haiku train...all aboard

[irangel]

"A Haiku must "paint" a mental image in the reader's mind. This is the challenge of Haiku - to put the poem's meaning and imagery in the reader's mind in ONLY 17 syllables over just three (3) lines of poetry"

 

(three lines with 5, 7, 5 sylables per line)

 

from: http://volweb.utk.ed...risms/haiku.htm

 

So with so many word players around...shall we have a go?

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asphalt steam rising

meeting lips muscles straining

blissful steam clouds sigh

 

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[Nephylim]

Purple flowers sway

Scented air filled with sighing

Underneath, coffin.

 

Nostrils flared, eyes wide

Pulse racing with deep desire

Open vein, fresh red blood

 

Morning blush, birds sing

Tangled sheets cold but fragrant

Scent of last night's love

 

This is harder than it looks. Oh well... never claimed to be a poet

[Arpeggio]

Make me a sandwich

Or I will damn you to hell

Don't forget the cheese

 

 

Haha, I'm lame.

[jovian_w2002]

Hey Just a little reminder: a haiku is a Japanese poetic form that suggests "season". If it lacks any suggestion of "seasons", it is technically a senyru. lol at lacey!<br>

[Nephylim]

Make me a sandwich

Or I will damn you to hell

Don't forget the cheese

 

 

Haha, I'm lame.

 

 

Liking it. If I wasn't already half way to hell I would definately not make you a sandwich

[Nephylim]

Hey Just a little reminder: a haiku is a Japanese poetic form that suggests "season". If it lacks any suggestion of "seasons", it is technically a senyru. lol at lacey!<br>

 

 

I never knew that. Thank you for teaching me something new today

[Genetic_Drift]

call queue unbridled

customers demand action

apathy wins out

 

(sweet leaping gazelles, I'm tired of taking calls about the mail server *sigh*)

[Graeme]

Gentle lips a glow

Flying fire surrounds our love

As we near our end

[irangel]

sunlight kisses snow

moonlight traces forms of love

chilly winds aglow

[irangel]

lazily day dawns

summer sighs a final breath

lovers lips awake

[tomon]

茶色の木

秋に紅葉

美しい

 

That probably isn't correct japanese at all but since I'm gonna be living there in 3 weeks time I thought I'd give it a go. Fail.

[JamesSavik]

cat paws bat dandelions

summers golden, sultry warmth

old friends embrace

[irangel]

茶色の木

秋に紅葉

美しい

 

That probably isn't correct japanese at all but since I'm gonna be living there in 3 weeks time I thought I'd give it a go. Fail.

 

 

 

hey tomon san, no fair

 

onegai shimasu translate the haiku

Edited August 6, 2009 by aikirangel

[irangel]

moans, sweat, breathing hard

beating hearts in unison

sighs, in summer's kiss

[Caipirinha]

Can't claim credit, but it is my favortie 'Haiku' ever:

 

Haikus are easy,

But they don't always make sense.

Refridgerator.

[irangel]

Robust jolly fun

seriousness all gone by

rolling on the floor

 

 

so this is a 5,7 5 syllable one

not serious but fun

 

onward through the fog eh?

[tomon]

 

hey tomon san, no fair

 

onegai shimasu translate the haiku

 

 

すみません、 英語で:

 

Well obviously in english it isn't 5,7,5 but I think it's roughly

Light Brown Trees,

Leaves changing colour in autumn,

It's beautiful.

 

Translated japanese haikus never seem very good.

[Nephylim]

Spring rain falls, hides tears

death leaves companion cold

saying farewell love.

 

 

[irangel]

white rose softly sighs

petals in fall's breeze alight

hands caress the soul

[Nephylim]

white rose softly sighs

petals in fall's breeze alight

hands caress the soul

 

 

*sigh* My favourite

[irangel]

*sigh* My favourite

 

thanks,

[irangel]

summer bees labor

blossoms to their song delight

sighs our honey sweet

[irangel]

dripping spring waters

beads of sweat, I taste of you

love sate my fever

[irangel]

distant tracks recede

sunlight snowy memories

our destination

[irangel]

tears flowing goodbye

ignorant love, we are one

never leaving, gone