Hi CJ,
The last time I checked, Circumnavigation readers weren't paying you enough to demand edits.
Criticism of what has been written is one thing, and it is how authors improve, but I think there is a difference between honest criticism and complaining, and I don't think you should react to the complainers by changing the story.
So my recommendation is that you shouldn't change the story to fit the whims of the audience. Tell the story as written in your brain, if not on paper yet. If you think it needs changes but can't figure out what the changes should be, maybe you should put it on the shelf for a bit.
I'd recommend publishing the next chapter, on, say, December 17th.
Your only other option is to turn it into a collaborative effort, in which case my contribution (because I will make one) is that I will write a chapter in which
- Bridget and Lisa become
- Joel runs off with Dirk to start
- Atlantis ______________ while under fire and
- Trevor and Shane reveal that they are in fact
In the meantime, we readers should remember that authors aren't being paid (full stop) to put out the story we want to hear, they're writing the story they want to tell, voluntarily.
PS if you want to do this right, shelve the story, but publish a teaser from the next chapter entitled "Everybody Hurts" and cut it off just before you reveal that
Signed,
Gene Splicer, MVP
(new account, long time reader)