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tim's poetry workbook - 3. Lyric Poems

The Prompt: As we are studying the rhymical back and forth of poetic lines, let’s approach the exercise as a thought vs. feeling experiment. For each of the following topics, create at least one stanza of poetry (say a minimum of four lines per stanza). You want to explore the thoughts versus emotions you had during your:

 

- Last visit to the doctor’s office

- Last Valentine’s Day

- Last funeral you attended

- Last wedding you attended

- (guys only) Last clothes-shopping trip

 

Hopefully i got some of these right! Some were hard ... i think you'll guess which ones i mean .. well maybe all of them were. But here they are.

 

Visiting the Shrink


I’d made my appointment for three
but didn’t want to go
because it meant that I had failed
me, I could not control

Shame and nerves twisted in my gut
wishing to be normal,
Is this a foolish boy’s dream now;
forever out of reach?

Kindly, the doctor treated me
aware of my feelings
“I know having your poetry,
and pills will help you cope.”

“Being normal is a journey
Taking life as it comes.
Drawing upon the lessons learned
And finding answers there.”

Sitting with the good physician
And then facing the truth
The pills are just a fact of life
Finally there is hope

 

 

Valentine’s Day

 

Celebrating is for lovers
Though since you passed away
Bittersweet memories do come
Mum, it was your birthday

Red roses are this Day’s flower
Meaning a lot to you
I’m seeing you in your garden
With roses in each hue

I am not forgetting you, Mum
It's a place i can't stay
And like each one, this day passes
Now just a thought away

 

 

 

Funeral

I am dressing in my black suit
Dreading what is to come
I will say my final goodbyes
But so not wanting to

Anger is fading to sadness
Loss is making me numb
Missing you so much already
Don’t want to do this, Mum

You had always been my best friend
My strength when I had none
Who will I turn to, I wonder?
Now that you have passed on.

Dad clips me once around my ear
For dragging my black shoes
Hurrying along behind him
We sit up front, near you

Promising to never forget
You were my loving mum
Your sweet comforting words ensure;
I’ll never be alone

 

 

Gettin’ Married

 

You told me you'd always love me
i said, i love you too
Then you were asking the question
Yes, was my answer true

We each bought nice new suits and ties
and told your family
On that cold day in December
You promised gallantly

Reading the vows we had written
and saying them aloud
Promising with our golden rings
Turning to face the crowd

Now we were legally married
Bound we are forever
You are my man, the one I love
I will leave you never

 

 

 

Shopping

Your dark eyes are appraising me
While I’m pulling on clothes
Turning I see your shaking head
Your face filled with dismay

What's up, I end up exclaiming
Your short reply’s a snort
We’re going to get new stuff, boy
Clothes that really fit!

Hiding myself under long sleeves
covering up my scars
Large sizes helping me feel safe
so people cannot see

There in the mall we shop and shop
And then shopping some more
We leave with the hand-picked clothes
All I’m feeling is dread

Telling to wear my new slim duds
You took me to the beach
When you’re holding my hand, I’m safe
Now, finally, I’m free

 

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Hey! Thanks for reading and for your comments, if you feel like leaving some...they always make me smile.
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These are all lovely, tim. It's weird, though. As wonderful as they all are, it's the last one that gets me the most. I struggle a lot with that right now, with clothes, which to buy, which to wear. If I wear a tighter t-shirt, will people see through me? I don't know if that makes sense... It's not the same, but I still identify. What a strange thing, out of all of these emotional poems, the topics of some of which I know all too well. Kind of want to do some of these myself now. 

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6 minutes ago, Thorn Wilde said:

These are all lovely, tim. It's weird, though. As wonderful as they all are, it's the last one that gets me the most. I struggle a lot with that right now, with clothes, which to buy, which to wear. If I wear a tighter t-shirt, will people see through me? I don't know if that makes sense... It's not the same, but I still identify. What a strange thing, out of all of these emotional poems, the topics of some of which I know all too well. Kind of want to do some of these myself now. 

