Timothy M.

I quite like this story even if Caleb's rambling drove me crazy at first. So is there any chance of more chapters ?

I'm liking this story a lot, but you've just lost my respect by having Kevin and Cam deciding to have their son circumcised. That is so barbaric and totally uncool.

I can see why your readers love this story, I'm fairly hooked myself. And I find myself hoping that Corbin will find happiness even if he mostly comes across as an clueless alcoholic with a viscious vindictive streak when he is upset. As a European - and being from a country with one of highest per capita alcohol consuption in the world - I've often thought the US law about drinking age of 21 to be absurd. But reading this story almost makes me change my mind and wish that they would actually enforce this at OD. I keep wondering whether one purpose of this story is to make us disgusted with mindless, pointless, senseless drinking. If so you are doing a very good job ! I have no problem with people enjoying beer or spirits or whatever, but the amounts are ridiculous, and the negative consequences are beginning to pile up. Corbin is even starting to realize this, he's had a couple of moments where he tells himself he should try not to drink so much when he is with Pete. But he still drinks himself into oblivion, and he has no clue how this plays a major part in how stupidly he is behaving. I'm not surprised Pete does not want to get involved with Corbin, who has made no effort to get to know him, and even when they do talk half the night, he is still drunk. I almost feel sorry for Pete (and Mike) that he's probably lost his heart to Corbin, even if I feel sorry for Corbin too. But hopefully everything will sort itself out one way or another, although I'm not too optimistic, having read The List. Probably your main (and very impressive) feat as a writer is how you are able to make us emphasize with your characters, making even the dumbest stunt understandable from their POV. You make us accept them and even like them in spite of their flaws. For that I salute you.

OK, I've read the 12 chapters present so far, and I've thought quite a bit about whether to write a review or not. I noticed that very few people have commented, and this may be for the same reason that I'm hesitating. You've really made a great effort to write a dramatic and interesting story, so I want to say something nice, but unfortunately there are some major problems with this tale. I like the concept and the characters and the issues, so full credit for that. And especially that you made the mother the main problem, rather than the father. I can skim past and ignore all the silly bits about Brit royalty, so never mind that those soap parts detract from the whole. I understand why you want the drama of Chris being badly hurt and in a coma, so he has to be saved by Josh. And that you subsequently wanted Chris to get back to the Coach's house fast, so the story could continue. So I just pretend not to notice that he would have been dead, if the accident had really happened the way you describe. And that he would have needed a long period of recovery and physiotherapy and other treatment in the hospital, if he had really been so badly injured. The willing suspension of disbelief you know... Lots of other unrealistic stuff is also easy to shrug off - like the fact that Josh would never be able to perform on the piano after just a few weeks of learning. Or that Liz doesn't catch on after Heather talks of being dumped by her gay boyfriend. Or that you just have those Frank and Patrick episodes to give us some hot sex scenes, but never make the two boys real for us in other ways. Or that the older brothers would really be so irresponsible as to have a mock fight just there and then, so they knock over the ladder. Such things are just minor irritants. As is the last cliff hanger you left us with in chapter 12 - why do you think you need such silly nonsense, the story is intense enough without resorting to tactics like that. Comes across like another bad soap, I'm sorry to say. No the main problem I have with this story is about the dialogue. A lot of the time it consists of very artificial, idealistic, pompous speeches, rather than something you can actually believe that people (especially teens) would say. I appreciate that you want the characters to make statements that will show their integrity or honesty or whatever, and get your message across. But the more I read of this story, the more annoyed I get about this matter. And I'm almost to the point, where I cannot bother to follow the story any more, as much as I want to know what happens. I realize there is not much you can do about it, since the story is already written (as far as I understand), but hopefully you'll be able to use my criticism in a constructive way in future stories. But if nothing else I got to rant about it, so now I feel better :-) Good luck with your writing

Oh damn there's a lot of potential for heartache here. But maybe Brice would actually be relieved if Cody and Justin are attracted to each other. It would take the heat of him for a little while, as he tries to sort out his feelings. And if you can pull off a believable threesome (emotionally as well as erotically), I'm all for it. It would be awesome as well as very impressive - but I have faith in your abilities as a writer, and the title and intro do sort of hold a promise of this. And I guess we'll see some bonding over horses and dogs again :-) Not that I mind, I quite like your signature story trait. Hope you'll post regularly, I'll keep checking for the next chapter.

I liked the story, but I wish you had written about what happened in their school. Did they come out as boyfriends or was Tony still too scared to do this ? I suppose at least Jordan was accepted since he kept on with his sports, but it still seems stange that you ignore this issue completely.

