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tim's poetry workbook - 8. Quatrains
The Prompt: write two poems with several stanzas of Quatrains. One inspired by the sights and emotions of a movie you love! Let the energy flow to ‘win over’ a convert to this film. And then in mirror image fashion, write a more rational criticism about a movie you thought was an utter waste of time. Try to conjure for the reader the elements of cliché, poor script-writing, bad acting/directing – any and everything that bugged you about the film. Keep the several Quatrains of each poem to four lines, rhymed a-b-a-b, and with 10 syllables per line. Don't get frustrated, just have fun with it.
Okay that was the prompt and i tried...i really did.
But i struggled and after a long chat with AC when he said.. your space Blank Verse was good, but your Blank Verse poem called On White Feathers was excellent. I said, 'That's because it meant something to me. Space doesn't really...movies don't much. So AC said write about something that does then. So i have .. the first is something i read that upset me and the second is about my Husband and how he is my rock, with the patience of a saint. So sort of opposites, rather like the Good film/less than good film prompt.
Let's see how i managed...
While your words cut like diamond and ice
without a thought you let your daggers fly
For you care nothing at all of the price
which your unwilling victim pays or why
As power has corrupted you and your ilk
grinding us down you seem to do with glee
So, to our faces your voices are silk
and you gloat, knowing that we cannot flee
But there is refuge and hiding places
with others who've been victims in the past
As one, we squat concealing our faces
hoping you will leave us in peace at last
One fine warm day you took my trembling hand
and drew this frightened boy from my dark space
Giving me safety and a place to land
while keeping me in your gentle embrace
With soft urgent words you told me you care
so, trusting in you I’ve given my heart
When you're at my side, i know i can dare
and if you're away we're never apart
While sometimes I’m still that boy who’s afraid
you continue to share your strength with me
For you rescue me when too deep i wade
and with your patient love have set me free
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