Puppilull's poetry prompts - 6. Poetry prompt 4 - Meter 1

Great cadence... well done... you even surprised me at the end. I thought it was an omelette lol... cheers... Gary

On 08/25/2015 02:17 AM, Headstall said:

Great cadence... well done... you even surprised me at the end. I thought it was an omelette lol... cheers... Gary

This was a struggle, so I opted for simple. Still not sure if I understood it. Will you follow? It's like "Challenge accepted!" for me now, thesr prompts.

Love it! ppp (pasta poetry prompt) I remember my triple P prompt (pizza poetry prompt), this really is more difficult than it looks. Someone should come up with dessert now. IDK Panna Cotta poetry prompt maybe.

On 08/25/2015 05:15 AM, aditus said:

Love it! ppp (pasta poetry prompt) I remember my triple P prompt (pizza poetry prompt), this really is more difficult than it looks. Someone should come up with dessert now. IDK Panna Cotta poetry prompt maybe.

A puff pastry poetry prompt! Now you're making me hungry...

Thanks for reviewing!

Yes, it's seem a bit difficult. I'm not sure the dangling syllable at the end of the first line on 'crisp' does what you want it to do. 'Crispness' would complete the flow, and not change the meaning.

Also, the single syllable that's forced to be swallowed at the beginning of the second line, 'Eggs,' is not all that comfortable too.

All that being said, this is practice, and as such is very good. It should give you a personal sense of what you feel is right in the way you make your poetry sing (or bring dissonance to it). That's what metre is all about for me - the 'feel' of a line and what emotions that heartbeat rhythm can raise in the reader.

I do you hope you practice with some more of these. And thanks - as always! - for taking another one of the Poetry Prompt challenges. I hope you're having fun and learning a lot too!

On 08/26/2015 10:57 AM, AC Benus said:

Yes, it's seem a bit difficult. I'm not sure the dangling syllable at the end of the first line on 'crisp' does what you want it to do. 'Crispness' would complete the flow, and not change the meaning.

 

Also, the single syllable that's forced to be swallowed at the beginning of the second line, 'Eggs,' is not all that comfortable too.

 

All that being said, this is practice, and as such is very good. It should give you a personal sense of what you feel is right in the way you make your poetry sing (or bring dissonance to it). That's what metre is all about for me - the 'feel' of a line and what emotions that heartbeat rhythm can raise in the reader.

 

I do you hope you practice with some more of these. And thanks - as always! - for taking another one of the Poetry Prompt challenges. I hope you're having fun and learning a lot too!

Thank you! This was by far the hardest. Possibly because I don't think I got it. I think I need to play around more with this to get a feel for it.

And no one should be forced to swallow eggs!