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April 18th to April 31st
Aditus commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in April 18th to April 31st
I love your unique perception of nature's wonders and how you sometimes weave daily horrors into the pattern-- to make me/us pause? Thank you for partaking in this year's NaPoWriMo. I'm sure I will be back and reread some of your poems, to find just another favorite. -
I like your collection, Gary, and your feelings about your things. (Feeling their warmth like a scented bath for example.) Like the others, I too have a collection and my greatest fear is that I forget about their meaning, like my mother. Haiku #5 and # 6 are my favorites. I enjoyed your poems with a nice cup of Maca Chai. Thank you.
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Chapter 3-Exploration of Tanka poems
Aditus commented on raven1's story chapter in Chapter 3-Exploration of Tanka poems
I love these. Som's tanka is a favorite. I can see her hunting with her golden eyes, feel your fear for her. You found perfect words. Your occasional alliterations made me linger. Flying feathered prey, raucous roar, or my all-time favorite, grim geckos. -
Finally, someone explains that to me.
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I'm glad, that's precisely the reaction I wanted.
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Thank YOU for reading my poems and leaving a comment. Soo, you like chocolate-covered ants? or chocolate ants?
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Well, now a cold got me too, I'm going to say more to your lovely comment, as soon as I can see straight again,. Get well, soon.
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:), me too. Thank you, for your kind words, Parker.
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You know me, there's never one meaning to my riddles/poems, but I like your conclusion.
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Love it! This is a great solution.
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1. April, you are my favorite; don't tell the other months. Your piles of white cumulus clouds, deepened by grey trimmings, make new green sway with bated breath beneath portentous skies, packed dense with a glorious storm. Capricious, rebellious, you're the mediator between torpor and heat languor. I declare this here, loud and clear, this year it's only you. 2. Sometimes we are multicolored facets, parts of a who
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Inspired by Jan Hutchinson’s prompts for National Poetry Writing Month 2023. As I said somewhere else, I won’t manage to write a poem a day this April. The start was delayed, as I didn’t want to bore you with unimaginative rants giving righteous indignation and certain occurrences too many words and importance.
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For me, Drudgery conveys the same spirit as Lesson Learned, hope within the daily grind that inspires us to walk on. As in the other chapters, your haikus are sparkling gems; this is my favorite: If in God we trust Do we leave it in his hands To protect children?
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Chapter 2 Lessons Learned
Aditus commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 2 Lessons Learned
Lesson Learned is heartbreaking and hard to read but as a teacher, I say the learned is definitely positive. Your haikus generate a Wechselbad (alternating hot and cold baths) of emotions. The snip of a branch Reveals a return to life Sticky sap its blood I love it,very evocative. Looking at the stars Makes light of our existence Yet soothes our torched souls Oh my, perfect. These are great, Gary! -
Your April first summarized everything I love about April; she's a temperamental lady. April 2. resonates with me even though I might want to exchange a few subjects: 'venerating vectors', or e, with Hardy-Weinberg or substrate-enzyme interaction, but Chopin and jazz stay. I simply love April 4. I bow to April 5. Here I take the recommended break.
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You have to try this emotional roller coaster! I especially recommend The Scenic Route.
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Bible Sex Laws in Limericks
Aditus commented on Refugium's story chapter in Bible Sex Laws in Limericks
Thank you for making me smile, one or two times even laughing loudly. -
Chapter 1 The Scenic Route
Aditus commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 1 The Scenic Route
The scenic route is an often used expression among my friends and family used sometimes in awe, jest, or even describing fun. You added yet another factor and/or element with your sensitive, playful, and sweet poem. Thank you, Gary. Your haikus made me pause and reflect. The second resonates with me, the fifth speaks of so much more than the few words indicate. It's perfect. The seventh and eighth made my heart stumble. Thank you for these, Gary. -
You're welcome. I'm glad you didn't find them too dissuading. Your interpretation was spot on. At least there is a way out when we open our eyes. Thank you for the great comment.
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Exactly, and sometimes a sandbath! Thank you, Gary. I knew you would understand my erratic mind.
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#1 I open my eyes and leave my head prison to walk along the freshly brown fields, rippled by a stiff, spring breeze, dust sloshes around my knees. #2 Lightning splits atmospheric nitrogen and oxygen molecules, which results in the scent of rain: Petrichor. It’s a warning. Beware of Earth doing a spring cleaning, water driven by her fury, sweeping away, dirt. #3 Water laps against the windowsill; delicate rivulets form seemingly-complex patterns. A cool bree
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I was exploring a strange mood, this is the result.
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Chapter 2-Haiku My New Year Explorations
Aditus commented on raven1's story chapter in Chapter 2-Haiku My New Year Explorations
No, you're not. That's just what friends do. -
Chapter 2-Haiku My New Year Explorations
Aditus commented on raven1's story chapter in Chapter 2-Haiku My New Year Explorations
Your poems want to celebrate life. You just did this with your new haikus. I love them!
