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Second Chances - 14. Conviction for the Future

After earlier comments - this got the biggest rewrite to clean up the jolting of the first write.
Hopefully the flow is gentler this time.

Two months have passed since Jerod left. I miss his presence. He calls frequently; still can make me laugh – and still earns an occasional 'shut up'. I still go to the club occasional Saturdays; things with Thomas are chilly, but acceptable. At least for me. But the workout isn't as pleasant without my best friend.

Cheryl and I have gone out a few times, but that's finished. She wants me to move in but refuses to even discuss marriage. I tell myself it's a good thing, but it still leaves me in an empty bed. I believe we will always love each other. She is a special person and regardless of what my children might think, worthy of my affection.

I told Ted I would be leaving. I'm tired of the nine-to-five routine and want to get away. Away from the house and from all the "normality" here. Took a while to realize it wasn't the 'normal' I wanted, it was freedom from being 'normal'. To be me – whoever that turns out to be.

I talked to Cheryl, the kids, Jerod – let them all know my plans. Jerod was the only one who was pleased with my decision – no surprise there. I arranged for mail pickup house and yard maintenance. I sorted through all the stuff I brought home from my work office – it is amazing how much paraphernalia a person collects without noticing.

The departure morning finally arrived. I was up early, showered, dressed, then walked through the house, checking windows, locks, the usual last-minute things. I finished the packing I had started the night before, finally convincing myself I had everything I needed. Besides, if I came up missing something, there are stores out there that sell stuff. I assured myself I could easily pick up anything if the need arose.

I looked around the bedroom once more, switched on a night-light then shut off the overhead. I set the case by the front door before walking through the house, checking windows and doors yet again, ensuring everything was set for me to leave. I paused only a moment before walking out the kitchen door and locking up.

I slipped the suitcase into my trunk then climbed into the driver’s seat. Retiring early was a bold and slightly nerve-wracking move, but it was time. I now had the time and the money to live for myself. Surprisingly, no one had tried to talk me out of it. Annie and I had always planned on seeing the country; there was nothing to prevent me doing so now.

I reached out and turned a small photograph hanging on the rearview mirror so I could look at it. It had been laminated, hopefully it wouldn’t fade. Our wedding day. I smiled as I looked at the one true love of my life before releasing the photo to swing freely as I started the car. The CD player kicked in and Helen Reddy’s voice drifted through the car as I headed off to parts unknown.

“And when one of us is gone
And one of us is left to carry on
Then remembering will have to do
Our memories alone will get us through
Think about the days of me and you –

You and me against the world”

Thank you for reading 'Second Chances'. I hope you enjoyed reading as much as I have writing.
And thank you for your comments - they have meant a lot.
I'll be starting my next story soon - entitled 'Mitchel'. Watch for it.
Copyright © 2018 MericCotton; All Rights Reserved.
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Loved this story!!  I did not expect this ending at all!  I’m not sure what I thought would happen, but I’m glad he’s taking a chance to find happiness for a second time!  Thank you!

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I'm more than a little  surprised at the not-ending of the story.  We went from him and Jer hooking up to he just takes off alone in a road trip to ____? 

 

Its a bit abrupt.  

 

I'm glad he is able to start living again, hope he finds something that makes him peaceful again. 

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yeah .. i read this a few hours ago and well i have to agree with starry.  However, it's not my story.  I did enjoy it.

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48 minutes ago, Starrynight22 said:

I'm more than a little  surprised at the not-ending of the story.  We went from him and Jer hooking up to he just takes off alone in a road trip to ____? 

 

Its a bit abrupt.  

 

I'm glad he is able to start living again, hope he finds something that makes him peaceful again. 

 

33 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

yeah .. i read this a few hours ago and well i have to agree with starry.  However, it's not my story.  I did enjoy it.

keep in mind - Jared left 2 weeks earlier and is now traveling with the band.  doesn't feel abrupt to me - but I probably could have written it better ...  In my earlier draft he and Jared didn't "hook up" ... maybe that would make it less abrupt?  he's opened himself to experiences and feeling/loving again ... hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

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2 hours ago, mfa607 said:

Loved this story!!  I did not expect this ending at all!  I’m not sure what I thought would happen, but I’m glad he’s taking a chance to find happiness for a second time!  Thank you!

glad you enjoyed it.  The ending is definitely nothing expected ... but that would be me, heh.  Thanks again for sticking with me!

 

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10 minutes ago, MericCotton said:

 

keep in mind - Jared left 2 weeks earlier and is now traveling with the band.  doesn't feel abrupt to me - but I probably could have written it better ...  In my earlier draft he and Jared didn't "hook up" ... maybe that would make it less abrupt?

possibly it would.  people were cheering for Paul.. and the thing with Jared made us hope for them.  So this felt like he just left ... i think if you expanded it to include a proper convo with Jared, so say goodbye or i need to travel and then we can see where we end up.  Anyway it is your story, and you choose how to end it. 

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How about "Second Chances - Part 2 - On the Road"?  What's to say Paul doesn't pick up Cheryl along the way?  What's to say Paul isn't traveling to Houston, or the band's next stop?  What's to say that Cheryl and Jer and Paul don't get into a three-way?  (Ooops, did I actually say that out loud?  Okay, so I'm just a dirty old man....  😈)

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8 hours ago, GWood said:

How about "Second Chances - Part 2 - On the Road"?  What's to say Paul doesn't pick up Cheryl along the way?  What's to say Paul isn't traveling to Houston, or the band's next stop?  What's to say that Cheryl and Jer and Paul don't get into a three-way?  (Ooops, did I actually say that out loud?  Okay, so I'm just a dirty old man....  😈)

it's a  thought - but there are others in there first .... but it's worth thinking about :)

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and so Paul closes that chapter of his life, but he hasn't sold the house, so he has a home base

i liked the story, glad you posted it!

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10 hours ago, mollyhousemouse said:

and so Paul closes that chapter of his life, but he hasn't sold the house, so he has a home base

i liked the story, glad you posted it!

Thank you so much.  It was a fun (and at times, surprising) work.

 

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I read this story over a couple of days and really enjoyed it! I felt your depiction of Paul's life going forward after his wife's death seemed realistic. I understand and sympathize with his reluctance to make big changes in his life. If his children are adults he has had twenty plus years to settle into a routine that was comfortable. I was hoping for a different ending, but I am not the author. 😉 I thought your dialogue and plot were first rate! And I really liked Paul. Thank you.

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14 hours ago, JeffreyL said:

I read this story over a couple of days and really enjoyed it! I felt your depiction of Paul's life going forward after his wife's death seemed realistic. I understand and sympathize with his reluctance to make big changes in his life. If his children are adults he has had twenty plus years to settle into a routine that was comfortable. I was hoping for a different ending, but I am not the author. 😉 I thought your dialogue and plot were first rate! And I really liked Paul. Thank you.

 

You are most welcome.  And you're not the only one "hoping for a different ending" - - I may adjust it yet, just don't know to what degree.  Thanks again for reading!

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This was a rather enjoyable read. As for the ending, even though I would have a more concrete happily ever after. It left me feeling happy, though a little jarred, as I did not expect it to end there :P, but in my head, Paul needed to complete his plans he had with Annie to travel, so that he can move on to be with Paul. The only thing that disappointed me was the lack of presence of Paul's kids. Their mother dies, and they just leave their father to seemingly grieve alone.

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