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Change of Heart - 28. Chapter 28

Thank you, Nathan, for editing and beta reading. Even though I had to wait until after your assignation in Eldorado. Glad there was no flat tire, this chapter would still be awaiting your perusal. One would think I don't pay you enough.
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Raymond made a few more phone calls and then found the former owner’s bar. It was concealed within a large credenza, most likely, so as not to offend guests who might think liquor in a Christian home was blasphemous if not absolute heresy. Raymond chuckled at how unlikely it was that those folks would ever visit or even be welcomed in his home. He made a mental note to ensure liquor was to be a visible element in his den.

Linda had suggested moving the few pieces from here to the smaller house, but Raymond had refused. He wanted absolutely nothing that might have any possible connection with his mother, other than the ancestral bedroom and associated pieces. He would ask Larry and Runt to take any pieces they wanted after he explained his plans to refurbish their shack. He intended to move ‘his cowboys’ into a mobile home or maybe a modular home while the shack was being rebuilt. Raymond saw during his short visit that they felt the shack was their home. His intention was to save as much of it as possible. He intended to enlarge the floor plan to include three bedrooms and two modern baths. Larry and Runt would be consulted about the actual layout, after all, it was to be their home.

Raymond retrieved ice from the kitchen and poured himself a whiskey. He mulled over the progress his teams were making and found he was eager to see what the team seeking ‘companies willing to relocate’ came up with. He grinned, thinking that would not garner as many responses as a Craigslist ad.

Before he finished his drink, one of his guards stuck his head in and announced the Sheriff's personal pickup had turned onto the property. He considered going for mouthwash but figured it would be like lying. After all, it was not unusual for him to relax after work and maybe have a drink before dinner.

He was relieved when Daniel returned his warm, welcoming kiss with, “umm, I’ll have one of whatever you’re having. You taste good and I could use a drink. The only decent part of my day was having lunch with you”.

Raymond helped carry supper into the kitchen and put it in the oven to keep warm. He then led Daniel into the den and had him relax as he fixed him a drink. He was surprised to realize he felt disturbed by the lack of furnishings in the house. Still, they had found enough plates and flatware so dinner would be accommodated. Tonight would be the last night he would spend in this place until the remodeling could be accomplished. He would stay with Uncle Joe and Aunt Mellie until the smaller house was ready to move into. Hopefully, he and Daniel could welcome the New Year in together in the fully furnished smaller house.

Raymond listened to the complaints and observations Daniel had regarding his day. He listened attentively and asked appropriate, but not intrusive questions. He was very pleased when Daniel finally asked how his day had been and listened carefully to Raymond’s account. He even suggested Raymond consider a modular home for Larry and Runt. Daniel said that the house he was renting was a modular home and it was certainly sturdy and comfortable enough. Raymond used his laptop to check on modular homes. The only constraints were that they were not mobile and the time to build one was from one to three months. In that time, he was sure the shack would be ready for occupancy. Maybe a mobile home would be a better choice. Maybe Larry and Runt would have some ideas.

Dinner was quiet. The guards were somewhat guarded in their conversation. Both were present at Raymond's dressing down of his mother and seemed to be considerate and cautious in choosing their subject matter and responses. Raymond encouraged them to relax as best he could. He did notice both seemed more at ease by the time he served Miss Julie’s lemon meringue pie for dessert. Idly he wondered why she hadn't sent the mincemeat he had never liked. Once the residue from dinner was cleared away, the guards excused themselves to check around outside while Daniel retrieved his overnight bag from his pickup.

Raymond moved again to the den. He felt they needed to spend more time getting to know each other. As much as he wanted Daniel naked and in his arms, he didn't want him to believe sex was the end game. Raymond had a long-range plan to meet his ultimate goal of a life lived with Daniel.

Raymond met Daniel in the hallway with drinks in hand. “I thought we might sit in the den and relax for a bit”.

