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Ok, I waited as long as I could, but I had to break down and read the chapter. At least I only have to wait two days until you post again! What I find utterly adorable is the way Marty and Hrishi are always telling each other to fuck off. H gives M a bj and then tells him to f off, then M tells H to f off. I'm always laughing. I totally believe Marty has feelings for Hrishi, and I'm positive his feelings are reciprocated. I think that's why Hrishi is always so pissed when Marty disappoints him for not putting Leon in his place. Hrishi cares that Marty doesn't flunk out of computer science -- that's why he invited himself over his house to help him. If he didn't care about Marty, he wouldn't care if he failed the class. This was another hella awesome chapter, Sasha!

This chapter had me lol'ing a lot. Especially with Oscar turning porn into a family viewing night! Wally is really maturing. It was obvious in his careful answers to Michael. I think he could be a good sounding board for Michael. And tomorrow he'll be faced with a house full of teenage boys, including Trey, who I'm assuming is Michael's crush. I hope Wally doesn't do anything stupid, or nothing dangerous happens in the form of that scumbag Kenny. That certainly wouldn't go over too well with over-protective J&O.

I hope so too! I emailed him, so I hope he comes on at least to check out his b-day wishes.

It's not belated, Drew, it's actually today, the 27th. I just posted it early because it was already the 27th where Sacredlove lives.

First off, I bet the next chapter will pick up with Alek running over to Liam while Marty's bringing the car around. I'm sure Liam DID see Alek hiding somewhere! Now Marty -- what a FANTASTIC best friend!!!! He's just wonderful! And just what the doctor ordered! As is Nathan! He's so sweet bringing him coffee and Mrs. F. hot chocolate. I'm glad they exchanged digits. If nothing else, you can never have too many friends.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY, SACRED!!! I miss you and hope you come back to GA soon.

Omg, this is so true! Whenever I'm editing something and I have a question, I go to Google and start reading various sites, 'Quick and Dirty Tips', 'Daily Writing Tips', 'Grammarly', etc., and I get so wrapped up reading everything BUT what I needed to read! I could spend hours just reading up on grammar! lol

We have a NextDoor site in the community where I live, and you wouldn't believe how ignorant people are in their writing! These are parents, mind you! I read these posts in amazement, firmly believing that the "No Child Left Behind" rule is utter garbage. Three-quarters of my community were 'left behind' when it comes to grammar, punctuation, spelling, etc.!

I loved The Dick Van Dyke Show and The Mary Tyler Moore Show, but she was also wonderful showing her serious side in Ordinary People. She was a true icon. RIP MTM

HAPPY BELATED BIRTHDAY, ANGEL!!! I hope you had an awesome day!

Oh, Cia, I'm so excited to see another one of your awesome Grammar Rodeos! I come across quite a few dangling modifiers when I edit. Sometimes the sentences can be quite comical. Thank you for the feature!

This was such a beautiful, positive poem! I really enjoyed it. And you can never go wrong with Huey!

I found this poem very calming with the sheep watching over their owner. It was very sweet, Doc.

Goddammit. My computer just totally combusted from all the scorching heat of your chapter. Now I have to run to Best Buy and get another one. I'm sending you the bill. Hope your happy with yourself, Hudson. So, yeah, I don't think either of them were acting in this scene at all! What I really love about your writing, Hudson, is the attention to detail. Not just in this chapter, but all the previous ones too. I always feel like I'm right in the room with Ryan and Erik. I also love how you weave Erik's tattoo into the seduction and then into the sex scene itself. (Like how I did that? 'Weave', like the tattoo weaves around Erik's body. Haha, ok, lame...moving on...) All Ryan's thinking about is how scorching hot he feels, like the smoke from the tattoo, and you place that throughout the scene -- it really adds to the chapter. Anyway, I can't say enough wonderful things about this story, Hudson. It's easy to see how affected Ryan and Erik are with each other. No acting needed there! I can't wait to read about the aftermath!! Oh! I don't think you left a link to the thread, but I'll find it.

