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WOW! That's alota garlic! My grandpa is like that about tomatoes! He thinks tomatoes will heal everything! On the other hand he is really healthy for his age so maybe he's right Anyway, at least they don't have an odor! Perhaps you should start carrying extra shirts in your schoolbag? Shea Butter is good stuff! I love the way it smells too!

Awww, don't worry we'll get there! LOL, I definitely can't wait to find out what you guys think about the stuff I'm writing now! Thanks! Thank you, Tiff! I was sort of thinking that for it to be a major sub-plot it would have had to have been developed better too. Honestly, while I wanted those scenes to be fun and interesting to read, the main point was just to have a reason for Aaron to go shopping and stuff with Amanda and Ronnie. Incidentally, all the places mentioned in the story - like in this chapter Niko Niko's, and M2M - are real places in Houston. Bender's and Frank's are the only two fictitious places, and they're actually both a combination of two other real places (Bender's is a combo of two bars/clubs I go to, and Frank's in a combo of two restaurants/diners). Thanks So did you like Ronnie? As I said, I don't want to give anything away, but I will say that Ronnie remains in the story and this definitely wasn't a one time appearance. Thanks! hehe, yay! Awesome observation Steve! LOL, well let's just say that Daisy has lots more surprises in store for us Me either! I'm eager to see what you guys think of the next chapter! Although it looks like this chapter certainly wasn't as popular with readers overall Anyway take care all and have a great day! Kevin

A noble effort That is such a good idea! Only the other day I thought, "now I'm going to end up smelling like this product instead of my cologne!" I'm going to have to look into this smell coordinating thing you've got going on!

You know that would have only been half as embarrassing if I hadn't actually read the story... (And liked it, mind you.) I had assumed that you were unfamiliar with it; although, I'm definitely glad that this isn't the case! I'm even more pleased if you like it

I definitely think it could be a song too! I dunno, I don't think it would have to be a country song. I think it could work folky/indie piece. Anyway, it was just so much fun to read! I agree with Francois, it's got a great rhythm and flow! It almost sounds like something Dr. Seus would have written (you know to be read 20 years after one reads "The Cat in the Hat" ) So yeah, I really liked it -Kevin

Wow, Jason! That was amazing! I've read a lot of poems tonight, and this is the only one to make me cry. WELL DONE! It was just...so beautiful and well told! I loved the whole thing, how it was like they were having a physical, in the ring fight, but were really just rehashing their problems. It was genus to make the bartender the ref. because of course he would be the one stuck listening to their quarrel. All in all it just purely amazing and very well told! I regret not reading it sooner, but I'm also pleased that I had this unexpected delight! Awesome! -Kevin

That was very moving and very sad, an excellent depiction of a breakup and lost love. There was both a sadness and an anger to it. Nice job, Kevin

I like the concept that when all else goes awry we still have "The Flowers" to fall back on. It's an interesting thought, one I'll try to bear in mind the next time something goes wrong. Thanks Ian Kevin

What a wonderful review Luc gave! I can hardly add much to that, especially since I pretty much agreed with him on all points. Particularly: The meaning is clear. His laundry bag looked big and heavy enough to have really been a body. I reworked the line different ways in my head but none of them fit with the style of your poem. The line is, for want of a better way to describe it, a

Oh Luc, that's so beautiful and moving! I hate to point this out, but it's ironic that the poem was about your inability to write effectively and yet it came out so powerfully Anyway, well done and I hope those feelings have been replaced with warmer, happier ones -Kevin

Well I love it! It was extremely beautiful and very sweet. I have high expectations when I read your work, yet you never fail to delight! Well done, Kevin BTW: of the three possibilities we've seen I definitely prefer the way you broke the lines up the best.

I loved it! I was expecting it to be serious and dramatic and was instead such a delightful, fun read! Awesome job, Camy! -Kevin

I know I've read this before, I must have commented somewhere else or something, or just negligently forgotten, but in any case I really really liked it and I thought it was awesome and very moving! It's a great poem 'for the cause' too Well done, Kurt! -Kevin

The first thought that struck me was that this would make an excellent rock song! It really seems to have the right flow and feeling for one. Anyway, good job Kevin

I don't like him It's an excellent poem about break up and heartbreak! I'm a bit confused by the ending though. It sounded like she had decided that she was going to be okay...then the last line made me wonder if perhaps she'd killed herself? Anyway, good job Kevin

What an empowering, optimistic poem! I really enjoyed it, Francois, Thank you! -Kevin

There's also been studies possibly linking the aluminum in it to Alzheimer's disease. I'm not vouching for their authenticity and it's been awhile since I read them, but it's interesting. After reading this I bought plain old deodorant and tried it...didn't like it at all. Decided the antiperspirant stuff was worth the risk.

Is it a heart? To me this looks like a poem about the walls one builds to protect one's heart. It's very creative and clever. Well done -Kevin

I like this, it's a fun and imaginative way to imagine the concept of time. Time itself is such an interesting thing to ponder; surely there cannot be too many poems on the subject! Thanks for adding one more -Kevin

I really liked that! It was so cute and sweet and still very...descriptive. I went ahead and imagined things that way too; it was fun Thanks, Jason, Kevin

I am most in agreement with Luc. I think really it all comes down to what the poet's intent is.

What an interesting story! Just to clarify did you actually write the word "something" as the extent of your poem, or was that the name of it, or were you just being vague because you can't really remember and/or don't want to tell us? The first time I recall writing poetry was 3rd grade. It got published, but then it was only up against other elementary school works so I guess that's not saying too much. It did spark an interest in writing that eventually extended to full stories however (I don't just mean now, I mean back then too)

How very 'Christian' (couldn't resist) I really like it! I think the feeling of wishing we didn't care because it hurts is something most, if not all, of us can identify with. It's very well done! Good job Kevin

Hmmm, Well I don't even really feel qualified to give my opinion, but I would say that you should write the story you feel most inspired to write; it will probably yield better writing. However, if you want to be sure you don't 'give up' either story, you can always make it a point to write scenes here and there at least once a week to keep the story fresh in your mind. At some point you'll probably have to 'reign in' the new ideas and focus on the ones you have going, but I don't think you should completely limit yourself either. It's probably a balancing act and you've got to figure out what balance is appropriate for you. Good luck and I look forward to checking out the results or your endeavours -Kevin

Well as long as they know how to love I know they'll be alive. I wonder if the authorities are going to work out that Gunter was at the site of the plane sabotaging. It looks like it based on this last chapter!