Daniel wasn't sure what he expected from this evening, but chatting with his lover was something he anticipated happening just before they fell asleep, after getting all hot and sweaty and a little crazy. Granted phone sex might have been an interesting substitute, for when they were miles apart. But, they were together now and within touching distance. Daniel accepted his drink, took a sip and suggested, “Maybe we could take these into the bathroom and get a shower as we finish them off. I know this isn't a uniform but after being in it all day, I just want a shower, brush my teeth and stretch out on the bed with you. Naked.”

Raymond was certain swallowing the sudden lump in his throat made an audible noise. “Sure, uh, we can do that. I, uh, just thought we should ease into the naked part. Maybe, that would, uh, I thought that would convince you that I want more than just sex with you”.

Daniel, with a drink in one hand and his overnight bag in the other, used his body to herd Raymond’s body up against the wall. Staring into Raymond's eyes Daniel confessed, “Something I didn't tell you about my day is that I’ve been working all day with a leaking, half-hard cock, and that's when it wasn't a certified blue steeler. I have the feeling if half the people I met today don't know my religion, they at least know my dimensions. So, while it's good to know we both want more than just sex. And getting to know each other is important. I think relaxing with a hot shower is the perfect prelude to. A. Serious. Horizontal. Discussion”. Each of his final words was punctuated with a kiss and a rub of his hard manroot against Raymond’s equally hard rod of flesh.

They didn't start undressing until they closed the bedroom door. But, the room soon looked like a laundry hamper exploded just inside the door. Fully naked, neither man wasted any time in claiming his lover's mouth. To Raymond, it was like an electric current flowed between them wherever their skin touched. He felt like Daniel was trying to drink him in through his kiss. Raymond refused to surrender, he was equally thirsty for his lover.

At first, they were simply rubbing their cocks together, creating a delicious friction as they kissed. They somehow wound up in the shower caressing each other with soap slicked hands. But, soon the day's frustration at being apart was too much and they began humping each other, while their tongues charted each other’s mouth and wrestled for dominance. Each man soon slicked his partner’s skin with precum and the humping shifted gears. Hands that had been exploring and teasing now rested firmly on butt cheeks. Those hands coordinated the humping so that a steady rhythm was achieved, as their fingers caressed, massaged and probed. The sound of their slick flesh slapping together echoed around the room, like a steam locomotive increasing its rhythm as it gradually picked up speed. Neither wanted the kiss to end or the humping to slow down. But, gasping for breath had them both in an open mouth kiss that allowed them to suck in air while still engaging their caressing lips and probing tongues. All too soon the locomotive morphed into a sleek fighter jet, breaking the sound barrier. The crescendo built to a staggering height as both men came up on their toes and released scalding hot contrails upon the abs and chest of his partner. The staccato of slapping flesh faded suddenly and only their ragged breathing disturbed the silence of the room. Each man rested his head on his lover's shoulder. That shared support alone kept them from collapsing into a satiated heap under the cleansing downpour.

Raymond recovered his senses first. He began to gently stroke his lover's back. Daniel's response was to pull their bodies closer together. The soft squishy sound of the cum caught between them had both full-grown men giggling like little girls. The magical spell of afterglow had been shattered. Raymond summed it up with, “Damn! That got out of hand in a hurry. I haven't cum like that since, well, since the last time we were together. Come to think of it each time we have sex it seems to be the best I’ve ever had”.

“Well, I may be lacking in experience, but I know I’ve never enjoyed sex as much or cum as hard as I have with you. That first time in the stall set a benchmark that was only ever equaled by my times with you since then. I can't imagine sex being this intimate or as intense with anyone else”.

The remaining conversation in the shower focused mainly on Daniel's day. They discussed the imposition of working around the Attorney General’s investigative team and Deputy Jones dismissal. Seems like he went straight away to the Chief of Police to apply for a job on the town’s police force. They talked about what could legally be discussed between a former employer and a potential new employer regarding performance and dismissal. Daniel observed that it wasn't unusual for a cop to resign in order to avoid firing or even criminal prosecution only to have that same cop be employed by a neighboring municipality, county or even state law enforcement agency. No one likes to admit they have or have had cops that are less than exemplary on their force. It erodes public confidence. Which could adversely affect the budget.