Ok, so am I the only one who went "Ewww, cigarette breath! Ryan's kissing an ashtray!" lol But besides that, this was a hella awesome chapter, Hudson! I loved the way Ryan was sort of out of character when he was watching Erik dance and thinking about his tattoo. I'm not into tattoos at all, but your description of it piqued my interest. I'd love to see a picture of it! Oohh, I guess it might be in the next chapter! I'm really loving this story, Hudson!

Like Tim, this made me sad also. I pictured the road and the narrator's relationship as being the same -- just one endless boring landscape that holds no interest for him anymore with both in need of repair.

I loved this little interlude chapter. We got to see more of Travis. Now we know what happened in Boston with Eric. What a horrible guy to do that to someone he supposedly loves. Travis' gruff exterior and inability to trust are just defense mechanisms he uses to protect himself from getting hurt even more. Flying O Ranch -- I love that name. Could have been called Ozzy Land (maybe that's already taken in Hollywood) -- which reminds me: I really lol'd when I read Jack Osbourne is a power bottom! Ozzy's son? Can't wait for the next chapter, Mac!

I'm interpreting the poem as the narrator being some kind of spirit or entity floating around the isle helping those in need. I had to read this a few times before I thought I may have 'gotten' it.

Long chapter! Pish posh! I wanted more! I got to the end, and I was like, wait, there's no more!!! Damn! Aiden and Matt are something else. They would actually sacrifice their swimming 'careers' to sabotage their own relay race! Just because they wanted Jackson (and probably Drae too) to be too exhausted to swim more that day. How immature are they? Assholes. They should just quit that team and join Pete's. It seems like they all belong together anyway. I love how Luke is rebelling against his mother. It's about time! So he and Jackson must be obvious if Charlie and Simon, and Drae figured it out. Also, I think Jackson's mom knows. Why on earth would she tell Luke she'll wait until he and Jackson say their goodbyes and then she'll drive him home? If they were just friends, they'd say goodbye and that would be that. By giving them privacy, she's showing that she knows about them and it's ok. IMO. Yay Grace! Awesome chapter, Krista! I'll tell ya, I'm exhausted just reading about Jackson and Drae swimming so hard!

Hrishi should have told the teacher Marty wasn't bothering him. That was real shitty of him and I don't think it makes up for Marty not sticking up for him with his friends. Marty actually got in trouble because Hrishi didn't correct the teacher. They are taking way too many chances at being caught, with Hrishi starting them all. In the changing room -- shit, anyone could have seen them! Over by the yoga place -- we saw how close Jerome was -- if he showed up a second earlier he would have seen an eyeful! And now I have to wait a week!!! Nooo, say it ain't so, Sasha!!!!

I just read Spikey's review. I didn't know you could review a chapter before it's posted if you edit it. How does that work? Yeah, Wally better 'ride like the wind' to get away from Kenny! Shit, he doesn't need Kenny and Marquez after him. Damn, what is Kenny doing so far away from the school? Seems like the safest place for him to be is on that boat! No more exploring for Wally.

I'm glad Liam was able to get out of bed. I thought he was bedridden. That's a great sign at least. Nathan sounds like a great guy, checking in on Liam. I also think he had an ulterior motive, but Alek ruined that! Now, could Marty help Liam when he's released? Marty sounds like a great friend.

What a great chapter, Sasha! Hrishi is totally taking control. He's so right though; Marty needs to talk to Leon about what he said to Hrishi earlier in the week. Not because he'll be able to get into Hrishi's pants, but because it's the right thing to do. At least there's another guy who sort of called Leon out that day. As far as coming out, that's a big step, and personally I feel people shouldn't be forced to come out when they're not ready. I'm almost caught up, Sasha; you need to write more!!!!

"I thought you don't like me." "I don't. Shut up." This was so funny! I love when they're being 'friendly' with one another, as opposed to Hrishi putting Marty down all the time. I have a feeling Leon has no idea how hurtful his words are. He probably didn't even remember what he said or why he said it. And if I remember correctly, it was LEON who was walking backwards, right? So HE'S the one who walked into Hrishi, not the other way around.

I'm hooked! I'm hooked! What an awesome beginning, Sasha! I can't wait to see what Marty and Hrishi talk about in the computer lab!