Puppilull's poetry prompts - 10. Poetry prompt 7 - Blank verse

"Life's essence we share unguarded and free"... I love this line because it says so much about who they are and what they share. Another great job on a beautiful poem... cheers... Gary.

On 09/16/2015 08:16 AM, Headstall said:

"Life's essence we share unguarded and free"... I love this line because it says so much about who they are and what they share. Another great job on a beautiful poem... cheers... Gary.

Yes, I had to struggle a bit to get those words, 'life's essence', in there and to fit the rythm. I wrote them and then couldn't let go. They are kind of significant for my pair.

Thanks for your review!

This is a lovely love letter. It's tender and persuasive, which I guess all vampiric love letter should be

As far as the poetry prompt challenge goes, you did really well. Your metre is very nicely constructed, it flows, and I think you can see it adds a grandeur to the poem that just saying it 'plainly' would not have.

This is pretty impressive. Thanks for taking the challenge!

On 09/17/2015 06:16 AM, AC Benus said:

This is a lovely love letter. It's tender and persuasive, which I guess all vampiric love letter should be

 

As far as the poetry prompt challenge goes, you did really well. Your metre is very nicely constructed, it flows, and I think you can see it adds a grandeur to the poem that just saying it 'plainly' would not have.

 

This is pretty impressive. Thanks for taking the challenge!

This time I really, really battled my impatient nature and general lack of time and read all lines aloud over and over, working to get that flow. I moved words around A LOT. Some phrases I unfortunately fell in love with when I wrote them and I couldn't kill all my darlings that in truth might have needed to be put down. The rythm and flow is therefore compromised in some lines...

I also discovered my preferred syllable count is eight. Almost all lines ended up being 8 syllables on the first go. Strange!

Thank you for reviewing and your continued encouragement!

Well how interesting, I don't know your vampire couple (I'll remedy that) so I thought this was you to your lover or spouse. I liked it very much. And discovering your preferred syllable count is 8, isn't weird, it means 'you get it'.

I'll be back to read more!

tim

On 01/11/2016 01:50 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Well how interesting, I don't know your vampire couple (I'll remedy that) so I thought this was you to your lover or spouse. I liked it very much. And discovering your preferred syllable count is 8, isn't weird, it means 'you get it'.

 

I'll be back to read more!

 

tim

Since I wrote both the story and the poetry, I guess it is really me talking. But if you read the vampire story, certain aspects might make more sense.

If you want more personal, read chapter 5 or chapter 7 (beware of blushing from that one... and don't miss the music to go with it).

Thanks for reading and reviewing!