Conversation stalled as each man took his turn to clean his lover's cock. It soon became clear that the sensitivity was just too much and each man took himself in hand. Each gently retracted their own foreskin and carefully washed the head, corona, and prepuce. Cock cleaning, on an uncut cock especially, is best left to the owner.

As they dried themselves, the conversation continued. Daniel inquired about Raymond's trip to conceive. Daniel offered, “Too bad I can't be there to get you off”.

Raymond’s head snapped up! “Are you interested in being there? Could you take off and go with me? I’d really like that… a lot”. As he considered the ramifications and his blatant hope that his questions laid bare, Raymond qualified his position, “It would be a lot less clinical if you were with me. Frankly, I’m concerned I won't even be able to get it up knowing the people there know what I'm doing”. He saw the spark in Daniel’s eyes fade as his last remark registered. “Besides, nobody knows us there and it would be like we were making a baby together”. Raymond's chest glowed red, then the crimson tide rushed to his auburn hair as he realized how exposed he suddenly felt.

The suddenly brilliant smile that blossomed upon Daniel's face immediately washed away Raymond's concern and his blush. He continued, “If you could take the day off, we could fly over together in the morning and be back tomorrow night. What do you say? Wanna help me make a baby”?

Daniel's tremendous smile didn't fade, entirely, but Raymond could sense what he was about to hear would be disappointing. “Raymond, if things were different, I would be thrilled to help you make a baby”.

Raymond was mentally encouraged by the fact Daniel didn't say, ‘help you jerk off into a specimen cup’.

Daniel continued, “I really am concerned about not being close at hand during this investigation and because I'm new to the job. Not to mention the questions that would be asked about me galavanting off in my campaign manager’s private jet. It wouldn't help my chances come election time”. Daniel's smile had slowly faded as he shared his reasons for his refusal with Raymond.

Daniel looked at his feet like a shy little boy. “You know if you don't find anyone willing to give you a hand, when the time comes, uh, er, uh, you, um, could call me and, uh, maybe I could talk you through it. I mean, if it would help. It wouldn't be the same. I know. But, I would sure be proud to know I was somewhat involved in making your baby.”

Raymond thought about counting the number of unintentional puns his lover just made. Instead, he dropped his towel, took Daniel's face in his hands and tilted it up so their eyes met. “Lawman, I understand and agree with you. If you can talk sexy to me over the phone while I make my baby batter, it’ll be almost as good you being there.”

Raymond wasn't about to lose a perfect opportunity. He brought his lips to Daniel's and was surprised at the spark he felt as their lips met. That spark tingled down his spine and made his balls move inside their sack and his cock surge in interest. Not since his youth had he responded so soon after such a gut-wrenching climax.

Daniel felt Raymond's cock harden with the kiss and his own throbbed in response. He dropped to his knees, intent on solidifying his lover's now tentative interest. As soon as he knelt, Raymond pulled him to his feet again. “I have a better idea let's get on the bed and enjoy each other at the same time.”

Daniel actually preferred the ‘one at a time’ approach. In a 69, he felt either too engrossed in his partner’s pleasure or too engrossed in his own. ‘One at a time’ allowed him to concentrate on either giving or receiving pleasure. With Raymond, he set himself a challenge to see if he could focus on giving and ignore the pleasure he would be receiving.

When they approached ‘their side’ of the bed, Raymond casually retrieved the condoms and lube from the drawer and set them on top of the nightstand.

Daniel smirked, “I don't think we can enjoy each other at the same time using those. But, if you're game, I’m willing to try.

Raymond picked up the lube and tossed it onto the bed. Indicating the condoms, he said, “I was planning on those for our final act tonight. But, that”, indicating the lube, “we can both use enjoy at the same time”.

