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Peter's Probationary Poems - 3. For my Loved One - Poetry Prompt 7 - Blank Verse

For my Loved One

 

When I fall asleep in my comfy chair,

on waking there’s a blanket covering me.

When I come home after a day of work,

the table is prepared, the wineglass full.

When troubling thoughts keep me awake at night,

your hand finds mine in reassuring touch.

When I’m alone, for you have gone abroad,

I find your note with some endearing words.

These little acts express your deep felt love,

more than my small poem could ever do.

Write a poem in ten lines of blank verse (defined in the usual way as non-rhyming iambic pentameter) as an address to a friend or a loved one. OR, if you're feeling adventurous, write a speech (or speeches) for a character (or characters) whom you've created, all in blank verse.
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Ok here I am. Much too hard to type well on my tablet and this deserved my laptop!
This a lovely poem of love and relationship. Grand gestures are just that, and to me more for the giver's ego. Small private expressions of love, such as the laid table, the blanket, and the notes are easier remembered and easier to keep safe in your heart.
Thanks for sharing it Peter. I loved it.
tim

On 01/10/2016 03:52 AM, AC Benus said:

It's such a beautiful poem, Peter. The stately progression of paired lines as complete sentences works here brilliantly. Each little unit enhances our ability to experience the loved-one's love for ourselves. This poem invites us in, and does not need to boast to overawe. Love is both the proof and the reason.

 

Awesome!

Thank you so much, AC. I purposely tried to keep it small. I'm not good (yet and maybe never will) at more abstract content. For the time being as long as I'm able to convey the feelings I had while writing, I'm happy.

On 01/10/2016 04:18 AM, aditus said:

It is warm and tender. You are gut aufgehoben. You found beautiful words. In my mind I added that's love behind each sentence. Wonderful.

Thank you for your review, Adi. The literal meaning of "aufheben" as an upwards motion applies as well. The feeling of being loved lifts your spirit to a higher plane.

On 01/10/2016 04:22 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Ok here I am. Much too hard to type well on my tablet and this deserved my laptop!

This a lovely poem of love and relationship. Grand gestures are just that, and to me more for the giver's ego. Small private expressions of love, such as the laid table, the blanket, and the notes are easier remembered and easier to keep safe in your heart.

Thanks for sharing it Peter. I loved it.

tim

Thanks, tim, for your laptop review. I'm still in the 20th century with my desktop computer.

The list of small gestures is endless and although I do my best, I'm not nearly as attentive. Like you I feel very blessed with my partner.

On 01/10/2016 06:23 AM, dughlas said:

It is the small things done that keep love, that nourish it. Grand banquets are oft overfilling it is the daily meals shared that feed us.

Thank you Peter.

As long as you're not taking the small things for granted and keep noticing them, love will sustain. Thank you for your wise words, dugh.

On 01/10/2016 07:02 AM, Headstall said:

Well done, Peter. A tribute to that which is truly important between a couple. I loved the wording, the rhythm and the sentiment... thank you... cheers... Gary...

Thank you, Gary. I see it all the time between Michael and Kendall and now also between Nate and Bodie. They're all excellent role-models.

On 01/10/2016 10:25 AM, Defiance19 said:

This is so beautiful, Peter. I felt the love woven through every line. The little things matter so much more, and you managed to convey that effortlessly. Well done...

The biggest compliment is "effortlessly", for I always fear the kneading and tweaking will shine through. You made me very happy, thanks Def.

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