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I am going to disagree with others' view of Leah: I don't see her as clingy - but rather expectant of attention that should be in a relationship. It is something Corbin can't/won't give at this time. Come on - he's 17 and their relationship started at 15. This isn't taking place in medieval times. Corbin's father is an ogre for sure. However, all feel trapped because he is the chief source of financial support. I feel for his mother, as she is acutely aware that she could not make it on her own and raise two kids. She will keep up appearances but live a lonely life! Corbin may well find something in the move...we'll see.
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In your other stories, you have presented fathers who are supportive as well as a few bullies/homophobic ones...I just have trouble dealing with fathers who do not support their sons for the mere fact that they are humans created by them and deserving of unconditional love and respect. Of course, I know in real life, there are the ones who deprive themselves of such a relationship through ignorance or having such a narrow view of the purpose of life that they are miserable human beings. That said, I wish Corbin had the opportunity to let his family move and allow him to live on his own responsibly. However, not my desires, but those of the author! I am intrigued to see where you go with this.
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I love that the wedding is happening....but I really would appreciate your tying up the loose ends from book 2!! Too much left unsaid. Still, your writing is amazing!
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You have so captured the "company town" spirit and mentality. While this is a different type of story for this site, I am really enjoying it.
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How depressing to see that Kyle finding his life choices so limited. You certainly are portraying a very gritty story in a very realistic fashion.
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Chapter 152 The Perfect Pitch
pvtguy commented on Dodger's story chapter in Chapter 152 The Perfect Pitch
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Epilogue - How It All Turned Out
pvtguy commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Epilogue - How It All Turned Out
I agree...this ending came about a bit too abruptly, but the hope for Book 3 keeps me excited! I'm confused however: You state: I felt really sorry for Dean's parents. Just as they had got their eldest Son back, they find out he is an incestuous rapist. This would make James Dean's older brother rather than his uncle. -
Joey is on the way to dealing with his issues. Let's hope that his counselor and he connect!
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I absolutely love the grittiness and raw emotion of this story. It certainly gives an insight into the life of a homeless teen, thrown out of home because of sexuality. While the street is not a safe place, it seems safer than the home wherein the youth previously lived. Tough reading and tough writing, I'm sure, but well worth it!
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So....Jack isn't the perfect person after all...he has allowed his own demons to surface. He has chinks in his armor too! Mum is acting mysteriously in Joey's eyes, but she really is trying to make a good memory with him. Hope it works!
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I do understand about most male rapes not being reported. And, truthfully, I don't see Dean going to the police either. I said he needs to go, which is true, but we'll have to see if he even talks to Joey. I hope he does and I hope Joey intervenes.
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Another wonderfully warm and gritty chapter. For those of us of a certain age who grew up as children of people who lived through the time period of the story - and we didn't have a whole lot more in material things either - it is a walk down memory lane. I love it! And I love your writing!
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This seems to be a natural progression in the story: the kids will come to live with Hunter and Dane. It must makes sense. Too sad that Belle has to die though.
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Dean needs to go to the police himself! He has the proof of rape with his physical condition. Jack and Joey are in for more growth. I'm looking forward, as always, to the next posting!!
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Oh the web you have woven...love it! More intrigue!
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First of all, I love nearly all you have written - I just am not as big on stories about other life forms (as I wrote to you before)...but even that was very well written. Now, as to this chapter: in that Brandon was able to process so quickly is amazing, but with all the labels out there, he doesn't have to assume that he is either gay or bi, does he? He loves Dana/Dane as a person - not as a sexual "choice". He loves the person and wants to continue the relationship with its changes. Isn't that what marriage is all about: growing and changing with each other through the years and deciding to be with one another as a daily commitment? Your writing is excellent as usual. Tony
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Olly's Black Book of... Well you know!
pvtguy commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Olly's Black Book of... Well you know!
I love this approach with the different POV's... It really gives insight into each of the characters. I'm glad "Mum" was so open to listening to Jack - also, that Joey has said he was going to arrange some help. I do love these characters and the story! Tony -
Your writing is so raw and real! You have an uncanny ability to capture teen angst in such a unique way! And the plot is so intriguing! I can't wait for the next posting!
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Paranoia and the Disastrous Party
pvtguy commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Paranoia and the Disastrous Party
And here we go. Joey needs some professional help - not with alcohol but with a good counselor/therapist! I'm so glad to see the story continue!- 9 comments
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Epilogue - For All Our Saturdays
pvtguy commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Epilogue - For All Our Saturdays
Not so much an ending as a stopping point....but I like that it portends more to come! Another wonderful story that has kept me looking forward to each posting! -
So much action in this chapter. I do see it wrapping up soon. But, like other stories, might there be a sequel? Joey seemed so together at the beginning, but his unraveling has allowed him more insight into himself. It was much needed. Roman was a good catalyst as was Dean.
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He'll Always Have Paris
pvtguy commented on James Matthews's story chapter in He'll Always Have Paris
I would imagine that Anthony (Antoine?) knew that Jack must be 16 in England to be legal. However, I do believe it was just a flirtatious moment. Joey and Jack are both young and both are growing slowly but surely. Love Roman! -
Oh to be young and give up a gallon! Jack handled getting his stuff very well considering. Glad to see that what happened between Roman and Joey is now out in the open between them. Roman is still young at 17, but acts like someone much older. There must be a different rate of maturation for the Brits!
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It took me a minute to make the mental switch of POV but so totally loved the descriptions from Belle's side. Great story continuation!
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What a wonderful conversation between Joey and his dad! It now appears a bit clearer what that "thing" is in Roman and Joey's past. And Jack is intuitive enough to catch the look in their eyes! Great chapter once again!
