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We are all waiting patiently for the next Granger chapter. It will take a lot of preparation to have HMS Valiant ready for the King's arrival. I am sure Mark is taking extra time to get the details of a royal event letter perfect. In the mean time I will continue to listen to Handel's "Water Music" to set the proper mood.
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This chapter ended as the antithesis of the previous 'cliff hanger' . “We’re gonna fuck,” I said, cracking him up. With so many story lines resolving, are we getting near the end of 'Flux' ?
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This is one of the many reasons we all love your writing, Mark. Just when you think it's safe to cross the street, you get hit by a bus!
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I like the story and the characters so far. However.... it ....is....very....slow. 8....chapters....and....no....clue....why... We understand it takes a lot to create and publish a story so keep up the good work.
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I believe this story is now actually becoming more about Will. He is the central character and everything revolves around him in one scene after another. I actually like Will and the person he is developing into. JP knows that Will is the future leader of this family.
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“That is thanks to Major Treadway,” Granger said. Caroline smiled at him, but they both seemed nervous, which irritated Granger. He ignored it, lest it disturb his good mood. He had been so busy getting to know his new ship, and dealing with St. Vincent, that he had not gotten a chance to know Treadway very well. And he had not yet had a chance to determine why he and Caroline seemed so uncomfortable around each other. I'll call this a "mini cliff hanger" as there is certainly a story behind this morsel of curious behavior.
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Mark, This hit me like a ton of bricks. You are such a damn good writer. I have been waiting for the drama and you gave us all a lot to think about with this chapter. Please post rapidly now that you have us all invested so deeply.
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"sleuthiness" As a master of writing such as you are, you can make up words as you need them. Love the English language and how it baffles people who are trying to learn it. I once commented that I expected the Thanksgiving dinner to be a "Jerry Springer moment". Seems we are getting even closer to an explosion. Poor Will must be devastated as the rug was pulled out from under him.
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So very interesting to see the 'behind the scenes' of getting a ship ready. Most naval stories take place on a ship that is already finished and give little history of the ships creation. We must thank Mark once again for the splendid craftsmanship of his historical writings. Bravo!
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I agree with everyone, a very sweet chapter. Things seem to be going well for everyone, but we all know that Professor Arbour will soon bring us some real drama. Caught the drift of Brad saying good things about Will, one of my favorite characters. (Saying too many nice things about Will might cause some readers indigestion.)
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Mann, once you start reading you will eventually go back and start at the beginning. Take a few days off from work and let yourself be treated to the best writing on the 'net.
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My comments and reviews are usually very short. But the way I read each chapter takes a long time. I speed read first to get the gist of the new posting, then go back and read each line and word. I marvel at the construction of each sentence and each paragraph. I have gone back and read all your work from the beginning and I do see a maturing evolution of your writing style, in a good way. Brevity and clarity place you in the Pantheon of great writers. Thank you Mark for taking us thru the 911 era of our recent tragic history in such a masterful way. 'Please, sir, I want some more.'
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I was partly kidding when I said I expected a "Jerry Springer Thanksgiving". It makes me a little nervous when things get too calm. There are so many potential situations right around the corner you know all this warm and fuzzy can't last long. And Mark will surprise us with whatever comes in the next story. Thanks again Mark and team for the best writing on the net.
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Well, you surprised me again. I was expecting a Jerry Springer Thanksgiving family reunion and we got a Hallmark Card Special. We should all be so lucky as to have someone like JP as the head of the family. This saga is still about JP and the people around him. Mark, thank you so much for what you give to us.
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I could see that you could run out of condoms on Steff's plane............ Seems too good to be true all around. Rainbows over fields of four leaf clover and unicorns prancing around. Everybody getting all close and chummy. Yuck! Something huge is going to happen in the next story. Thanks Mark (and crew)for all of the work on '911'.
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My brother died at age sixteen when I was thirteen. We were fairly close but he was always ahead of me. Stories about brothers are very meaningful to me. I often think about what might have been. Will truly loves JJ and is rightfully concerned about JJ's healing process. JJ's coming breakdown and Will's response will set the tone of the next book. Be gentle with us Mark.
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Illegitimi non carborundum Critics are sad people who like to comment on what other people do that they themselves cannot do. I like Mark Arbor's writing, it's the best on the internet. These characters are Mark's thoughts in print and it's his choice as to how they are presented. If every character was too predictable and too warm and fuzzy we wouldn't be reading these stories. I like the surprises and unexpected twists. Real people are complex and so are these fictional characters. We love you Mark and all the good writing you give us.
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Mark, the amount of reviews for this chapter tells me how deeply involved your readers are in this story. Please keep up the excellent writing and write it the way you want it to be. We can only marvel at the quality and appreciate your commitment.
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This can't be the end of this wonderful story. Please put Granger back on a ship where he belongs! I will be checking online for the last chapter every hour. Thanks for the wonderful story you and your crew have given us.
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The fact that anger issues are being discussed is a very good sign. Explosions should diminish as the feelings are talked about and resolved. Will is not a perfect person, but he is evolving. We can nit pick character flaws in everyone, but Will is one of the main targets right now. The amount of time Mark has spent on developing the plot lines for Will tells us how important he is to the entire story. The next book may or may not feature so much about Will, but we have a foundation building on this 'boy becoming a man', he has to be a fixture featured more in the coming days. Mark, thanks again for this superb example of your great story telling ability.
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Just thinking ahead. One serious injury could take Zach's NFL dream away. Only a small number of the thousands of high school players actually make it to the big time. Zach still has college ahead of him. I was in marching band in high school and college and I connected with a few athletes that needed private time away from their macho buddies. The life of a gay athlete must be miserable. The fact that Will and Zach can talk about this is a good thing.
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I'm afraid that Will is a major time bomb. His furious outbursts might send him over the edge someday.
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I agree we could all see this mess brewing. Makes the house in Hawaii more valuable.
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Seems to me a lot of our dear readers have once again forgotten the fact that Will is a teenager, an adolescent. Will is emancipated so he gets a little more leeway in his actions than the average teenager. But why get upset about a fictional character? I raised my two nephews who had to get away from a bad home situation, and it was always a challenge, but they turned out okay. I just don't see Will going down the self destructive path as someone we see everyday in real life, like Justin B****** So let's all sit back and read this story, but please give up on telling Mark how to write it.
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Happy New Year to all the Will haters. Will is still very much an adolescent.............I think ten years later all the angst will subside and Will becomes the man we all want him to be. Thanks Mark for this inside look at the mind of a growing boy.