Read all the chapeters in one sitting yesterday (and I should have been doing some work instead), and I'm totally hooked. You are a great writer, making your characters very believable and likeable. I especially like how our understanding of Jenny suddenly changed when they became friends rather than dating. I hope Corey and Clinton can help each other with the issues facing them from their surroundings. At least Clinton's parents seem sensible and kind. PS and I have a feeling I know what Clinton's surprise is, but I don't want to spoil anything, so I'll just give the intials R B and comment again if it turns out I was right.

Great story so far (I've read the first 19 chapters), but something caught my attention in the last chapter with the move, and I came back here to check. And in the very first paragraph I found the same contradiction, which slipped my attention when I first read this. You say (here and in ch 19) that he has had the same room for almost 18 years, but at the same time you say here that they moved to the house after his mother started working in the store (9 years earlier), plus he has memories of their earlier house and the surroundings and had friends where he lived before. I know it's a minor thing, but it still annoys me when the rest of the story is so very realistic and captivating. Can't wait to read more and hope it ends well.

Absolutely fascination and fabulous - but I'm so pissed that you didn't write that extra chapter about their weekend and how the relatonship went from there. And I also want to hear more about Glen and Jer, I liked them a lot. How about some chapters from other POW, like Jer's ? I wish I could work out how how I favorite authors here on GA, you'd definitely be on my list. And I like your writer's name too :-)

Good solution, but I would have liked more details ;-) You are a very good writer and I'm sure it would have been both hot and delightful.

The faster Aaron gets out of his relationship with Ben and back to Mark the better. But I guess he needs to be worked over mentally first, so that he is no longer the uptight, thoughtless prick, otherwise it would be bad for both of them. Hope you manage to take up the story again sometime, I really liked the Buy me a drink story. Almost in spite of myself - but the humor and quality of your writing actually made me enjoy the clueless drama provided by Aaron and the cast.

I like all kinds of fanfiction, for all of the reasons mentioned above. And I've seen some nice examples on this site already. But there is one thing I sometimes wonder about. Does it make a difference whether the author of the original work is against fanfiction based on his or her world ? I've read that some authors dislike the idea, others approve or just accept fanfiction as flattery. Should we respect their feelings or just say tough luck if the primary author hates fanfiction based on their story ?

I very much like their banter, fun as well as romantic. BUT not the best way to keep their relationship secret. Just takes one person to overhear and it's out. Oh well never mind, the story is great.

Just read the news about Robbie Rogers who stopped his football career and then came out. Some of the comments he has made about how impossible it is to be gay and play soccer at the same time just shows that this story is spot on. So sad. Great story in so many ways, can't wait to see how it ends. My only objection (to this chapter) is that you let them kiss in the car outside Peter's apartment. Way too risky even if it's away from campus and other parts of town frequented by people who know Jason. Kissing in any public place is not being careful.

I like all your Cathera tales, but this one is my favorite. Especially the interaction in the cafe at the start of the story, and later on in the coffee shop. I just laughed at the instant image I got of Calix's delighted and surprised face when Jerret asked if he wanted a kiss. It's easy to imagine them as business partners as well a s mates, playful and intense in both love and work. Wouldn't mind a sequel at some point.

Very nice and compelling - and impressively authentic on the Christmas tree farm setting - though you forgot the 'formal Noble fir' in the list of trees I would certainly like to read a sequel to this story, I have the feeling it would (also) be totally hot !

That was bloody HOT ! Wouldn't mind reading more stories about these two guys.

Very intense and gut wrenching. Please don't leave them like that, they deserve a happy ending.

Very sweet love story and I'm glad Justin was not stupid enough to reject love. But I also understood his reasons for hesitating and respected both of them for being honest and careful with each other. I had to look up the Reptilicus reference, I didn't know about this Danish film. Made me laugh.

Your Riding Lessons series are great and I enjoy learning about horses and riding. But I wish you'd asked someone with medical knowledge about the convulsions bit. It's a myth that you have to stick something in the mouth of people who is having an epileptic fit. In fact you are more likely to do damage to their teeth and tongue that they would do themselves. You're helping perpetuating this mistake, and I wish you'd let the nurse on the phone tell them NOT to do something stupid like that. But otherwise I'm hooked on this story and the characters.

I had to read this story several times in order to really appreciate it. But somehow it gradually got under my skin, and even now - though I know it has a happy ending - reading the part with the break-up makes my gut clench. Impressive in all its understated, tense, realistic romance. In addition, the idea that Marcus calls 'his biggest lie' is actually one of the things I respect about him. Even if in the end he does become a threat to Trevor's marriage, he didn't set out to do this. And so I feel that he is being too harsh in judging himself, even if I can understand why he feels bad about the affair.