With that, Raymond lay on the bed, his feet resting on the pillows. He invited and guided his partner to lay in the conventional position. Soon, they were enveloping each other’s manroot in warm, wet, sucking sensations. Raymond applied lube to his middle finger, not on the hand already playing with Daniel's balls. He smeared the lube around the starred entrance.

Daniel rested his foot on the bed and bent his upper leg at the knee to grant better access. At the same time, his groan of pleasure sent vibrating shockwaves up and down Raymond's spine. Both cocks dumped noticeable wads of precum into welcoming mouths. Raymond applied more lube and inserted only the first joint of his index finger. Daniel let slip Raymond's cock with a moan and a hunch of his hips telling his lover he wanted more.

The whine had barely left Daniel’s lips before Raymond’s re-lubed finger was back in play and going deeper. Daniel began sucking cock like a starving infant. He was determined to rededicate himself to focusing on his lover's pleasure. He began a vicious tongue attack on Raymond's frenulum. This garnered him a vibrating groan of appreciation. However, it also got Raymond's finger fully inserted into his rosebud. The combination of vocal vibration and anal penetration obliterated Daniel's commitment to pleasure his partner. Suddenly his focus solidified on the pleasure his partner was providing. When Raymond touched his prostate, the inside of Daniel's head exploded in a sudden burst of multicolored shooting stars. He released Raymond's cock and raising himself up on his elbow, he grabbed a handful of Raymond's chest hair.

That got Raymond's attention, immediately. He spit out Daniel's cock, raised himself up on his elbow so they now appeared as bookends. “Did I hurt you”?

“God no! That was so intense! I can't believe I didn’t actually cum. I have never felt anything like that… ever. I don't think I can work on your cock while you do that to me. I’m afraid I might bite it off. And that would be an unpardonable sin”.

Raymond extracted his finger and turned on the bed so they were again face-to-face. “Lie on your back and we’ll take turns. I’ll do you first”.

Daniel thought to object for a moment, only a moment. Recalling the intense pleasure he had just experienced, he quickly dropped onto his back. “I’m all yours, big boy. Just so you know. I will have my turn, with you. Tonight!”

Raymond was touched to the core, recognizing that his lover was saying, ‘I’ll trust you with my body, even if I can't yet trust you with my heart’. Raymond swore a silent oath to never harm his mate, body, heart or soul. He knew that any pain visited on his man would hurt himself ten times over.

Raymond perched on his knees beside the man with the hungry, yet totally trusting look. He jumped off the bed and grabbed a still damp towel. He had Daniel raise his ass and lower back so his abs to his knees were laying on the towel. He felt a slight chill from the dampness, but it faded quickly, so he said nothing. Raymond lay down beside him, lifted himself up on his elbow, and began to trace random patterns in Daniel's chest hair. When he realized he was repeating the same pattern over and over again in the soft luxurious fur, he broke off doing that and began teasing the man’s left nipple.

Daniel was about to tell his lover he knew he was drawing a heart shape pattern on his chest, but seeing the embarrassed look on his face, he decided not to let on that his lover had been caught. The flicking of Raymond's finger, against his nub of a nipple, sent a steady thrumming jolt to the base of his cock. When Raymond's tongue licked and flicked on his nipple the sensation was almost too much. His right hand caressed Raymond's head in an encouraging gesture, while his left hand began stroking his own cock. He was fast approaching the short strokes when Raymond gently but firmly removed the stroking hand from his urgently needful cock.

Daniel's whimper shifted into a growl as his hand tried to reclaim its pride and joy. Raymond raised up and again moved the hand away. “Please, let me take care of you. I promise I’ll do my best to please you. Just relax and enjoy.” Daniel relaxed his hand and surrendered to Raymond's attention.

