That was pretty powerful, both in the writing and the content. I for one think that it would very much be worth writing and posting.

I agree with Nephylim. Good work West

Excellent beginning for a story. Very well done, West.

I agree whole-heartedly with the others. This beginning is excellent ; I was sucked in after just two paragraphs. Please give us the whole story

i know i'm late but i wasn't here before.

i like the way you tell your story, plus i like england.

i don't like the subject here as poverty kind of scares me, but the way you tell it is so good.

i'm more interested in the story that starts at 14.

did you write it?

i know i'm late but i wasn't here before.

i like the way you tell your story, plus i like england.

i don't like the subject here as poverty kind of scares me, but the way you tell it is so good.

i'm more interested in the story that starts at 14.

did you write it?

I started... but there is much to go. 2 chapters are posted in efiction.... im not sure whn i will make a 3rd available