Aditus
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Approximately eighteen months later… I was fighting to close the trunk of my car while holding two plastic bags with groceries in each hand, when my phone rang somewhere in the pocket of my pants. Usually I would have ignored it, but when I heard ‘Baby Looks Good on You’, my heart started beating faster. It was my ringtone for Val, Alec’s very pregnant wife and I was one of her emergency contacts. Add the fact that I knew Alec had a meeting with his publisher and his woman didn’t know the conce
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This year V-Day is in the middle of the craziness we call 'Rheinischer Karneval', were sex is guaranteed anyway. Don't know if you can double that.
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I'm glad the ending works for you. That's exactly what he needs to do. Thank you, avidreadr. I hope you'll like the epilogue.
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I'm sorry you feel like that. As I said before, Jonah is convinced he loves both of them, therefore he can't make a decision other than the one he did.Thank you, Puppilull.
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That's the key sentence Gary: some decisions make sense only to ourselves. The story is told from first the person perspective. Jonah feels he loves both of them and he knows he can't have both. He can't decide. You might have the better view, but he can't very well step outside himself and look from there. Jonah is the heart over brain kind of guy. Thank you, Gary. Reading your comments lets me see how you feel about the story, the characters and knowing I can do all that is very encouraging.
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In Jonah's opinion it was the only thing he could do. He thinks they're better off without him.But you have them all the time! LOL Thank you, Lisa! For everything.
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Do you know how motivating it is to read the first thing someone did when they came home was to read your story? Thank you Val! This story is written from the first person perspective, so of course it's very subjective. So what we read is the jumbled mess Jonah's brain is in. The decision he made is the only one he can think of, even if we/the reader can think of other possibilities. We wouldn't have a story though, if Jonah wouldn't be the emotional, sensitive and insecure (I'm quoting Tim here)guy he is. I hope you like the epilogue.
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But you can always say what you think. It's really difficult to answer this review without revealing too much, so I'm just going to tell you how much I appreciate and love your perceptive comments and thoughts.
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Chapter 10 Playing a Game of Hearts
Aditus commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 10 Playing a Game of Hearts
Okay, now I know what the others meant. Whew! But what I really, really loved was this: “Kendall, I need us to both be on the same page here. This isn’t some kind of trial for me. I don’t want to go into this with the idea of attempting to make this work. I’m already there, Kendall. The magic in your writing is how you handle the important situations. How you let them say the wrong things and I feel with them and the right things and I can feel with them too . The above shows it once again. -
Ha, yes we all can agree on that one: Jonah finally grew up. LOL Thank you, Chezakeeba.
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I have to say I'm a little disappointed with Kendall. Going into the shower in the middle of their talk and then laughing at Michael was not nice and to be honest even with a great deal of goodwill it is hard for me to understand how he could do that. I was so upset, I had to stop reading. I liked how you described the awkward silence after their dinner and the need to do something about it. It was very realistic. And well about THAT scene...well done!
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Okay, I promised a review. So everything the others said/wrote plus I have to admit Michael's mother is a bit much for my taste. It's a good thing that Michael and Kendall obviously love her way/nature/style and adore her. She helps them along well. I could absolutely understand Kendall sitting in his car, lost in thoughts. A car is the perfect thinking place IMO. Great chapter, Gary.
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I'm sorry that you were in a similar situation dughlas, and had to do exactly what Jonah did. You understand him though, and you know how he feels and why someone does what he did.Thank you for your insightful comment. *hug*
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I agree with you that all three lost their love(er) which is always bad. As far as Jonah can see it though, it's the best solution. Ren and Sandro are better off without him. He wishes for them to find a new love, a better love eventually, better than him. I personally think that's very sad.I'm glad you followed the story so far and really appreciate your thoughts and opinion, Dave. Thank you.
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Yep, he did. I'm glad, Lit. Thank you.
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Thank you, DeroiBlandDavis! Of course it's not bad. I would do the same.
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I'm glad. Thank you, Irri!
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Thank you, Cole. I can't say it enough, but this story wouldn't be like it is without your help. Jonah is now in a better place. He knows himself, his strengths and his weaknesses. He can't change who he is, but he can handle his issues better.
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I was walking along the fence of the old swim stadium, looking for a hole big enough for me to get inside. When I finally found one, I widened the wire mesh some more and climbed through to the other side. It had been years since I was last there. The outdoor pools were filled with even more junk than I remembered, left behind by partying kids, or people who wanted to get rid of their old crap. Rickety camp chairs surrounded remains of bonfires, and pieces of broken glass crunched under my feet
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Jeez! You're trying to explain 'When it rains, it pours' ? So much for staying under the radar of CPS...
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This was a calm chapter only on the surface, at least it felt like that for me. James and Casey have a nice day, but the missing dad and the blood in the kitchen is looming in the background.
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Fluffy babies, YAY! Didn't you say something about men and their dogs? Cats? Both?
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Why, thank you Cole! So you got accustomed to the bracelet idea? Good! And you helped me see the light with this one. Thank you, Cole!
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LOL, welcome to the creep club! I think the bracelets are typical Ren. It's his way to handle things. He has given himself time to cope with the situation.Thank you for your comment, dughlas!