Raymond moved to get between Daniel's legs. First, he began to lick up the precum that coated his cock and balls. As he did this, he lubed up his finger and once more teased the rosebud. When he took Daniel's cock into his mouth he simultaneously inserted his finger and firmly tapped his lover's prostate. Daniel's response was to emit a deep-throated growl as he lifted his ass up off the bed in an attempt to ram his cock down Raymond’s throat. The consequence was that Raymond's finger could no longer contact Daniel's prostate. Raymond jerked away hacking and coughing. “Damn! Man, maybe we should get you off again and take our time on the next one”.

Daniel was gasping for air. He was not sure what had happened, but he could see a few hairs from Raymond's head clinging to his fingers. His eyes searched Raymond's face for a clue. “Are you ok? I’m sorry. I didn't mean to hurt you”.

Raymond stepped off the bed and retrieved the other damp towel to wipe his face. “Don't worry about it. If you hadn't tripped my gag reflex so I couldn't breathe, we would still be going at it. I’m fine.” With that, he climbed back onto the bed and resumed his place between Daniel’s legs. This time, he focused on his balls and ass, while his left hand slowly stroked his cock, carefully avoiding the cockhead. As Daniel, again, began responding to his finger. Raymond kept applying excessive amounts of lube. Gently he eased his ring finger in alongside the resident digit. For the first time, Daniel became quiet. No moans, no groans, no half-mumbled words of ecstasy. Before his mate could ask him to stop, Raymond pushed ahead and tapped the prostate while his mouth again sucked feverishly on his cockhead.

Daniel had felt no pain, just some discomfort at the double-digit penetration. Still, it was in such contrast to all that had gone before, he stopped to focus on that stretching sensation. Just as he was about to relax and breathe again, the lights went out and lightning filled the sky. He found himself yelling at the top of his lungs, “OH GOD, RAYMOND! STOP! RIGHT NOW! STOP! OH GOD, I DON’T WANT TO CUM NOW! PLEASE STOP”!

Raymond immediately withdrew like an MMA fighter whose opponent just tapped out. At first, he was afraid he had hurt his lover. Then, he realized Daniel had enjoyed his attention too much. His chest swelled with pride and a sly smile touched his lips. He squatted back on his heels as he waited for his lover to regain his equilibrium.

Daniel was still squeezing his cockhead to forestall his impending orgasm. Through a big, wide grin he chuckled, “Damn, I’m not sure I can survive spending more than a couple of nights a week in your bed”.

Raymond didn't respond. He just bent down, pushed Daniel's hand away and took Daniel's cock in his mouth. Daniel wasn't sure what he’d said to upset Raymond but he knew he had. Placing the palm of one hand against Raymond's forehead and holding his cock down against his abs with the other. He confronted his lover, “I don't know what I just said to upset you, but believe me, that wasn't my intention. Now, I’m ready to cum. In fact, I’m on a hair trigger. But, it's not gonna happen until you are deep inside me. So no more sucking, stroking or nipple play until your monster cock is buried balls deep in my ass. Cause, come hell or high water. I am getting fucked by you. Tonight! Just remember, next time it’ll be me fucking you. So, do it right”. Then Daniel pulled his knees up to the side of his chest and said, in a deep sexy drawl, “Fuck me, Raymond… Do it now, Babe”

Raymond then set upon a single short-range goal. He was going to fuck his lover's brains out. It didn't happen right away but after minutes of loosening Daniel's entranceway, Raymond donned his condom. Raymond wasn't sure Daniel's glazed over eyes could even see him when he asked, “You ready Lawman”?

Eyes still unfocused and glazed, Daniel replied, “I’m ready. Put it in me! Come on. Fuck me Lover”!

Raymond lined up his manroot and pushed forward. His hands planted either side of his lover's head, his eyes searched for the least inkling of pain. All he saw was a glazed look of wonder. Once he was balls deep, he asked, “Are you alright Babe”?

“Oh yeah. I’m fine”. A soft chuckle, then, “I know what those porn stories mean when they say you get an urge like you need to take a really big dump”.

