the idea. Welcome to GA Nice to meet a fellow technophobe even if you do wear strange ties Bumblebee is such a cute name. To be perfectly honest there is only one lesbian story I remember reading. it was totally and completely awesome but I can't remember what it was called or who wrote it... great help aren't I Sorry. I'm sure you'll like it here though... we're a nice bunch of loonies

:wub:I don't know about that. I'm already the Queen of Evil... can I be Queen of GA too Don't want to spread my Queenliness too thin now I do so luv u james

That's some good advice James. It's sad but true unfortunately. That totally sucks. People can be such jerks. I am very fortunate where I work. They know all about GA and one or two of them are actually reading my stories. There are definitiely some advantages in being a full on freak After one look at me no one gets surprised by anything i say or do

You need to chill out and not be so hard on yourself. You are scewing with your muse dude All artists are perfectionsists and I have never been happy with anything I have done... writing, painting... well except the kids Just follow your heart and your muse. If it feels like you are writing crap keep going because your crap is someone else's gold

I have a cousing Phil... except she's not my cousing and her name's not Phil

Raises hand timidly just in case anyone from the office happens to read this...as unlikely as it is

Shocking How could anyone forget you???

I don't know about them but I LOVED IT. What a way to end the day... with a smile And I couldn't have said it better myself. Most awesome and fitting tribute to the graduating class of 2010

Okay to hell with the tie I vote for THAT picture

I come down on the side of 'grey'

I have to say that I don't relate to any of this. I suppose it's partly the way I am and partly the way I write. I have a tendency to jump in at the deep end in everything I do. Whenever I start something new I start the complicated rather than the simple version. I have no patience with tutorials etc. Hah... maybe that's why my home is filled with half completed proects and I have a dozen skills half learned. And the way I write is that I have a new idea and then i sit and write it. The story writes itself as I go along. I never work to a structure and every time I have tried to it hasn't worked out. Maybe it's a case of not knowing what you don't know. If you don't realise what a huge task you've taken on then you can't be intimidated by it.

:devil:I MEANT... if it was a vampire story then it DID suck ... you know?... sucked So you enjoyed LIC then Maybe we should make that a story for dicussion one day and give everyone nightmares I am so glad you can't hate me. Would a hug help? *HUG*

Good advice. Maybe I will give it a go. *gulp*

If it was a vampire story then you're spot on