tim's poetry workbook - 6. Elegy

16 minutes ago, Reader1810 said:

While my brain had a bit of a breakdown trying to comprehend your explanation of what an elegy is, I do understand - in my mind anyway - and appreciate your poems. They are lovely, tim.  

He actually hasn't explained ... but an elegy is a poem of nature and also remembrance. And I see AC has explained in his comments. 

Beautifully written, Tim. I enjoyed just reading and going with the flow of the words. I didn't go back and check the technical quality of your poem. I just got caught up in the feelings. Thanks.

13 hours ago, MichaelS36 said:

It may not be perfect, boy, but she would love it anyway.  It's beautiful. xo

thank You, Michael. i hope she would xoxo

11 hours ago, mollyhousemouse said:

this is wonderful tim! simply beautiful
and the picture in my head is so clear, and so beautiful
i can't wait to see it when you are done tweaking it 💛

it is finished ... i'm glad you like it xo

10 hours ago, AC Benus said:

This is a great Elegy. The two things this type of poetry are good at -- connection with nature, and remembrance of things lost -- are balanced here admirably. Your rhyme choices enhance the stanzas, and never distract, which is a hard thing to do. As for spreading a thought through a stanza, what matters is to avoid hard stops at the end of lines within the stanza. Here, you don't sense that very much, and things like line-end punctuation can add or distract from that goal.

This is a great poem, and I'm really pleased you took the Poetry Prompt challenge

 

Thank you, AC.  You are so good to look at these and offer support and advice. It's very helpful and means a lot. Thanks for being so generous. xo

8 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

While my brain had a bit of a breakdown trying to comprehend your explanation of what an elegy is, I do understand - in my mind anyway - and appreciate your poems. They are lovely, tim.  

Thanks for reading it. i am glad you enjoyed it.

7 hours ago, Reader1810 said:

Okay, that’s true, I was speaking more of the technical aspect of an elegy. My brain just wouldn’t absorb what tim wrote about that part, 

Sometimes 8 syllables isn't enough ... once upon a time that was too much!  Using 9 or 10 gives you more flexibility.   Thanks for reading this. xo

5 hours ago, JeffreyL said:

Beautifully written, Tim. I enjoyed just reading and going with the flow of the words. I didn't go back and check the technical quality of your poem. I just got caught up in the feelings. Thanks.

Thanks JeffreyL.. i appreciate you reading and your comments very much. I'm glad the feeling came through. xo

This is a compelling elegy, tim. From your "boxy place" to your natural refuge, you illustrate your emotions beautifully. Nature can conjure up some pretty powerful memories. 

14 hours ago, Mikiesboy said:

it is finished ... i'm glad you like it xo

i do, i like it a whole lot! xo

I love this. You connect where you are to that person you love and remember. Thank you for this. 

20 hours ago, MacGreg said:

This is a compelling elegy, tim. From your "boxy place" to your natural refuge, you illustrate your emotions beautifully. Nature can conjure up some pretty powerful memories. 

thank You, Sir.  i find being out among trees especially, very emotional and moving.  i've never really left the city much . but i like trees very much.  So it's easy to find that emotional place when i write about nature or being in it.  That's why i think it was so easy to write The Promise ...  Thanks very much for Your comments, Sir.  xo

19 hours ago, Parker Owens said:

I love this. You connect where you are to that person you love and remember. Thank you for this. 

Thank you very much Parker.  i appreciate you taking the time to read this and for your comments.