Timothy M.

He finally meets someone he likes - and he has sex with Joey while thinking of Colin. What an idiot ! I lost all respect and interest right there. And it seemed so promising a story.

Finally, I've been waiting for this chapter for a long time. I like it that they are still a bit tentative about their relationship, but still manage to commit to each other. Hope they have a nice sleep and a cuddle when they wake up. Did you manage to read the comment I left in chapter 1 ?

I totally agree with Lisa. Zupan needs someone who can keep him on his toes mentally and play games with him. This story looks like it's going to be a lot of fun. You've already run into one of the problems wth having two main characters beginnign with Z: getting them mixed up. Zupan handed him his drink, line already pushed down - should be Zander (and lime). Oh and you had how instead of who a couple of lines higher, but I think we all prefer to have chapters fast and with a few mistakes rather than wait for perfection.

Hmm you really have a fetish for guy's names starting with Z - although Zander did start out being spelt with an X, when Bay defended him in the bar. Anyway, it'll be fun to see where you take this . and nice that Issac and Bay can be the ones to help Zu sort things out rather than the other way round.

Am I the only one to feel that this story ended too soon ? There were so many emotional ups and downs (and mainly the latter) that two or three more chapters showing their relationship sailing smoothly instead of being in stormy weather would have been good for unclenching my gut after reading the first 31 chapters. Somehow I get the feeling that you like the drama but get bored with happiness fairly quickly. I's OK as you do write wonderful drama, but you could work on writing more of the aftermath. I think it would make your readers very happy. Because in fact chapter 32 (and parts of ch 30) were great to read, full of tender but still funny moments - and in any case I'm sure Bay and Issac would still have issues to deal with for a while yet. Anyway, thanks for a fantastic story, it will stay on my favorite list forever.

This was the best chapter of a great story (I loved the butt groping game), so I'm rather upset that it is also the last, and that there has been no update for a long time. I like the way that our perception of Sam and Dane changes over time and for this chapter also how we view Dane's friends. Aaron is totally cool.

Insanely hot ! But I hope they'll switch positions once in a while, even if Drew seems happy being the bottom. Or than Ethan will at least allow some mutual fingering time. Now Ethan just needs to sort himself out regarding school, friends and parents. But I'm guessing there will be some bad stuff with all of that, before the story is over. Just hope it does not rip them apart.

Fuck Ethan you really are mean and stupid. You could have averted suspicion for a while longer and protected your relationship if you and Drew had started to spend lunch together with the other guys. Why do you persist thinking with your dick - arrrgh though I guess part of the problem is lack of maturity as well as intelligence, I keep forgetting they are only supposed to be 14 years old, they come across as older most of the time.

so am I the only one to think Ethan an idiot for ditching his friends and not taking the chance to make Drew a part of their group. It's gonna come back and bite him in the ass, especially that he did not come clean to his best friend. Serves him right if they don't have his back when the shit hits the fan.

Will you please, please, continue with this story. I've read it three times now, and I'm desperate for more ! It's so fun and intense and even cute at times. Tay may be my favorite in both stories, but all of them are great.

Oh the irony of that last sentence 'where I could start over and hopefully not screw up my life so much' was just too hilarious. Hindsight is a wonderful thing - and I'll say again that your story just gets so much better and is more fun with the switches in time. Bay's parents are idiots, but I hate his Coach more. What a shitty, unfair thing to do - especially not to include Bay at the graduation ceremony, when he was their most important runner. Getting on that train might have been running away, but he was totally justified and better off.

Poor Bay - the one time he sees a man he really admires and desires, the guy is a nasty predator who demeans him by using female 'names'. He may have escaped the rape of his body, but his mind was fucked with and a whole load of issues were added. Yeah, I also guess that was the end of his clubbing. No wonder he freaked out as Issac's suggestion - but on the other hand: shame on Bay for not realizing that there is a huge difference between the man who loves him and has already given his body selflessly and people who disrespect him and try to make him into a 'girl'.