Raymond was convinced he had a green light. He grabbed a pillow and wrestled it up under Daniel's ass. Silently cussing himself for not doing it before they were intimately connected. After a couple of gentle probes that got Daniel to moaning like a cash paid whore, Raymond was satisfied with the pillow’s position. At first, he wiggled his ass, sending his cock around in circles inside his lover. Then he went down on his elbows so he could taste Daniel’s now swollen lips. At the same time, using his ass muscles to rhythmically fuck his man. He reared back enough to free his hands to tease Daniel’s swollen pencIl eraser nubs, while long dicking his ass. When Daniel began to moan and cuss incoherently and furiously stroke his cock, Raymond knew it was time. He shifted so his cock was slamming into and abusing Daniel's prostate on every stroke.

Daniel's right hand fought valiantly with his own cock to force it to release that which it guarded so miserly. His left hand stroked his lover's chest lovingly. Then it found a nipple. Soon, it began to tease and torment it. Raymond's response was to slam harder and faster into Daniel's sphincter and prostate.

Daniel gave up the ghost with a growl that made something deep inside Raymond want to respond in kind. Daniel painted his own face, neck, chest, and abs with long, hot, thick, heavy jets of cum that seemed to never stop. Before they did stop, Raymond’s balls surrendered to the pulsing wonder of Daniel’s grasping, gripping ass. As his balls mustered the troops for one final all-out assault, Raymond voiced a deep-seated groan that grew into a deafening howl that vibrated within Daniel's chest and echoed off the walls. Viciously, he slammed into his lover to plant his seed as deeply as possible. His balls were blissfully unaware that a polyurethane prison awaited their soldiers, their fate was sealed. Their catchment would be tied in a knot and dropped into a nearby trash can.

Raymond was fighting the dizzying euphoria that sought to engulf him. He knew if he didn't at least wipe up the mess now, it would be like cement in the morning. He disposed of the condom, mentally saluting those brave soldiers that missed fertilization by less than 24 hours. He grabbed the towel and wiped his lover as thoroughly and as gently as possible.

Wiping himself and then tossing both towels toward the door, he retrieved his pillow, pulled their cover over them, turned out the light and snuggled in close to his soul mate. As he drifted off, knowing Daniel was already asleep, he softly whispered, “I love you”. The response from Daniel came even more softly, “I Love you, too”. Raymond counseled himself to remember. Daniel was already asleep and didn't know who he was talking to. Still, the response echoed in his brain like the softest, most beautiful lullaby ever, as he drifted off to a sound and peaceful sleep.

Well, for you Raymond and Daniel fans. I hope it is in keeping with your expectations.
Let me know by posting your comments.
Jim
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42 minutes ago, Wesley8890 said:

Holy gay sex Batman! That scene was so hot. I loved the ending where both said I love you

Thank you. I never used to receive comments regarding my sex scenes. I guess they have gotten better over the years. At least I hope so. Remember, expressions of love can be discounted if, the speaker is in the throes of passion or if he is almost asleep.😉 Only time will tell if of those apply.

Thanks for posting your comments.

Jim

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1 hour ago, charlie lytle said:

Very enjoyable but I missed Jeff and Paul. Looking forward to the next chapter.

I have decided that this is part of "The Adams Family Saga". I am not sure how that will evolve, but it explains Raymond getting a share of the storyline as he is now officially Jeff's brother. Besides, both he and Daniel had a "Change of Heart".😉

Thanks so much for your comments.

Jim

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51 minutes ago, atlteddy said:

MMMMMMMM Jim, that was soooooooo good!

i was breathing hard and panting right slong with them. I also thank you for letting them still show there love and concern for each other and not make it a lustfest.

thanks for the hot scenes and the showing of love.

Mike

Thanks, I felt it would be a disservice to either/both characters if this came off as a 'booty call' or as Sam Smith says, "a one night stand". They have their challenges ahead, but they each seem to see the reality of their circumstances.

Thanks for posting your comments.

