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    dughlas
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Just some words - 3. A summer's day

Lets Play

At play

these two young friends

give chase they dodge and dart

then falling on the grass to wrestle

pausing there one atop the other

the gentle brush of lips

in a shared kiss

a sigh

two blushing smiles

then off again they dash

in childhood innocence to chase

to play.

 

At Rest

Entwined

two lie sleeping

in the sun dappled grass

with hearts beating in measured time

sprawled arms legs akimbo

innocently

at rest.

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Copyright © 2016 dughlas; All Rights Reserved.
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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LitLover

Unfortunately, I'm out of likes so I'll have to come back to like this :)
These were both sweet and innocent. I can feel the warmth of the sun on my face and the tickle of grass beneath bare legs and arms. Beautifully done, Dugh

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Parker Owens

Dugh, these are beautiful and sunlit poems. It makes my heart smile to read them, and their imagery brings my mind to a better place. Thank you for sharing these.

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dughlas
On 06/02/2016 10:56 PM, LitLover said:

Unfortunately, I'm out of likes so I'll have to come back to like this :)

These were both sweet and innocent. I can feel the warmth of the sun on my face and the tickle of grass beneath bare legs and arms. Beautifully done, Dugh

Thank you. I wanted to bring back those memories of childhood summers. Seems to have worked.

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dughlas
On 06/02/2016 11:53 PM, Parker Owens said:

Dugh, these are beautiful and sunlit poems. It makes my heart smile to read them, and their imagery brings my mind to a better place. Thank you for sharing these.

I have often thought after reading your poems that I wished I could write like that so to have these touch you means a great deal to me. Thank you for reading and reviewing.

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Headstall

Such a sweet innocence to both of these. I remember when the friendships of our youth in the glory of summer were natural and uncomplicated. You took me back... cheers... Gary...

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Sweetness shines brightly from them both. And with that, I find a benevolent smile upon my face.
Thank you more making me smile Dugh. :hug:

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On 06/03/2016 01:15 AM, Headstall said:

Such a sweet innocence to both of these. I remember when the friendships of our youth in the glory of summer were natural and uncomplicated. You took me back... cheers... Gary...

They were simpler times and children were innocent in their affection. I'm glad to have done for you as you have oft done for me and taken you for a brief time to a happy place. Thank you for your support and encouragement. Namaste

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dughlas
On 06/03/2016 01:44 AM, Reader1810 said:

Sweetness shines brightly from them both. And with that, I find a benevolent smile upon my face.

Thank you more making me smile Dugh. :hug:

To have shared this with you and all those others who read my words is heartwarming, then y'all thank me for it when it is truly me who needs to thank you for taking the time to read. This is so very surreal for me. Thank you.

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dughlas
On 06/03/2016 02:25 AM, Kitt said:

Concise but elegant. Love the review, thanks.

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Mikiesboy

dugh, lovely friend, these are timeless and beautiful pictures. When i read your words my mind is filled with colour and precious moments. They remind of beautiful shots from an Ivory and Merchant film.
Never compare yourself, just be. Little story for you, my mum painted (i know you said you have people who paint also). She loved flowers and painted them beautifully, I am lucky enough to have rescued some, anyway ... she asked a friend who was an artist if she should take lessons. The friend said no, because they'll change your style. So she painted flowers as she saw them. My point is, just write my friend through your own eyes, please. We love the pictures you paint.
tim xoxxo

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On 06/03/2016 06:15 AM, Mikiesboy said:

dugh, lovely friend, these are timeless and beautiful pictures. When i read your words my mind is filled with colour and precious moments. They remind of beautiful shots from an Ivory and Merchant film.

Never compare yourself, just be. Little story for you, my mum painted (i know you said you have people who paint also). She loved flowers and painted them beautifully, I am lucky enough to have rescued some, anyway ... she asked a friend who was an artist if she should take lessons. The friend said no, because they'll change your style. So she painted flowers as she saw them. My point is, just write my friend through your own eyes, please. We love the pictures you paint.

tim xoxxo

Oh tim, what kindness to share a memory of your mum when reviewing words I've written. I appreciate that others enjoy the little word pictures I write for what they are. I am content with that though I'll continue to be amazed at what you and others create. Namaste

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Defiance19

Two very evocative poems.. I will tell you, the first thing that came to mind was watching my 11 year old nephew and his dog play.. It is just as you described, even down to the way they collapse at the end.. Beautiful job Dugh...

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dughlas
On 06/03/2016 07:57 AM, Defiance19 said:

Two very evocative poems.. I will tell you, the first thing that came to mind was watching my 11 year old nephew and his dog play.. It is just as you described, even down to the way they collapse at the end.. Beautiful job Dugh...

Thank you Def for taking time to read and review. It seems most of us have a sort of shared memory that while not identical is near enough that these simple words can draw it forth. I'm glad to have shared that with you and appreciate your encouragement and support.

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AC Benus

I don't know how I missed these, Dugh. They are both really beautiful

 

I can feel the grass, and that first, innocent kiss. Bravo

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On 06/17/2016 02:47 AM, AC Benus said:

I don't know how I missed these, Dugh. They are both really beautiful

 

I can feel the grass, and that first, innocent kiss. Bravo

Thank you AC. I slipped away to that place and found these words. To know that they have the power to take others there too ... is simply beyond belief.

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Emi GS

I can say, You have an Eagle's and Snakes tongue. They both imprint what exactly is there. I think I've read this before and this time too, never missed the feeling of the picture you put in front of us. Such a lovely poems they both... :)

 

~Emi.

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dughlas
On 06/17/2016 05:00 AM, Emi GS said:

I can say, You have an Eagle's and Snakes tongue. They both imprint what exactly is there. I think I've read this before and this time too, never missed the feeling of the picture you put in front of us. Such a lovely poems they both... :)

 

~Emi.

So glad that you like them. At the urging of others I've been gathering things I've posted in forums and other places here so yes, you might have read them before. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment and for your support. Thanks.

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