I always wrote free verse .. i still like it .. but there is something .. freeing.. when you make yourself work within a form, within it's frame work. It's hard. It really is .. but once your 'get' meter .. it's a part of your poetic side and it's in everything you write.  Working within a form forces you to be more creative.. to hunt for words to make it work and be right.  It's a challenge and i really like it now.    If you're going to, then do the prompts in order.. it's worth the work.

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2 hours ago, Thorn Wilde said:

These are all lovely, tim. It's weird, though. As wonderful as they all are, it's the last one that gets me the most. I struggle a lot with that right now, with clothes, which to buy, which to wear. If I wear a tighter t-shirt, will people see through me? I don't know if that makes sense... It's not the same, but I still identify. What a strange thing, out of all of these emotional poems, the topics of some of which I know all too well. Kind of want to do some of these myself now. 

YES!

 

I was just thinking that I liked the last one the best.  I think that's something so many of us do, we hide our body ashamed of it for one reason or another.  Or frightened of another person's reaction - maybe even the reaction of someone we love.

 

These are great, tim.  Nicely done.

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These all very emotions poems. As a response to the Lyrics challenge in Poetry Prompt No. 3, they are great. Diverse and engaging, each one offers a window into your soul, which poetry should be able to do. 

 

Moving forward, perhaps focus a bit more on constructing stanzas that unfold one thought across the four lines. Some of the work here reads more like a pair of lines and then another pair of lines, if that makes sense. Ask me and I can show you what I mean. 

 

This great work, and I'm really pleased you are taking the Zero to Hero challenges again. Muah 

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10 hours ago, Thorn Wilde said:

These are all lovely, tim. It's weird, though. As wonderful as they all are, it's the last one that gets me the most. I struggle a lot with that right now, with clothes, which to buy, which to wear. If I wear a tighter t-shirt, will people see through me? I don't know if that makes sense... It's not the same, but I still identify. What a strange thing, out of all of these emotional poems, the topics of some of which I know all too well. Kind of want to do some of these myself now. 

Thanks Thorn... I think a lot of people hide behind clothes..

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8 hours ago, Wayne Gray said:

YES!

 

I was just thinking that I liked the last one the best.  I think that's something so many of us do, we hide our body ashamed of it for one reason or another.  Or frightened of another person's reaction - maybe even the reaction of someone we love.

 

These are great, tim.  Nicely done.

Thanks Wayne .. they are not all 'right' but that's fine.. this is how we learn .. and i still have a lot learn.  Thanks for your support!

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1 hour ago, dughlas said:

How many of us hide within and behind our clothes? I like these little brother.

Seems like a lot of people can relate to this one. Thanks very much, dugh!

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27 minutes ago, AC Benus said:

These all very emotions poems. As a response to the Lyrics challenge in Poetry Prompt No. 3, they are great. Diverse and engaging, each one offers a window into your soul, which poetry should be able to do. 

 

Moving forward, perhaps focus a bit more on constructing stanzas that unfold one thought across the four lines. Some of the work here reads more like a pair of lines and then another pair of lines, if that makes sense. Ask me and I can show you what I mean. 

 

This great work, and I'm really pleased you are taking the Zero to Hero challenges again. Muah 

Thanks AC .. i'm glad these sort of work, but i understand what you're saying  and well,  i'll be asking. Thanks for your comments and support AC! .. oh and thanks for all you do for GA's poets.. muah xoxo

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16 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

Thanks Wayne .. they are not all 'right' but that's fine.. this is how we learn .. and i still have a lot learn.  Thanks for your support!

Maybe.  But Lord of the Flies was a "masterpiece."  And I despised that bit of literature.

 

Do what you do, be happy doing it, progress along the track you associate with improvement - whatever that may be.

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I enjoyed reading these. Valentines Day and Shopping touched me most. Thank you for sharing your work. 

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