Jim

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37 minutes ago, deville said:

Absolutely lived up to my Raymond/ Daniel expectations ..... and then some. If Daniel is asleep , well the subconscious doesn't lie and the passion was spent. To my mind his reply has every indication that it is the truth.... but I'll have to wait ( Im) patiently to find out. 

Thank you for (im)patiently waiting. Basically, I agree, however, our conscience and subconscious do not always agree. Daniel has some issues with trusting the love of his life. So, be patient. 😉

Thanks agin for your comments. They keep me motivated.

Jim

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Really well done from start to finish with the writing and pacing; and yes, even the sex scene was hot hot hot...  I do like how Raymond and Daniel relate to and interact with each other; even though they are obviously horny for each other, they treat each other as adults and that is reflected so well in the story. 

 

One small grip, you indicated that the Sheriff drove into the ranch in his personal pickup but then he went to the squad car to get his overnight bag.  I know it is hard to keep continuity but anything like that just seems to jar me out of the story for a moment...  Not life or death or even that major; just more of an F.Y.I...

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Ok, that was really good, and no sheep skin rugs were harmed in the making of this story. Next up, "Let's Make A Baby" then "Dan's Revenge Sex" (since he'll have to wait). Go with a Streamliner International, classic and modern. I would also like to do a shout out to Ms Julie's Strawberry/Rhubarb and Sweet Potato pies . Looking forward to the places you will take us next. Always -Brian

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4 hours ago, Onim said:

AWESOME!!! Definitely team Raymond/Lawman here!! Thank goodness Daniel is finally accepting his place as a member of "The Adams Family"...snap, snap...:great:

Thank you for posting your comment. I think Daniel is so different from Paul. I suspect Raymond will have a harder time adjusting to what his revelation means in terms of net worth that Daniel will. Daniel doesn't get upset easily, he just withdraws.

Jim

 

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3 hours ago, centexhairysub said:

Really well done from start to finish with the writing and pacing; and yes, even the sex scene was hot hot hot...  I do like how Raymond and Daniel relate to and interact with each other; even though they are obviously horny for each other, they treat each other as adults and that is reflected so well in the story. 

 

One small grip, you indicated that the Sheriff drove into the ranch in his personal pickup but then he went to the squad car to get his overnight bag.  I know it is hard to keep continuity but anything like that just seems to jar me out of the story for a moment...  Not life or death or even that major; just more of an F.Y.I...

I see Raymond and Daniel as being more mature than Jeff and Paul. Raymond is ten years older than the other three... maybe that's why. Each man has a different set of experiences and expectations that affect how they approach life.

Thank you so much for pointing that out about the "patrol car". I will fix it now... I just fixed it, now it reads "pickup" in both cases. I like it a lot when a reader gets involved enough to point out mistakes, that when corrected, make it a better read for others to enjoy.

Thanks again for all your comments.

Jim

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2 hours ago, Tazzle001 said:

Ok, that was really good, and no sheep skin rugs were harmed in the making of this story. Next up, "Let's Make A Baby" then "Dan's Revenge Sex" (since he'll have to wait). Go with a Streamliner International, classic and modern. I would also like to do a shout out to Ms Julie's Strawberry/Rhubarb and Sweet Potato pies . Looking forward to the places you will take us next. Always -Brian

Thanks Brian,

I would like to point out that there will be 'sex', albeit the vocal as opposed to the oral variety. I have been advised that Modular homes can be had almost immediately... apparently "money talks". So, we'll see.

Thanks again for posting your many comments. I look forward to them.

Jim

 

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On 6/25/2017 at 2:08 PM, charlie lytle said:

When do we get chapter 29? I am going through withdrawal!!

Sorry, as you probably know I usually post at faster pace. I will try to do better.

Damn notifications! I just got notified that you "liked chapter 28" about two minutes ago (5 days later!) I think it would be better if they just reverted to emails.

Thanks for the nudge. Don't hesitate to post a comment if I don't keep up a better pace.

Jim

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