I think you are being unfair to Bay in this chapter - and the next chapter confirmed my feelings. And the fact that you've not described their lovemaking in any detail suddenly became a problem, rather than just being slightly annoying - ie went from 'nice to have' to 'need to have'. Cause I wonder how much access Issac has had to Bay's ass until now. If Bay has totally avoided even simple caresses, or if he has tensed up and moved away from gentle fingering, this should have told Issac that his boyfriend had issues about anal sex, at least as the recipent. And Issac should have figured out that there might be something traumatic involved, as the next chapter shows. And as the more mature guy it was up to him to ask about this gently and not during foreplay and in this way. On the other hand, if Bay was OK with being touched intimately in relation to his ass, then I can understand why Issac would be so surprisd and angry that he refused to receive - and in those words. But if Bay let Issac insert fingers, then why would he be so shocked to be asked to go the whole way ? But maybe he just ignored the possibility, the way he ignores most of his other issues. Just confusing... But I still think that Bay deserves more understanding - from Issac as well as us. Glad to see I'm not the only one to feel that way.

I've read this great story on Literotica countless times, I liked the few improvements you've made here, though I noted you didn't catch every mistake. My 'favorite' is in chapter 3 where they are suddenly naked on the bed without any indication of how it happened. One of the subtle tings is how you use Mac and Andy to show how Mike feels about his mechanic. And Mac realizes that, too, saying how being called Mac was like a jab to his heart.

A bit weird, but fun :-)

Thank you AK for the info about nifty, so that I could read the last three chapters of this great story. There's even a promise of a sequel, so I'll hope for that.

Blimey, once Aaron opens up, he really does let everything out, doesn't he ? We're talking major dam bursting here - and Ben's reaction after the flood is soooo cool. 'Yes, I'll be your boyfriend', just awesome.

I think this was the chapter where I realized how shy or even repressed and insecure Aaron really is. And the cliff hanger was hilarious, but also a bit scary. I had no clue how Ben will react to Bmad.

I always crack up when Ronnie and Amanda pull the 'complete make-over' trick on Aaron, I wish you had written that part in more detail, just to enjoy the sarcastic and uncomfortable internal ramblings.

Interesting that Bmad is already Ben now in Aaron's mind, but Dave stays Cosmo. And I just loved the reverse pick-up at the end.

This story is even more fun the secod time around. I just love the observations and internal monologue and the fake boyfriend scheme. And I applaud Aaron for not going up, at least he did have some sense left.

Totally agree with you, Thorn, that was painful. Not that I blame Bay for being scared, and I even shared his sadness at the fact that Alex changed when he came out. Hope Bay won't do that even when he has dealt with his issues (I'm gonna hate if he suddenly wants to wear pink). But calling Alex names was totally uncool, even more cruel than breaking up with him. No excuse for that. Loved the 'you can't keep running away' dig from Alex - wonder how many people will have told Bay that by the end of the story :-) I'm putting my money on Issac and Dale to be among them, but I guess Bay will only head the former, if anyone.

Having read this for the second time, I agree with the comment you made at the end of ch 1. The ending (and I mean this chapter as well as the next) doesn't fit the pace and tone of the rest of the story. Your gut feeling as an author is spot on I think. Especially the explanation (from Olivia) of why Michael never told Jason he loved him, and the idea that Jason wold have stayed if only he'd heard those words, seems out of kilter to me. Though not quite so much on the second read, but the whole flight scene still seems overly dramatic somehow. Not that I blame Jason for wanting to run, I really felt like slapping Michael for forcing Jason to submit in the previous chapter. He should have stopped assuming he knew what was best and actually tried to ask and listen and understand. And that's another thing I'd have liked to see from this story (not just in passing in your other main stiry) - that their relationship became more equal. Anyway it's mostly a great story, so thanks for the fun. However, I'm sure all your readers will appreciate a different ending - why don't you leave the first one up and do an alternative as well. That way you'll make everyone happy ;-)

Short but sweet. I like that Issac does not hide his interest in Bay (saying that he is there to see him), but without pushing. I think Issac knows that Bay will bolt if he takes things too fast, so he calms his boy as best he can. Clever and considerate, oh yeah I really approve of Issac, he's perfect for Bay.

So glad that Bay finally had a good experience with being gay. Even if it doesn't last, at least he knows what being in love should feel like. And I suppose he must have had some memories that would make him want to come out and live his life truly. Otherwis he would have stayed in the closet and hated himself forever.