Puppilull's poetry prompts - 3. Poetry prompt 1 - Tanka

Better late than never. I could see/feel fall coming closer. Not my favorite season by the way. Now on to #2. :pp

On 08/18/2015 03:25 AM, aditus said:

Better late than never. I could see/feel fall coming closer. Not my favorite season by the way. Now on to #2. :pp

That was the feeling I was going for. I've actually started thinking/sketching on he next as well. Will need a bit more work.

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I agree with Adi about the 'never too late!'

With this poem, I have to say, I could not tell the season. At first I thought it's about the height of summer (heavy green), and the fields are yellow because they are parched. Then I thought, it's autumn, but then the idea that the heaviness in the green is because it's young, and the yellow in the fields is spring color.

Anyway - this is praise. I think that not knowing is brilliant, so please do not be tempted to 'clarify.' In my view that might weaken the effect of the Tanka.

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On 08/18/2015 06:49 AM, AC Benus said:

I agree with Adi about the 'never too late!'

 

With this poem, I have to say, I could not tell the season. At first I thought it's about the height of summer (heavy green), and the fields are yellow because they are parched. Then I thought, it's autumn, but then the idea that the heaviness in the green is because it's young, and the yellow in the fields is spring color.

 

Anyway - this is praise. I think that not knowing is brilliant, so please do not be tempted to 'clarify.' In my view that might weaken the effect of the Tanka.

 

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That uncertainty actually captures my idea perfectly! It really is addictive, this poetry writing.

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That was evocative... i really got the heavy green of summer, but as a never ending cycle, the 'whispers of red' will continue until they shout and overtake the green... just beautiful... sorry I missed seeing this one earlier. You also made me understand tanka a little better... this brought me some clarity... well done, poet...cheers... Gary

On 08/19/2015 06:21 AM, Headstall said:

That was evocative... i really got the heavy green of summer, but as a never ending cycle, the 'whispers of red' will continue until they shout and overtake the green... just beautiful... sorry I missed seeing this one earlier. You also made me understand tanka a little better... this brought me some clarity... well done, poet...cheers... Gary

You're too kind! I don't know if I truly got it, but if you liked it I'm glad!

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