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    Puppilull
  • Puppilull
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  • 09/15/2015
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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Puppilull's poetry prompts - 10. Poetry prompt 7 - Blank verse

To George

 

So soft the skin beneath my hands I feel

So sweet the skin upon you neck I taste

The precious love we share runs deep beneath

Life’s essence we share unguarded and free

My guiding light when darkness clouds my heart

And cruelest nighttime falls upon my world

My guarding angel though yours I should be

With strength to protect and keep you safe

So strange and precious belonging to you

And be your lover through eternity

sup>A speech from my vampire to his beloved George. Couldn't keep them out of here apparently...
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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On 09/16/2015 08:16 AM, Headstall said:

"Life's essence we share unguarded and free"... I love this line because it says so much about who they are and what they share. Another great job on a beautiful poem... cheers... Gary.

Yes, I had to struggle a bit to get those words, 'life's essence', in there and to fit the rythm. I wrote them and then couldn't let go. They are kind of significant for my pair.

 

Thanks for your review!

AC Benus

This is a lovely love letter. It's tender and persuasive, which I guess all vampiric love letter should be ;)

 

As far as the poetry prompt challenge goes, you did really well. Your metre is very nicely constructed, it flows, and I think you can see it adds a grandeur to the poem that just saying it 'plainly' would not have.

 

This is pretty impressive. Thanks for taking the challenge!

Puppilull
On 09/17/2015 06:16 AM, AC Benus said:

This is a lovely love letter. It's tender and persuasive, which I guess all vampiric love letter should be ;)

 

As far as the poetry prompt challenge goes, you did really well. Your metre is very nicely constructed, it flows, and I think you can see it adds a grandeur to the poem that just saying it 'plainly' would not have.

 

This is pretty impressive. Thanks for taking the challenge!

This time I really, really battled my impatient nature and general lack of time and read all lines aloud over and over, working to get that flow. I moved words around A LOT. Some phrases I unfortunately fell in love with when I wrote them and I couldn't kill all my darlings that in truth might have needed to be put down. The rythm and flow is therefore compromised in some lines...

 

I also discovered my preferred syllable count is eight. Almost all lines ended up being 8 syllables on the first go. Strange!

 

Thank you for reviewing and your continued encouragement!

Puppilull
On 01/11/2016 01:50 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Well how interesting, I don't know your vampire couple (I'll remedy that) so I thought this was you to your lover or spouse. I liked it very much. And discovering your preferred syllable count is 8, isn't weird, it means 'you get it'.

 

I'll be back to read more!

 

tim

Since I wrote both the story and the poetry, I guess it is really me talking. But if you read the vampire story, certain aspects might make more sense.

 

If you want more personal, read chapter 5 or chapter 7 (beware of blushing from that one... and don't miss the music to go with it).

 

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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