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Just some words - 2. They ran

So this morning as the pup and I were walking we encountered three young men preparing for their morning run. It was early, just past dawn and dressed in nothing but running shorts and shoes they were stretching to loosen lean muscles and then ...
 

They ran

As young hounds might

When coursing, sun dappled

lissome forms move with an easy grace

they ran.

This cinquain was originally posted on 28 May 2016 in the “Live Poets Society” forum on GA. I’ve reposted it here as part of this body of work to make it more easily found and hopefully enjoyed.
I'm a bit enamored of the cinquain with it's easy measured but fluid form. The form is brief only 5 lines totaling 22 syllables. Be warned, there will be others.
Copyright © 2016 dughlas; All Rights Reserved.
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Oh this was super. Loved it. The cinquain seems to work for your style. I'll be happy to see lots more!!

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On 05/31/2016 10:46 PM, Mikiesboy said:

Oh this was super. Loved it. The cinquain seems to work for your style. I'll be happy to see lots more!!

I really like the flow of the cinquain and have been playing with it. I'm anxious to post more to see what folks think. Thanks for taking time to read

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Dugh, you made jogging seem so easy and free. :thumb:
As for the type of verse, I'm no expert about that. I did like the lovely flow to the words and the joy felt in the ease of the run.
Nicely done! :hug:

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On 06/01/2016 02:25 AM, Reader1810 said:

Dugh, you made jogging seem so easy and free. :thumb:

As for the type of verse, I'm no expert about that. I did like the lovely flow to the words and the joy felt in the ease of the run.

Nicely done! :hug:

For some running seems an effort not for these three, they were so fluid in their grace. I'm glad to have been able to share that with you. Thank you.

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On 06/01/2016 02:59 AM, Parker Owens said:

I liked it on live poets. I like it better now. I see them running in my mind's eye.

Thank you. The human form is such a marvelous machine to be able to paint that vision in words and then share it with others so they could see too ... I'm so glad it worked with you.

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I agree with Parker... I love it even more now. I wonder if anyone sees me that way when I run :rolleyes: . Great work, my friend... cheers... Gary...

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On 06/01/2016 03:16 AM, Headstall said:

I agree with Parker... I love it even more now. I wonder if anyone sees me that way when I run :rolleyes: . Great work, my friend... cheers... Gary...

Thank you. You played a large part in my posting those bits I've written ... do you get a commission?

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Love the image of the runners.. I just might be more appreciative when I happen upon them hogging the trail..
Very well done Dugh!

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On 06/01/2016 10:05 AM, AC Benus said:

The analogy of sleek male forms to lithesome hounds is an awesome one. Love it

Thank you. There was just such easy grace and power it was as if they were created to run.

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On 06/01/2016 10:14 AM, Defiance19 said:

Love the image of the runners.. I just might be more appreciative when I happen upon them hogging the trail..

Very well done Dugh!

Thanks. My first response was oh they're kinda hot and then they ran and the way they moved blew me away.

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On 06/02/2016 11:29 AM, LitLover said:

You have an amazing way with imagery, Dugh. Absolutely lovely.

Thank you. I admit I'm all about word pictures, it's what I want to create, to share. I'm so glad it worked for you.

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Yeah, I agree with all. You have an imaginary illuminating writing skill. As I said before in 'Live Poet's Society', I can see the boys posture and the sun brightening on their skin and all. Nice poem. I loved Cinquians a lot just like you... :)

 

~Emi.

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On 06/17/2016 04:53 AM, Emi GS said:

Yeah, I agree with all. You have an imaginary illuminating writing skill. As I said before in 'Live Poet's Society', I can see the boys posture and the sun brightening on their skin and all. Nice poem. I loved Cinquians a lot just like you... :)

 

~Emi.

I like to write word pictures to share glimpses of what I see. The cinquain is currently my favorite form though I find myself playing with the structure stretching and twisting to fit the words that come to me. Thanks again for your thoughts and comments.

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4 hours ago, Bards Simpson said:

Lissome

(Excuse the plagarism)

Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts.

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5 minutes ago, dughlas said:

Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts.

It was an elegant and apt refrain. That it also conformed to a cinquain was incredible. It was one of my two favourites marked with a :heart:

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6 minutes ago, Bards Simpson said:

It was an elegant and apt refrain. That it also conformed to a cinquain was incredible. It was one of my two favourites marked with a :heart:

I'm glad my words spoke to you.

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Just now, dughlas said:

I'm glad my words spoke to you.

You should do more dugh. I've got lots of words to use as comments. 

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18 minutes ago, Bards Simpson said:

You should do more dugh. I've got lots of words to use as comments. 

I'd really like to but the words just don't come.

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13 minutes ago, dughlas said:

I'd really like to but the words just don't come.

What do other poets do to tease their muse from its slumber?

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6 minutes ago, raven1 said:

An eloquent, fluid snapshot of living. Absolutely beautiful.

Thank you.

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