Puppilull's poetry prompts - 15. Poetry prompt 16 - Christmas carol

Oh wow, Puppilull, this was sooo good. And I know I feel just like this. I often wonder how anyone gets to enjoy Christmas. There's not enought time.
Anyway, sorry.. truly this will touch so many, because you hit the nail on the head for a bunch of us, I'm sure.
Great Christmas carol.. or a lament..
thanks, tim

I think Tim is onto something when he points out a bit of melancholy is in this carol. A lot of people have these feelings, so putting them in song form is perfect.

I like the balance between each verse, and a refrain that pulls everything a bit tighter with every time it reappears. You probably never considered writing this type of poem before, so I'm glad you gave it a shot! Great job!

Brilliant! I sang it in my mind as I read it... it really came across as a carol in the true sense... wistful? Yes, but still with that message of take the time to have a real Christmas... don't lose sight of what's important... it was a lesson in song, and I loved it! Kudos and cheers... Gary....

I know this feeling, and the overwhelming tidal wave of work and preparation and...you've captured the desire for peace and the blessing of Christmastide well.

Yes, I'm running right beside you! Every year we want to start early but the things we have to do seem to become more and more. No time for contemplation or tranquility.
Of course I had to read it loud again, but I was alone this time except fot the cats. May be next year...do you think that too? You captured December hectic and regrets very well.

Your poem captures my mood very well. I have an awful lot of work to do and get home late every day. Christmas seems so far away. A very good poem. Thank you.

On 12/15/2015 08:51 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Oh wow, Puppilull, this was sooo good. And I know I feel just like this. I often wonder how anyone gets to enjoy Christmas. There's not enought time.

Anyway, sorry.. truly this will touch so many, because you hit the nail on the head for a bunch of us, I'm sure.

Great Christmas carol.. or a lament..

thanks, tim

We try and tone it down more and more each year, simply because we don't want to just crash into Christmas. For the past years, we've fled to the country. So nice.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

On 12/15/2015 09:15 AM, AC Benus said:

I think Tim is onto something when he points out a bit of melancholy is in this carol. A lot of people have these feelings, so putting them in song form is perfect.

 

I like the balance between each verse, and a refrain that pulls everything a bit tighter with every time it reappears. You probably never considered writing this type of poem before, so I'm glad you gave it a shot! Great job!

You're right. A carol isn't something I have ever considered. It seems a bit traditional, but then I realised that was just in my head. I can be me and do a carol.

I was a bit worried about the refrain since it got a bit more solemn then the rest, but I'm glad you feel it works.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

On 12/15/2015 09:23 AM, Headstall said:

Brilliant! I sang it in my mind as I read it... it really came across as a carol in the true sense... wistful? Yes, but still with that message of take the time to have a real Christmas... don't lose sight of what's important... it was a lesson in song, and I loved it! Kudos and cheers... Gary....

I sang too when I wrote it, but couldn't decide on a melody. Since I sing a lot, it sort of came to me. It's a bit of a downer, but the good news is it's a problem that can be solved.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

On 12/15/2015 09:32 AM, Parker Owens said:

I know this feeling, and the overwhelming tidal wave of work and preparation and...you've captured the desire for peace and the blessing of Christmastide well.

Right now I'm just toughing it out, trying to do the bare minimum. Not great, but I so need a few days off. Just eat and relax. Not write year end report and next years strategy...

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

On 12/15/2015 07:03 PM, aditus said:

Yes, I'm running right beside you! Every year we want to start early but the things we have to do seem to become more and more. No time for contemplation or tranquility.

Of course I had to read it loud again, but I was alone this time except fot the cats. May be next year...do you think that too? You captured December hectic and regrets very well.

Your cats were probably all excited I guess? Who wouldn't be? LOL

I try to keep it simple and we're slowly inching nearer the goal of a relaxing Christmas. Nobody cares if everything isn't perfect.

And in case you managed to shake it: Oh Roooomeooooo... Put on your runing shoes....

On 12/16/2015 04:46 AM, Dolores Esteban said:

Your poem captures my mood very well. I have an awful lot of work to do and get home late every day. Christmas seems so far away. A very good poem. Thank you.

It's like people think nothing can be done in the new year... I go day by day, just keeping my nose above water. The darkness doesn't really help either...

Thanks for reading and reviewing!